ISSUE48 [KB 911]No.11

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题目：ISSUE 48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten." 字数：556          用时：0:45:00          日期：2007-8-25 I tend to fundamentally agree with the author's assertion that the most significant events and trends in history were made not by the famous few but by the groups of people, though the study usually places too much emphasis on individuals. Admittedly, the influence of the famous few on the situation should not be ignored, I suppose, still the major power that drive the society moving forward results from the groups of people. Foremost, it is true that in some occasions, the significance of the individuals is very enormous indeed no matter in the realm of art, music, or even politics. Generally speaking, especially in the ancient times, as politics are concerned, power are often held by some individuals; besides, in the science field, the very individuals might have some outstanding ability. Take Edison for example. Thomas Edison is well known for his variety of inventions, and he is also even famous for his insistent attitude on his research. And just because of his continuous hard work and insistence, the light bulb, experiment on which suffers from thousands of failures, can be brought into human's world and still serves as a necessary daily objects almost all the people own. Thus, from Edison's bravery and greatness, we can conclude that the influence on human's world, including the science, of the famous few is cannot be erased. However, behind these famous few, there might always be groups of people, whose identities have long been forgotten. When it comes to Edison's inventions again, even though Thomas Edison is well-known for his large mounts of patented inventions, most of his inventions is greatly contributed by the teamwork of his hundreds of employees, who cooperate and work under Edison's guide, in fact. Unfortunately, even though what the groups of people have done results in the immortal fame of Thomas Edison, they almost gain little. Consequently, many significant events and trends in history, maybe it sounds unbelievable, are basically accomplished by the groups of people who have long been forgotten. Finally, it is should be conceded that groups of people deserve honors since the contributions or even sacrifices they dedicate are so essential to advance the society. In the realm of art, Homer's great literatures Iliad and Odyssey, which impact the Western culture deeply and widely, are also modified by the followers of Homer; when politics are concerned, in the Second World War, countless soldier bravely dedicated their young and precious life for the liberation of the people all over the world who are under depression the Germany Nazi. These and other contributions and sacrifices of groups of people really move us from time to time and makes us cannot help applauding their greatness and unselfishness, because what the groups of people do influences or, to some extent, even determines the trends of the society substantially.  Therefore, the contributions and sacrifices of the groups of people should never be undermined for their greatness and significant fame.   In sum, I concede that sometimes the very individuals play a vital role in some occasions on certain crucial situations; yet the power and the influence presented by the mass is enormous, too.  Moreover, basically an individual's success is usually attributed to the efforts of amounts of nameless people, who deserve our honor, deserve the whole society's honor, for what they have paid for the society. 题目：ARGUMENT 177 - The following is a letter that recently appeared in the Oak City Gazette, a local newspaper. "Membership in Oak City's Civic Club-a club whose primary objective is to discuss local issues-should continue to be restricted to people who live in Oak City. People who work in Oak City but who live elsewhere cannot truly understand the business and politics of the city. It is important to restrict membership to city residents because only residents pay city taxes and therefore only residents understand how the money could best be used to improve the city. At any rate, restricting membership in this way is unlikely to disappoint many of the nonresidents employed in Oak City, since neighboring Elm City's Civic Club has always had an open membership policy, and only twenty-five nonresidents have joined Elm City's Club in the last ten years." 字数：459          用时：0:30:00          日期：2007-8-25 The author asserts that membership in Oak City (OC)'s Civic Club should continue to be restricted to people who live OC rather than the people only work in OC but live elsewhere. To support his or her assertion, the author also asserts that only the residents who pay city taxed could best understand how the money could best be used to improve the city. Besides, the author also cites a fact that in Elm City (EC) there are only 25 nonresidents are in the EC' club in the last ten years. However, this assertion has several flaws, which wholly render it unpersuasive as it stands. Firstly, the author fails to offer any evidence serves to prove that the people only work in EC could not understand the business and politics of the city. It is highly possible that the people also can understand the business and politics well since some of them are the elite level in EC, and therefore they have long-sight and general ideas or plans on this city. So that the author asserts the nonresidents do not understand OC is unwarranted.    Secondly, the author also cannot convince me that only the residents who pay city taxed could understand well how the money could best be applied to improve the city since he or she does not supplies any information on it. It is entirely possible that even though the residents live in OC for a long time, yet the residents could not know this city objectively and thoroughly since they almost do not have the relevant background; while the financial experts from other cities could clearly point out what measures the government should take instead. Without both of these two or other scenarios are obviated, the assertion will still remain untenable. Finally, the author commits a fallacy of vague data. The author claims that restricting membership in his or her way is unlikely to disappoint many of the nonresidents employed in OC since the neighboring EC has only 25 nonresidents have joined EC's club. However, without knowing the base number of the members of EC's club, the author could not conclude confidently that the 25 persons is just a bit share of the whole members, let alone conclude that the restricting membership in OC will be effective. Besides, even if the 25 people hold a rather big share of the whole members, still the author ignores other factor which could influence the conclusion: time. It is mentioned that the policy was adopted in EC ten years ago, so the author base on the assumptions that all the conditions which can contribute to the result of the policy of restrictions remain unchanged during the ten years, which is unsubstantiated, too. Without taking these two or other possibilities, which can serve to influence the conclusion, into considerations, the author cannot asserts that the restrictions will be effective in OC. In sum, the assertion which seems logical at first has several flaws within it. To strengthen this assertion, the author should prove that only the residents who pay city taxed could understand well how the money could best be applied to improve the city and the people only work in EC but live elsewhere could not understand the business and politics of the EC. Moreover, the author also should offers more detailed information on the base number of the members of EC's Civic Club and take into account the time factor.

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小豚对着个大百科全书找例子找的眼睛都要花掉了，来组里溜溜~
只看了issue,觉得看下来很顺的感觉，不至于看不懂（有好多人的我真的看不懂！）
但是感觉你例子前后的说理不怎么充分，例子毕竟是为statement服务的
语法上我很质疑的是你问什么加了那么多没用的is? is cannot be erased, it is should be conceded
可能是写顺了吧，要注意！
另外，例子到底怎么总结呢？