9月8号考，第一篇Task2，望大家指导

lazyboyUID: 2314767

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and thinl that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


  In the trend of modernization and globalization, people become more interested in forgeign countries and different culture. Actually, there are different types of ways to experience these, such as enjoying the pictures of foreign scenery, and the articles describing the special and strange culture, which is different from our own. However, overwhelmingly, the most  popular way is travelling abroad as a result of the growing income. Thus, there are some problem raised, such as how to deal with the cultural gap between the tourists and the hosts.
  On the one hand, some people hold the opinion that foreign visitors should obey the local customs and behaviour in their destinations. If we look into some areas where possess the different customs from the rest of the world, we can find something trouble us. As in Arabia, the people  symbolize the action of nod as 'no', while in other parts of the world, it is the symbol of 'yes'. Therefore, it may mislead both the visitors and the hosts during the pocess of chatting or bargain, furthermore, unfortunately, it can even result in some qurral. To avoid these unexpectable situation, tourists should do some preparation before their tour and follow the local customs.
  On the other hand, other people believe that the host countries should inderstand the different culture. The methods   of American tourists showing their appreciation, which is embracing when meeting at the first time, or kissing each other   goodbye, may make  a Chinese guide uncomfortable, for the reason that people often kee a distance from strangers, but in fact Chinese people can usually accept these actions because of our hospitality. To   diminish such embarrassment, the host countries should also comprehend the cultural differences.
   In conclusion, I think that either the tourists, or the hosts, should respect each other, and only in this way can they forgive some contridiction due to the cultural gaps and also bridge them.

MrCanantUID: 2284428

en ,写的可以,跟我想的思路一样哈

lazyboyUID: 2314767

是吗是吗？那谢谢啦！不过有什么意见吗？我说文字方面的

GriSSom.ZZXUID: 2234108

In the trend of modernization andglobalization, people become more interested in foreign countries and different(culture->cultures). Actually, there are different (types of->\) ways toexperience these, such as enjoying the (pictures of->\?) foreign scenery, (and->reading)the articles describing the (special and strange->\) culture (, which is->\)different from our own. (However, overwhelmingly,->Among them,) the most popularway is traveling abroad as a result of the growing income. Thus, there are someproblem raised, such as how to deal with the cultural gap between the touristsand the hosts.

（感觉你的开头引话题引的倒不错，没怎么重抄原文；就是没有明确的笔表明自己的观点，这个是这类作文比较忌讳的，下次写的时候注意一下就可以了）

On (the->\) one hand, some people hold the opinion that foreign visitorsshould obey the local customs and behavior (in their destinations->\). If welook into some areas (where possess->with) the different customs from therest of the world, we can find something (trouble->troubling) us. As in Arabia, the people symbolize the action of nod as'no', while in other parts of the world, it is the symbol of 'yes'. Therefore,it may mislead both the visitors and the hosts during the process of chattingor (bargain->bargaining). Furthermore, unfortunately, it can even result insome quarrel. To avoid these unexpectable situations, tourists should do somepreparation before their tour and follow the local customs.

（这个body除了例子有点大众化之外其他还好）

On the other hand, other people believe that the host countries should understandthe different culture. The method of American tourists showing theirappreciation (, which->) is embracing when meeting at the first time, (orkissing each other   goodbye,->which) may make  aChinese (guide???) uncomfortable, for the reason that people often keep adistance from (strangers->the people they firstly see). But in fact, Chinesepeople can usually accept these actions because of our hospitality.（这句想表达意思我不太清楚唉~~）.To diminish suchembarrassment, the host countries should also (comprehend->consider) thecultural differences.

In conclusion, I think that either thetourists or the hosts should respect each other, and only in this way can theyforgive some contradiction due to the cultural gaps and also bridge them.

（结论引出了一个互相尊敬的问题，但上文中貌似没有把是否入乡随俗和互相尊敬联系起来，最好在前面提一下；总之东拉西扯的都要和题目照应起来）

（总的来说lz文章的结构，观点不错；就是遣词造句还可以加强一些；另外，文中很多词汇错了估计是把文章敲进电脑的时候手误，就不一一指出了…）

lazyboyUID: 2314767

很谢谢你啊!终于让我看到到底有哪些不足之处了，我会尽力去改的虽然时间已经不多了！
还有，那个guide就是说导游阿，那句话的意思是中国人大多数都能够接受这些方式因为我们比较好客。:)
那个比较大众化的例子就是写的时候随便写的，但是我不知道有什么别的例子好举的，我这个人思维总是很局限，赫赫，楼上如果有好的新颖一点的告诉我一下吧，谢谢啦！

lazyboyUID: 2314767

那个第一段引话题的时候是一定要把自己的观点亮出来的吗？比如支持正方、反方或者中立？
ps：我要是在考场上写这么个东西能有多少分阿？6分有吗？赫赫我要求不高的

futuremanUID: 2327059

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GriSSom.ZZXUID: 2234108

1    一般是要明确表明自己观点的
2    这样的文章是否有6分不好说，因为没有横向比较的样子
3    新颖的例子其实google一下还是不少的...比如，貌似南美人不是很守时；中东人说话的时候对话者之间的距离更近

lazyboyUID: 2314767

哦，这样啊
原来连6分都很悬阿，我真是一点信心都没有了，刚才才决定放弃保研的...

GriSSom.ZZXUID: 2234108

我的意思是不知道有没有6分，不是一定没有啊...不好了，误导人了貌似...

lazyboyUID: 2314767

我的意思是说不确定有没有6分就已经很差的，我的目标至少是一定要有6分阿，不过也怪我自己没有怎么写

zrrjluUID: 2338426

放弃保研了啊？我想知道可以这边保研那边准备出国吗？嘿嘿。还有作文的时候是不是必须得有例子啊？但我总是想不到啊，阅历太浅了，呵呵。没有的话是不是很影响分数？