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lestouUID: 2260126

TOPIC: ISSUE87 - "In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
WORDS: 464          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2007-11-9 12:14:08

Many people believed that the beginners, who are curious about everything in any subject, are more likely to make important discoveries. Admittedly, lots of great discoveries are made by beginners, but a totally denying of the achievement made by experts in the process of these discoveries is also unreasonable. So in my opinion, percipient mind in anomalous outcome and experience in the specific domain are both dispensable to any great discoveries, especially for science.

On the one hand, the function exerted by beginner is of great significance. They are coming from a brand new start, full of passion, full of vitality, and curious about every aspect in that very domain. This keenness on the new things can benefit the whole process of inquiry, imbuing it with originality and getting rid of it old models or traditional methods. Sometimes, it is these new ideas make experts in a open-mind which eventually lead to some great discoveries. So these beginners are not just providing a vent for discoveries; instead, they are contributing their compassion, courage, as well as energy in the whole process of research.

However to say a "open-mind" from these beginner is important does not mean we can efface the function exerted by experts, anyway, when we find new ways of the solution to made new things out, we are just beginners, the key role lies in the effort to fulfill these good ideas made by beginners.

Expert, on the other hand, exerted a totally different function. They are definitely the focus in any workshop. No one will seriously believed that any one who have no experience in the particular field can make the same achievement to that of some one more favored. By listening to the new ideas find by these beginners, experts in charge of the whole inquiry would enlarge their eye sight on their subject of possible solutions. Trying to fulfill these solutions, they will manage to take the advantage of their experience to compare, to analyze, and finally to make their own judgment that they believed nearest to the truth.  On the contrary, as to beginners, if they want to make the same achievement, they have to face a dazzling amount of information, phenomenons, presumptions and finally to refine the complex body of knowledge into principles.  Retrospect the history of a series of discoveries, we can also draw a same conclusion that, they are actually found by those who are familiar with the background of the phenomenon. For instance, Newton made out the law of gravity through the falling apple; however the prerequisite is Newton familiar with the knowledge of physic domain. Assumed that Newton even failed to understand the theory of calculum, or some other basic theories,  and then what will happen? He definitely can not make such a marvelous discovery. This illustrates the point that it's crucial for experts to inspect these discoveries in their clairvoyance and lend their experience.

And more often than not, only being a part of the workshop in which they are participated in, beginners and experts will always influenced by each other. We may define the function exerted by beginner as catalysts when the actual  research of discoveries controlled by expert is the reagent, catalysts and reagent, both of them are crucial to the process of research, without any of them the reaction of whole discovery will not occurred.

When both of them appropriately applied, the boring process of research transcended, and a more effective one imported, which will eventually accelerate the speed of the inquiry.

[ 本帖最后由 lestou 于 2007-11-10 19:04 编辑 ]

lestouUID: 2260126

爱,郁闷.总是450左右.还是思路出不来啊,:funk: :funk:

5-fishUID: 2314532

占楼,等下拍

buryhuangUID: 2392485

鉴于组长未拍,先小拍

Many people believed thatthe beginners, who are curious about everything in any subject, aremore likely to make important discoveries. Admittedly, lots of greatdiscoveries are made by beginners, but a totally denying of theachievement made by experts in the process of these discoveries is alsounreasonable. So in my opinion, percipient mind in anomalous outcomeand experience in the specific domain are both dispensable(indispensable?) to any greatdiscoveries, especially for science.

On the(删) one hand, thefunction exerted by beginner is of great significance. They(主语承接不上,不是function做主语) are coming(进行时么?)from a brand new start, (with?) full of passion, full of vitality, and curiousabout every aspect in that very domain(并行结构稍显混乱,不一致). This keenness on the new thingscan benefit the whole process of inquiry, imbuing it with originalityand getting rid of it(its) old models or traditional methods. Sometimes,it is these new ideas make experts in(make xx in?) a open-mind which eventually leadto some great discoveries. So these beginners are not just providing avent for discoveries; instead, they are contributing their compassion,courage, as well as energy in(contribute to) the whole process of research.

However to say a"open-mind" from these beginner is important does not mean we canefface the function exerted by experts, anyway, when we find new waysof the solution to made new things out, we are just beginners, the keyrole lies in the effort to fulfill these good ideas made by beginners.(Chinglish, 太多从句,可以拆开)

Expert, on the other hand,exerted a totally different function. They are definitely the focus inany workshop. No one will seriously believed that any one who have noexperience in the particular field can make the same achievement to(as)that of some one more favored. By listening to the new ideas find(found) bythese beginners, experts (缺少连接) in charge of the whole inquiry would enlargetheir eye sight(眼光?) on their subject of possible solutions. Trying tofulfill these solutions(fulfill不太适合solution), they will manage to take the advantage oftheir experience to compare, to analyze, and finally to make their ownjudgment that they believed nearest to the truth.(平行,好)  On the contrary, asto beginners, if they want to make the same achievement, they have toface a dazzling amount of information, phenomenons, presumptions andfinally (have?) to refine the complex body of knowledge intoprinciples.  Retrospect(一般只用In Retrospect?) the history of a series of discoveries, we canalso draw a(the) same conclusion that, they are actually found by those whoare familiar with the background of the phenomenon. For instance,Newton made out the law of gravity through the falling apple; howeverthe prerequisite is Newton (is) familiar with the knowledge of physicdomain. Assumed(Assuming) that Newton even failed to understand the theory ofcalculum, or some other basic theories,  andthen(可以删) what will happen? Hedefinitely can not make such a marvelous discovery. This illustratesthe point that it's crucial for experts to inspect these discoveries intheir clairvoyance and lend their experience.

And(连接一般不需要and) more often than not,only being a part of the workshop in which they are participated in,beginners and experts will always influenced by each other(will beginners and experts be always influenced...倒置). We maydefine the function exerted by the beginners as catalysts(good) when theactual  research of discoveries controlled by expert is the reagent,(.period)catalysts and reagent, both of them are crucial to the process ofresearch, without any of them the reaction of whole discovery will notoccurred.

When both of themappropriately applied, the boring process of research transcended, anda more effective one imported, which will eventually accelerate thespeed of the inquiry.

总结:
楼主的论辩逻辑基本成立. 但语言基本语法,代词,词组用法小错较多. 容易造成以下评价:
grammatical mistakes or vague/incorrect uses of words may make the writing difficult to understand.

这也是我的T Writing 的其中一项weakness....

希望楼主暂时不要太注重限时写作,可以先用word review一下

lestouUID: 2260126

呵呵,出囚了,本来是用WORD改过的,结果忘记保存了.不应该,不应该,这里没有对大家不尊重的意思,请见谅
buryhuang 的当头棒喝非常不错,仔细咀嚼确实很多地方比较CHINGLISH,比如代词的使用,非限定从句的使用,这些东西确实也只有旁观者清. 大部分地方已经改过来,小部分我认为是行的通的. 比如RETROSPECT ...... 这个我是从5分范文中学到的.还有就是倒数2段的倒状句,这里有必要强调吗?不太理解. 文章重发:FISH兄可以直接看下面的:

TOPIC: ISSUE87 - "In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
WORDS: 464          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2007-11-9 12:14:08

Many people believed that the beginners, who are curious about everything in any subject, are more likely to make important discoveries. Admittedly, lots of great discoveries are made by beginners, but a totally denying of the achievement made by experts in the process of these discoveries is also unreasonable. So in my opinion, percipient mind in anomalous outcome and experience in the specific domain are both dispensable to any great discoveries, especially for science.

On one hand, the function exerted by beginner is of great significance. Beginners are coming from a brand new start; they are full of passion, full of vitality, and curious about every aspect in that specific domain. This keenness on new things can benefit the whole process of inquiry, imbuing it with originality and getting rid of old models or traditional methods. Sometimes, it is these new ideas make experts in an open-mind which eventually lead to some great discoveries.However to say an "open-mind" from these beginner is important does not mean the function exerted by experts can be effaced. After all, when we find new ways of the solution to made new things out, we are just beginners, the key role lies in the effort to fulfill these good ideas made by beginners.

Expert, on the other hand, exerted a totally different function. They are definitely the focus in any workshop. No one will seriously believed that any one who have no experience in the particular field can make the same achievement to that of some one more favored. By listening to the new ideas made by these beginners, experts in charge of the whole inquiry would enlarge their perspective on their subject of possible solutions. Trying to fulfill these solutions, they will manage to take the advantage of their experience to compare, to analyze, and finally to make their own judgment that they believed nearest to the truth.  On the contrary, as to beginners, if they want to make the same achievement, they have to face a dazzling amount of information, phenomenon’s, presumptions and finally to refine the complex body of knowledge into principles. Retrospect the history of a series of discoveries, we can also draw a same conclusion that, they are actually made by those who are familiar with the background of the phenomenon. For instance, Newton made out the law of gravity through the falling apple; however the prerequisite is Newton familiar with the knowledge of physic domain. Assumed that Newton even failed to understand the theory of calcium, or some other basic theories what will happen? He definitely can not make such a marvelous discovery.

But more often than not, only being a part of the workshop in which they are participated in, will beginners and experts be always influenced by each other. We may define the function exerted by beginner as catalysts when the actual  research of discoveries controlled by expert is the reagent, catalysts and reagent, both of them are crucial to the process of research, without any of them the reaction of whole discovery will not occurred.

When both of them appropriately applied, the boring process of research transcended, and a more profound one imported, which will eventually accelerate the speed of the inquiry.

[ 本帖最后由 lestou 于 2007-11-12 16:01 编辑 ]

buryhuangUID: 2392485

lestou兄,是啊,我也会有类似的问题...同勉...
那个倒置我以为是英文结构而已...呵呵
嗯,关于retrospect, 我是从babylon查出来而已...我不会用的啊..咔咔
不过范文据ets说明是可能包含了错误的哦...不过如果楼主有信心那就不怕啊