5f 11.26 作业 issue 5

anita840808UID: 2431016

词数：５６１
提纲：
１　统一教学大纲有好处
２　但应根据各地具体情况因材施教
３　什么样的教育才是合格的教育　对学生帮助最大

It has become increasingly difficult to ignore the top issue on education today. The speaker asserts that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different areas to decide which courses to offer. The statement suffers a serious weakness because it paid little attention to the practical situations in different parts in one nation. We can not definitely demand all schools to conduct one same syllabus. To evidence my view, the following argument is open to all.

Admittedly, the unification of all the schools in teaching plan can benefit students to a great extent. In the college education, it appears a tough trouble that students from different parts of the country are in different base levels. Consequently, it makes faculty difficult to well conduct transmitting knowledge and skills. Also if the courses and examination forms are identified in the whole country, it is likely to be convenient to elect talents all over the world. Accordingly, requiring all senior schools to keep pace in teaching for preparing to receive further educations in university is valuable

However, by suggesting the approach, the speaker ignored the different practical environments in specific places. The reality brings a large amount of obstacles to put the plan into application. The academic courses the school offers should be matched with the local customs and habit needs. In China, students in south would like to recieve the course of Mandarin, while students in north are not necessarily to take the language courses because they have no habits to speak dialects with strong accent or their dialects are not far different from Mandarin. By and large, apart from under the demand of center Minister of Education in the government, the local education should make necessary measures and plans on the basis of the practical situation for their students.

Last but not least, what kind of education can be evaluated as qualified? In senior schools, it goes without saying that the education is the last stage of the basic knowledge teaching given to the students, and therefore the school should focus its attention on the students' individual growth to meet the ever-changing demands of the universities. Only if the teachers give the guidelines to the students and help them to become the master for their studies, can their initiatives be well demostrated. As for the aspects of the conditions, the school had better invest aboundantly in its hardware transformation. In the force of teaching, the school is requied to equip with strongly capable teaching faculty, who will work diligently, creatively and efficiently to provide quality education for students. Both schools and teachers must stick the principles that to seek the truth from the facts, to pursue creativity and utility, the profound innovation in education and the constant further adjustment in teaching. Thus the education can be effective and sustainable.

In summary, from such like and these considerations, it clearly appears that the speaker's statement seems to be too idealist and fails to convice readers due to the ignoration of the reality. Education, as one subject about which contemporary people care deeply, should be developed in an all-round and balanced way on the basis of the real need of individual students. Therefore, the education can act on the principle that " All is for the growth of students＂.

[ 本帖最后由 星夜无夏 于 2007-11-27 21:56 编辑 ]

lestouUID: 2260126

1.很好的思路,统一教材,但是根据地区不同因材施教,是这个意思吧.
2.语言上感觉有点小毛病,短句比较多.
3.不过前面几段里面的句子衔接都做的很自然,有点NATIVE的影子了,学习了

komy_leeUID: 2364433

It has become increasingly difficult to ignore the top issue on education today. The speaker asserts that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different areas to decide which courses to offer. The statement suffers a serious weakness because it paid（最好统一时态，用pays） little attention to the practical situations in different parts in(题目中此处的借此用的是of) one nation. We can not definitely demand all schools to conduct one same syllabus. To evidence my view, the following argument is open to all.(开头挺好的，既很好地转述了原文观点，也表达了自己的看法)

Admittedly, the unification of all the schools in teaching plan can benefit students to a great extent. In the college education, it appears a tough trouble that students from different parts of the country are in different base levels. Consequently, it makes faculty difficult to well conduct transmitting knowledge and skills. Also if the courses and examination forms are identified in the whole country, it is likely to be convenient to elect talents all over the world. Accordingly, requiring all senior schools to keep pace in teaching for preparing to receive further educations in university is valuable（表达同样的意思，楼主比我的简洁顺畅多了，学习啦。）

However, by suggesting the approach, the speaker ignored the different practical environments in specific places. The reality brings a large amount of obstacles to put the plan into application. The academic courses the school offers should be matched with the local customs and habit needs. In China, students in south would like to recieve the course of Mandarin, while students in north are not necessarily to take the language courses because they have no habits to speak dialects with strong accent or their dialects are not far different from Mandarin. By and large, apart from under the demand of center Minister of Education in the government, the local education should make necessary measures and plans on the basis of the practical situation for their students.（这段的例子很贴切，不过新东方的老师说举例子最好举美国人的例子，因为改卷的人很有可能对中国的情况不熟悉。但是楼主对中国南北方语言运用的简短叙述弥补了这一缺陷，在这里还是能作为很有力的论据）

Last but not least, what kind of education can be evaluated as qualified? In senior schools, it goes without saying that the education is the last stage of the basic knowledge teaching given to the students, and therefore the school should focus its attention on the students' individual growth to meet the ever-changing demands of the universities. Only if the teachers give the guidelines to the students and help them to become the master for their studies, can their initiatives be well demostrated. As for the aspects of the conditions, the school had better invest aboundantly in its hardware transformation. In the force of teaching, the school is requied to equip with strongly capable teaching faculty, who will work diligently, creatively and efficiently to provide quality education for students. Both schools and teachers must stick the principles that to seek the truth from the facts, to pursue creativity and utility, the profound innovation in education and the constant further adjustment in teaching. Thus the education can be effective and sustainable.(这一段的论述很精彩，但个人感觉不是很切题。楼主持的观点很显然是反对，虽然第一段也简短叙述了题目观点的合理性。但总的来这一段没有涉及到统一安排和地方安排课程的问题，而怎样使教育更有效却是一个universal的问题，貌似在这里不适宜用来支持楼主的观点)

In summary, from such like and these considerations, it clearly appears that the speaker's statement seems to be too idealist and fails to convice readers due to the ignoration of the reality. Education, as one subject about which contemporary people care deeply, should be developed in an all-round and balanced way on the basis of the real need of individual students. Therefore, the education can act on the principle that " All is for the growth of students＂.(结尾没有简单重复开头段，很可取。不过个人认为最好还是点一下题，题目中有统一安排课程和地方自主安排的一个比较，而后者在结尾根本没有提到)

标记为红色的单词和句子都是个人认为有问题的。
以上之代表个人观点。总的说来，楼主的语言能力值得学习，变幻多端。

anita840808UID: 2431016

谢谢komy_lee的建议, 一针见血啊~
我会再仔细斟酌,稍加修改~~~