Issue36[desperado] 第一次作业 by Grace

grace040802UID: 2348819

Issue36【desperado】
TOPIC: ISSUE36 - "The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."
WORDS:  397        17:09 2007-12-8

Outline:
1.在政治领域,无论是在和平年代还是战争年代,伟大的领导人很容易就被他们当代的人民所敬佩.
2.在科学技术领域,现在有些科技还存在争议,不是当代人所能确定他们的功与过,如克隆技术.
3.在经济领域,伟大人物的成就被世人所公认,因不同情况而定.举"纳什"和"Bill Gates"的例子.


The speaker asserts that "The greatness of individuals can be decided by those who live after them,not by their contemporaries." In my view, the greatness of individuals can be recognized not only in restrospect by those who live after the person, but also can be decided by their contemporaries. In some fields, especially plitics, greatness is often decided in the early stages. But, in the other fields, such as biological technologies, greatness should be confirmed over time. In still other areas, e.g. economics , to identify greatness needs a short time or a long time, which depends on different cases.

We can easily recognize politic greatness-whether in war time, or in peaceful time.Because they lead people to fighting ageinst the enemies, such as the old society system and the natural disasters. History is full with examples of politic greatness immidiately recognized, then later conformed. President George Washington estabished the new freedom country-the United States-from the English's colony. Alberham Linclon abolished the slavery, owning the various races' respects. And Chairman Mao in China led the public to frighting the old system for the communism, giving the new birth to the oppressed people. Besides, the Secretary Deng Xiaoping, in 1980's, implemented the policy of reforming and opening, as a result in the fast economic developement. Every chinese thinks highly of his contribution.

However, in the technologies, it is not easy to define the value of greatness without the benefit of historical spective. The colone technology is now an arguable field. At present, it is difficult to draw a conclusion that it is good or bad for human beings. Therefore, we cannot evalute their notions about bio-technology to new scientific heights. As for the field of economicsmthe incubition period for greatness varies from case to case. On one hand, the mathematician John Nash'theorem "Nash equilibrium", who is the Nobel Prize holder, appoach to changing the attitudes of econimists towarding the economic development. Even he could not have predicted the impact his innovation could have the global economy and on the modern world. On the other hand, Microsoft's Bill Gates has made a great contribution, lifting American technology out of the doldrums during the 1970s to restore America to the status of economics power house and technological leader of the world. And this contribution is contribution is readily recognizable now-as it ishappening. Obviously, the DOS and Windows operating system, and even Gate's monopoly, might eventually become historical relics. Yet his greatness is already confirmed.

To sum up, the speaker fails to consider many great individuals, especially in the politics and in economics, whose contribution are highly honored as great even during their own time. Nevertheless, other great achievements, particularly scientific technologies, can be tested over before they can be confirmed.

[ 本帖最后由 grace040802 于 2007-12-25 21:18 编辑 ]

绿松石UID: 2427549

The speaker accerts（asserts） that "The greatness of individuals can be decided by those who live after them,not by their contemporaries."In my view,the greatness of individuals can be recognized not only in restrospect,by those who live after the person,but also can be decided by their contemporaries.In some fields,especially plitics, greatness is often decided in the early stages.But,in the other fields,such as biological technologies,greatness should be confirmed over time.In still other areas,e.g. economics ,toidentify greatness needs a short time or a long time,which depends on different cases.（用whether引导比较好）

We can easily recognize politic greatness-whether in war time,or in peaceful time.Because they lead people to fighting ageinst the enemies,such as the old society system and the natural disasters.History is full with examples of politic greatness immidiately recognized,（and）then later conformed.President George Washington estabished the new fredom country-the United States-from the English's colony.Alberham Linclon abolished the slavery,owning the various races' respects.And Chairman Mao in China led the public to frighting the old system for the communism,giving the new birth to the oppressed people.Besides,the Secretary Deng Xiaoping,in 1980's,implemented the policy of reforming and opening,as a result in the fast economic developement.Every chinese thinks highly of his contribution.（例子过后再分析一下就更透彻了）
However,in the technologies,it is not easy to define the value of greatness without the benefit of historical spective.The colone technology is now an arguable field.At present, ie is difficult to draw a conclusion that it is good,or bad （用devil就更生动了，简单词尽量用复杂词代替比较好）for human beings.Therefore,we cannot evalute their notions about bio-technology to new scientific heights.

As for the field of economicsmthe incubition period for greatness varies from case to case.On one hand,the mathematist John Nash'theorem "Nash equilibrium",who is the Nobel Prize holder,appoach to changing the attitudes of econimists towarding the economic development.Even he could not have predicted the impact his innovation could have the grobal econonmy and on the modern world.On the other hand,Microsoft's Bill Gates has made a great contribution,lifting American technology out of the doldrums during the 1970s to restore America to the status of economics power house and technological leader of the world.And this contribution is contribution is readily recognizable now-as it ishappening.Obviously,the DOS and Windows operating system,ans even Gate's monopoly,might eventually become historial relics.Yet his greatness is already confirmed.

To sum up,the speaker fails to consider many great individuals,especially in the politics and in economics,whose contribution wre highly honored as greateven during teir own time.Nevertheless,other great achievements,particularly scientific technologies,can be tested over before they can be confirmed.

1．Issue写个提纲，以后回头再看的话比较清楚
2．  有一些错别字，贴上来前先拷到word里检查一遍把
3．  从不同方面写，每个方面分别讨论，逻辑思路我觉得挺好的没什么问题，例子很丰富，个别语句再提炼一下就很不错一篇文啦

[ 本帖最后由 绿松石 于 2007-12-8 19:27 编辑 ]

anndyUID: 2436020

The speaker asserts that "The greatness of individuals can be decided by those who live after them,not by their contemporaries."(完全重复题目是否合适)In my view,the greatness of individuals can be recognized not only in restrospect,by those who live after the person,but also can be decided by their contemporaries.In some fields,especially plitics,greatness is often decided in the early stages.But,in the other fields,such as biological technologies,greatness should be confirmed over time.In still other areas,e.g. economics ,to identify greatness needs a short time or a long time,which depends on different cases.
We can easily recognize politic greatness-whether in war time,or in peaceful time.Because they lead people to fighting ageinst(against) the enemies,such as the old society system and the natural disasters.History is full with examples of politic greatness immidiately recognized,then later conformed.President George Washington estabished the new fredom country-the United States-from the English's colony.Alberham Linclon abolished the slavery,owning the various races' respects.And Chairman Mao in China led the public to frighting the old system for the communism,giving the new birth to the oppressed people.Besides,the Secretary Deng Xiaoping,in 1980's,implemented the policy of reforming and opening,as a result in the fast economic developement.Every chinese thinks highly of his contribution.
However,in the technologies,it is not easy to define the value of greatness without the benefit of historical spective.The colone technology is now an arguable field.At present, ie is difficult to draw a conclusion that it is good,or bad for human beings.Therefore,we cannot evalute their notions about bio-technology to new scientific heights.(colone的例子举的好，不过这段相对其它段落过于简单，加一些论证就更好了)
As for the field of economicsmthe incubition period for greatness varies from case to case.On one hand,the mathematist John Nash'theorem "Nash equilibrium",who is the Nobel Prize holder,appoach to changing the attitudes of econimists towarding the economic development.Even he could not have predicted the impact his innovation could have the grobal econonmy and on the modern world.On the other hand,Microsoft's Bill Gates has made a great contribution,lifting American technology out of the doldrums during the 1970s to restore America to the status of economics power house and technological leader of the world.And this contribution is contribution is readily recognizable now-as it ishappening.Obviously,the DOS and Windows operating system,ans even Gate's monopoly,might eventually become historial relics.Yet his greatness is already confirmed.
To sum up,the speaker fails to consider many great individuals,especially in the politics and in economics,whose contribution wre highly honored as greateven during teir own time.Nevertheless,other great achievements,particularly scientific technologies,can be tested over before they can be confirmed.

赞认证的例子非常丰富！中间一段加些内容就好。
逻辑也比较清楚。
最后一段如果能够进行一些升华，是不是会更好？
（新手，希望能多多讨论）
ps：很不好意思，这么晚才来改你的文章