ISSUE51|0806G-AW小组|第二次作业

guomin1437UID: 2411571

在作业布置前一天我自己写了这一篇,但还是又写了一遍,主旨没变,但感觉还是不舒服
Issue51
Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

How can we value education is effective or not, from the direction of whether meets the individual needs and interests of each student or others aspects. In a society where the rights of human being are considered to be inviolable and sacred, we decide the property of a thing based on the behalves of the individual. As a result, the individual needs and interests of each student should be placed in the first position when we design an effective education. However, education must be also designed on consideration of other social aspects except for the behalves of the individual.

For the mainstream of education is people and the aim of it is to improve the surviving environment of the human being, the education should be designed to teach the student how to acquire skilled technology to survive and how to utilize and appreciate the elite which was left by our ancestor in the activity of propelling the society forward to prosperity. With the development of technology and the man’s thought, the society has been driven into a high-speed road that anyone without knowledge would be filtered into the pit of history. When a man who has not received education could not acquire information quickly and effectively by computer, he would not find a satisfied job with a high salary which enables him to buy the needed accommodation and other psychic enjoyment. Education has the obligation to teach every member of the society to acquire the must skill in order to keep the society developing stable and healthily since the equivalent of education is a symbol of civilization of a society.

Nevertheless, the final target of education is to propel the society forward while we educate every person to acquire the survival skills, and as a result, we should include other social factors when designing the process of education. Although the developing speed of technology is great and unimaginable, there is also difference between good jobs and not ideal work. Anyone who is intelligent and smart enough would be like to choose the former rather than the latter, and only when the needs of both reach a balance could the society keep prosperity. When designing the scheme of education, we should set the major and its scale by the requirement of society. For example, when the students whose major is computer could find an ideal job and acquire a high salary after graduation, can we grant the entitlement to all the students who want to study computer?  The answer is obviously not, for we can not provide enough opportunities for all of them.

However, when we consider the requirements of the society and the needs of individual, we should place both on a flexural condition, that is, analyze on every special circumstance. For instance, when the society demands quantitative of architecture technocrats, the man who has an inherited disease of height frightened should not be compelled to study architecture. In the mean time, we should satisfy the requirement of a person whose has a talent and interest on the language of Arab although the demand of this field is little and there are adequate specialists on this. On balance, our aim is to make every person lead a happy life while the final aim of education is to achieve the prosperity and harmony of the society.

To conclude, when designing education we not only consider the individual needs and interests of every student but also notice the integral requirements of the society. The latter is like an operating machine while the former is like the component of it, and only when harmonizing the relations of two could the machine operate normally.                                           (610字)

[ 本帖最后由 guomin1437 于 2008-1-9 00:59 编辑 ]

guomin1437UID: 2411571

请教各位前辈,这样算跑题吗,我看了前面那位哥们的issue51
他说的是课程的设置
而我写的是教育不止为个人,而且兼顾社会,我忘记参考孙远的思路了

lovexxnuUID: 2376964

Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

How can we value(直接用value的不多吧evaluate会不会好些) education is effective or not(句子语法有问题，哪个做从句都不合适), from the direction of whether meets the individual needs and interests of each student or others aspects（这是单独的一句吗？怎么有谓语动词？前面这一长句建议重新组织一下）. In a society where the rights of human being are considered to be inviolable and sacred, we decide the property of a thing based on the behalves of the individual.（个人感觉前面这部分引题有些牵强） As a result, the individual needs and interests of each student should be placed in the first position when we design an effective education. However, education must be also designed on consideration of other social aspects except for the behalves of the individual.（前面引题都在强调个人behalves的重要，但是在however的句子中，转折后面的部分应该是强调的部分，与前面不相符）

For the mainstream of education（主语何在？） is people and the aim of it（its aim吧，of it 比较少吧） is to improve the surviving environment of the human being, the education should be designed to teach the student how to acquire skilled technology to survive and how to utilize and appreciate the elite（这个一般是指人吧） which was left by our ancestor in the activity of propelling the society forward to prosperity. With the development of technology and the man’s thought, the society has been driven into a high-speed road that anyone without knowledge would be filtered into the pit of history. When a man who has not received education could not acquire information quickly and effectively by computer, he would not find a satisfied job with a high salary which enables him to buy the needed accommodation and other psychic enjoyment（这个例子举的好幼稚啊 呵呵 感觉像是children说的话）. Education has the obligation to teach every member of the society to acquire the must（must有形容词形式？） skill in order to keep the society developing stable（stably） and healthily since the equivalent of education is a symbol of civilization of a society.
题目是讨论那种教育更有效，而不是讨论是否需要教育，这一段肯定跑题。

Nevertheless, the final target of education is to propel the society forward（这个上段不是已经提到了吗？） while we educate every person to acquire the survival skills, and as a result, we should include（we能做include的主语吗？we不能包含other factors吧） other social factors when designing the process of education. Although the developing speed of technology is great（speed可以用great来修饰吗？这里great是做伟大讲吗？） and unimaginable, there is also difference between good jobs and not（这个not是什么意思，错误也太低级了吧） ideal work. Anyone who is intelligent and smart enough would be like to choose the former rather than the latter, and only when the needs of both reach a balance could the society keep prosperity. When designing the scheme of education, we should set the major and its scale by the requirement of society. For example, when the students whose major is computer could find an ideal job and acquire a high salary after graduation, can we grant the entitlement to all the students who want to study computer?  The answer is obviously not, for we can not provide enough opportunities for all of them.
这段看了一半，后半部分没看，肯定跑题，不知道在讲什么。。。

However, when we consider the requirements of the society and the needs of individual, we should place both on a flexural（这个可以这么用吗？） condition, that is, analyze on every special circumstance（both是指哪两个？句子中有多个动词）. For instance, when the society demands quantitative of architecture technocrats, the man who has an inherited disease of height frightened should not be compelled to study architecture. In the mean time, we should satisfy the requirement of a person whose has a talent and interest on the language of Arab although the demand of this field is little and there are adequate specialists on this. On balance, our aim is to make every person lead a happy life while the final aim of education is to achieve the prosperity and harmony of the society.
跑题。。。。。。。。。。。。。

To conclude, when designing education we not only consider the individual needs and interests of every student but also notice the integral requirements of the society. The latter is like an operating machine while the former is like the component of it, and only when harmonizing the relations of two could the machine operate normally.  
最后一段没看。。。。。。。

建议先中规中矩的来写，写好了再往高的层次发展，不要大跃进。。。
低级错误很多，后面没仔细看                        

guomin1437UID: 2411571

感谢lovexxnu的批评,我会重新写过,至少大改,语言方面还有很大提高
由于今天和明天两天有考试,我周六再来