issue38(飞跃第二次作业)

lindaz2004UID: 2440733

The speaker assert that reading books is as important as it once before in the age of televission because people can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books before. When it comes to learning from television, I concede that in some aspects, we can learn from television.Meanwhile,in my opinion, in most aspects, we must learn form books such as acadimac secience,statistics and so on.
      Addimitly, television can imports temporal and spatial events and imformation around of the whole world to us in a matter of second.The television has some inherent merits than reading books.First,televisions offer us more accurated and convincing messages than books.Secondly  it provide vivid pictures and movements that make people understand the contends easier than reading books.Consider the formation process and traits of the hurricane,it is not easy to recounted by book and the reader may not understand it deeply by books.In addition,the television can provide the social affairs more quickly than reading books.Consider the researches of politics and commerce nowadays,the viarition of the current political stiduation and commercal characters may reflect on the television more quickly.The process of publish a book is complex,the messages may arive latter than television even  according to read newspaper.in short,the television is more suitable as a tool of learning when it comes to the timely affairs and special
      However, the speaker overlooks the disadvatages of the television.The contoller of the television may provide more attractive messages to people in order to increase the profit.So the contend of the tevision is not comprehensive.Meanwhile,the television may be controlled by the government which make the information conveyed by the television is not so objective.Because of these defects of television, we can not only learning from the television.
     Conside the advatagements of the books as medium of learning,Reading books can not be replaced by  television.When it comes to the acadimac theory and statics, acamdimac need rationations and provement,the process of rationation requires  refinement repeatly,these are not feasible by television.The statics require datas and caculations which is more acceptable to people according to books.Books aslo can provide the significant points and are portable to people, which are not requests the power, antennas and are not as heavy as television.Finally,the Books is more easier to conserve and review for people.We can save more time by reading books than watching television,especially when review knowledge.
      Accoding to the detailed discuss above,it is easily to draw a conclusion that television can import us temporal and spatial events,especially for knowledge that need accurate details, vivid discriptions and timely reflection.When it comes to the academic theory and statics,reading books has its inherent merits which is potable and easy to review and save.In final anlysis, Reading books can not be substituted by television.Reading books and television both play an import and necessary role as tools of learning in different case.

[ 本帖最后由 lindaz2004 于 2008-1-16 22:29 编辑 ]

Scofield_thuUID: 2447386

The speaker asserts that reading books is not as important as it once beforein the age of televission（题目中貌似没有这个意思，相反题目感觉有点电视代替书本的势头,所以我加了一个not） because people can learn as much by watchingtelevision as they can by reading books before.Whenit comes to learning from television, I concede that in some fields,we can learn from television,while, in my opinion, in some specialized fieldswe must learn form books such as acadimac secience, statistics and so on.(你是想说在某些领域可以通过电视学习，某些领域尤其是科学只能通过书本是吧？不要用aspects啊，不准确)

      Addimitly, television can show us importstemporal and spatial events and information around of the whole world at the same time (in a matter of second).In addition the television has some inherent meritsthan reading books in two respects.First,televisions offer us more accurated andconvincing messages than books.(每个方面最好展开一点，而不是只抛出观点没有分析)Secondly,  itprovide vivid pictures and movements that make people understand thecontents easier than reading books. Considering the formation process andtraits(什么意思看不懂,龙卷风的形成？仔细看我红字添加的部分) Just consider how an hurricane begins, grows and gets angry, how a amazing goal is shot by Michael Jordan and how the refugees in african starve to death.Is it a easy work to just record in words?Definitely thereader can not understand it deeply by books. Inaddition,the television can provide the social affairs more quicklythan reading books.Consider the researches of politics and commercenowadays,the viarition of the current political stiduation andcommercal characters may reflect on the television more quickly.(这段完全看不懂，单词要拼写正确，尽量用自己熟悉的词语)Theprocess of publish a book is complex,the messages may arive latter thantelevision even according to readnewspaper(知道你要表达书籍信息不够及时，但是没说清楚, 关于报纸according也用词不当,改写如下：)As a media, books is not up-to-date compared with other new methods, for  the information in books maybe out of date due to complexity of publication, which happens as to newspaper and magazines as well. In short,the television is more suitable as a tool oflearning when it comes to the timely affairs and special the timely information.
      However, the speaker overlooks thedisadvatages of the television.The contoller（controller是遥控器）administrators of the television TV channels mayprovide more attractive messages harass and afflict the audiences with a mass of advertisements in order to increase theprofit!So the content of the television is notcomprehensive contiguous .Meanwhile,the television may be controlled by thegovernment which make the information conveyed by the television is notso objective.(这句不懂)Because of these defects of television, we can not onlylearning from it.
     Considing the advatagesments of thebooks as medium of learning, reading books can not be replacedby  television.When it comes to the academic theory and statistics,acamdimac need rationations and provement,the process of rationationrequires  refinement repeatly,these are not feasible by television.Thestatics require datas and caculations which is more acceptable topeople according to books.Books aslo can provide the significant pointsand are portable to people, which are not requests the power, antennasand are not as heavy as television.Finally,the Books is more easier toconserve and review for people.We can save more time by reading booksthan watching television,especially when review knowledge.(错字太多无法看了，建议用word先修改)
      Accoding to the detailed discussionabove,it is easily to draw a conclusion that television can import ustemporal and spatial events,especially for knowledge that need accuratedetails, vivid descriptions and timely reflection.When it comes to theacademic theory and statics,reading books has its inherent merits whichis potable and easy to review and save.In final anlysis, Reading bookscan not be substituted by television.Reading books and television bothplay an import and necessary roles as tools of learning in differentcase.

红色是我添加或者改写的，灰色的表示我删掉的部分。
改一遍比自己写一遍还要累，向楼主强烈建议以下几点：
1.养成用word写文章，修改文章的习惯。一些语法和单词错误会自动标出来。如果这些基本错误改不了，还要别人帮忙看是很伤人品的：）
2.尽量用自己的熟悉的语言来写，比如自己写过的或者看别人用过的句子。不要想到中文意思再写，或者查字典非得写出来不可：）
3.多学习范文中的的一些提出问题，展开阐述，归纳总结的常用句型。形成自己的写作风格。比如这篇修改文章中的最后一段就不错，其他段落要差很多。
4.理解题目意思很重要
5.文章第一段能占一半的分。要多注意！！



[ 本帖最后由 Scofield_thu 于 2008-1-17 11:07 编辑 ]

lindaz2004UID: 2440733

非常谢谢，我以后多多注意:loveliness: