Issue48 0806G加速度小组第三次作业大帖

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TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
WORDS: 602          TIME: 01:04:19          DATE: 2008/1/19 16:46:04

When I was still a young boy, my mother often told the stories about Chair Mao and Abraham Lincoln, who in her mind are heroes that changed the way the stream of history flows by themselves and I was taught to a man like them. In the statement, however, it claims that it is the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten that made the most significant events and trends in history instead of the famous few, which I take the leave to doubt, in my viewpoint, in some cases it is the famous few who did that while in others cases the groups of people are the main force.

On the one hand, it is the famous individuals who changed the world in the way which they think are right. Take Albert Einstein, the man who is widely consider the most valuable in the 20th century as an example. At his time, physics had come to a point that anxiously needs a significant change from the basic in order to explain some phenomenon that could not be solved by Newton's theory. With the famous "general and special theory of relativity", Einstein not only solved the difficulties but also made the modern civilization possible in aspects such as the widely use of nuclear energy and space flying. Is there a group of people behind him when he came up with the glorious theories? No, maybe you may think it is too absolute; I have to admit that some people really did give him some help at that time, but it has nothing to do with his work and it explains why the Nobel Price was given to him alone fairly well.

On the other hand, some groups of people behind the heroes actually plays a more important role in the significant events in some cases in history. Sometimes it is the hero who makes the decision of an event, but whether the order could be well accomplished depends on the men who actually do it. As we all know that the battles in China were the most fierce ones in the Second World War then, with the orders of unite all kinds of political parties to resist the Japanese, Chair Mao really did make a difference, and when we talked about that periods in history, we remembered Chair Mao as the one who defeated the Japanese, however, what we fails to see is that millions of Chinese soldiers died in the battles against the Japanese, they sacrificed their lives in order to save the country they loved deeply with no haste. Although their identities are forgotten, what we have to keep in mind is that without them, nothing could really be done under the notion that "beat the Japanese" at that time, they are also the heroes. In the United States, it is the president who makes the final decision when the country is faced with difficulties and dangers, we really appreciate them for their intelligence and determination while we naturally ignores those who give him the suggestions and information that help him greatly before the final decision is made. It seems that it has become a "law" for us to forget the people who really make through the events in history and only remember the one who is actually the "represent" of them.

In sum, next time when your mother tell you the stories about the famous people, try to ask her whether there are the ones behind him which are ignored by us and keep in mind that history sometimes is written by some heroes and sometimes not.

雪梦无痕UID: 2447732

占座

loogloogUID: 2447845

我写了两遍，觉得老不对劲！QQQ

It is worth for us to think over that whether the groups forgotten people contributed equally with the famous ones! The speaker claims that the contributions from the groups of people are more than the famous individuals, when considering the most significant events and trends in history. However, in the history we can clearly find that the leader contribute more to the evolution than the behind people, specially in academic research, politics evolution and art.

First of all, in academic research, a famous is the famous just because of the great advances he or she made ahead of the others. In other words, the famous contribute more to the significant events and trends. If we deny that, the Nobel Prize will lose his value in the area of academic research. And the real who obtain the breakthrough cannot be encouraged so that all of the scientists are falling in addictive of enjoy. Without the famous ones, maybe the “General Relative” is still in the dark corner waiting for being discovered by a diligence. Or perhaps, The Penicillin cannot be found to help us fighting for the pathogeny so that we are staying in the dark.  In short, in academic research, the famous ones indeed are the great contributors. Undoubtedly, they should be emphasis on in the history of the academic advancing, instead of the people moiled without any achievement.

Furthermore, the politics evolution also yields to the similar ruler as the academic research. In other words, the leader of the politics evolution devoted more than the others enjoining in the processing of the evolution, since the leader enjoins from the start and devotes his wisdom, courage and power. For instance, Chair Mao is a famous president in China, even in the world, because of his devotion to the evolution of China and his wisdom of handling the accidents from international. Do you imagine that the evolution of China can be success without Mao? Obviously, Only with Mao, the evolution would success from the angle of historic, which is the cause for emphasis on him. Similarly, the other politic leaders experience the same condition, such as Lincoln, Washington, Napoleon etc.

Thirdly, the famous artist is always the single one who achieved the great advances besides of his or her family. For instance, Van gogh is the harbinger of the Abstractionist, and along his life of the art, no one would help him or create the same height as him. The groups of forgotten people are the adherents whose achievement cannot be compared with Van gogh. Another case can be found in the field of music. In the life of Mazart, he improved the classic music into a new level. And the groups of people behind him were only himself. Thus, the artist is single and sole when chasing the new style of art, while the others are just the adherents.

On the other hand, we should memorialize the common people behind the famous ones. It is just them that helping the famous and improving and encouraging the famous advancing to a new level. Without them, the water in the historic river would be still; and inspiration and vibrancy cannot cultivate well. Indeed, the historians remember them by applying the leader of them representing them standing at the suitable position of history.

In summary, it is credible and reliable that the study of history playing too much emphasis on the famous individual, taking their devotions into accounts. However, the forgotten one is not really forgotten, since the leader of them present them standing in the suitable position of history.


[ 本帖最后由 loogloog 于 2008-1-20 17:18 编辑 ]

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占座！ 改路遥的

When I was still a young boy, my mother often told the stories about Chair Mao and Abraham Lincoln, who in her mind are heroes that changed the way the stream of history flows by themselves and I was taught to a man like them. In the statement, however, it claims that it is the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten that made the most significant events and trends in history instead of the famous few, which I take the leave to doubt, in my viewpoint, in some cases it is the famous few who did that while in others cases the groups of people are the main force.（总觉得断句不清，好难受！）On the one hand, it is the famous individuals who changed the world in the way which they think are right.(定语从句有问题：which is supposed right) Take Albert Einstein, the man who is widely consider the most valuable in the 20th century as an example.(这样写好些吧：Take albert Einstein as an example, the man who………..) At his time, physics had come to a point that anxiously needs(这样怎么样：physics had come to a crisis that a significant change are proposed from the basic of Newton’s theory, since some discovered phenomenon cannot be explained well with it, including the transmitting of light, the speed of light etc. ) a significant change from the basic in order to explain some phenomenon that could not be solved by Newton's theory. With the famous "general and special theory of relativity", Einstein not only solved the difficulties but also made the modern civilization possible in aspects such as the widely use of nuclear energy and space flying. Is there a group of people behind him when he came up with the glorious theories? No, maybe you may think it is too absolute; I have to admit that some people really did give him some help at that time, but it has nothing to do with his work(太绝对了吧，说contribute less than him比较好) and it explains why the Nobel Price(prize) was given to him alone fairly well.（大哥，Einstein不是因为广义狭义相对论获得的Nobel Prize）On the other hand, some groups of people behind the heroes actually plays (play)a more important role in the significant events in some cases in history. Sometimes it is the hero who makes the decision of an event, but whether the order could be well accomplished depends on the men who actually do it. As we all know(known) that the battles in China were the most fierce ones in the Second World War then, with the orders of unite all kinds of political parties to resist the Japanese(with the responsibility to unite all classes to resist the Japan militarism), Chair Mao really did make a difference, and when we talked about that periods in history, we remembered Chair Mao as the one who defeated the Japanese, however, what we fails to see is that millions of Chinese soldiers died in the battles against the Japanese, they sacrificed their lives in order to save the country they loved deeply with no haste. Although their identities are forgotten, what we have to keep in mind is that without them, nothing could really be done under the notion that "beat the Japanese" at that time, they are also the heroes. In the United States, it is the president who makes the final decision when the country is faced with difficulties and dangers, we really appreciate them for their（是president 还是下面的人？？指代不清楚） intelligence and determination while we naturally ignores those who give him the suggestions and information that help him greatly before the final decision is made.（有几个句子呀？？） It seems that it has become a "law" for us to forget the people who really make through the events in history and only remember the one who is actually the "represent" of them.In sum, next time when your mother tell you the stories about the famous people, try to ask her whether there are the ones behind him which are ignored by us and keep in mind that history sometimes is written by some heroes and sometimes not.
写了两方面，不过觉得论证过程不清楚，觉得很混乱。
把第一段改成这样： TS + instance(background +contribution+condition这个定要重点突出其独自一人完成的+小结 )
第二段改成这样吧：TS+同义重复+例子（background + contribution + condition突出人民的重要性，without the groups behind Mao, Mao is just a failing famous, even as a common person as the others）
总觉得读起来很别扭，从句太。。让我找不到头绪！

[ 本帖最后由 loogloog 于 2008-1-19 21:41 编辑 ]

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Issue48 0806G加速度小组第三次作业

不好意思 可能网络出了问题 不小心回复了两篇

[ 本帖最后由 xiayanshadow 于 2008-1-19 21:10 编辑 ]

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Issue48 0806G加速度小组第三次作业

TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."WORDS: 602          TIME: 01:04:19          DATE: 2008/1/19 16:46:04When I was still a young boy, my mother often told the stories about Chair Mao（毛主席应该是Chairman Mao） and Abraham Lincoln, who in her mind are heroes that changed the way the stream of history flows by themselves and I was taught to (be) a man like them. In the statement, however, it claims that it is the groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten that made the most significant events and trends in history instead of the famous few, which I take the leave to doubt, in(大写) my viewpoint, in some cases it is the famous few who did that while in others cases the groups of people are the main force.（这段感觉怪怪的。。。前面说从小就受到这样的教育，现在看到statement里面的说法，然后就突然变成两面派的观点了～。～！觉得前后的逻辑有点突然。。。还有就是我不知道在哪本书上看见一个tips，说最好不要写自己的经历）On the one hand, it is the famous individuals who changed the world in the way which they think are right. Take Albert Einstein, the man who is widely consider（considered） the most valuable in the 20th century as an example. At his time(In his time吧？), physics（要大写） had come to a point that （这里少了个主语） anxiously needs a significant change from the basic in order to explain some phenomenon that could not be solved by Newton's theory. With the famous "general and special theory of relativity", Einstein not only solved the difficulties but also made the modern civilization possible in aspects such as the widely use of nuclear energy and space flying. Is there a group of people behind him when he came up with the glorious theories? No,（No就已经是一个句子了，所以要用句号）maybe（大写）you may think it is too absolute; I have to admit that some people really did give him some help at that time, but it has nothing to do with his work and it explains why the Nobel Price was given to him alone fairly well. On the other hand, some groups of people behind the heroes actually plays a more important role in the significant events in some cases in history. Sometimes it is the hero who makes the decision of an event, but whether the order could be well accomplished depends on the men who actually do it. As we all know that （这里句法错了，As we all know, ….或者It is known to all that…）the battles in China were the most fierce ones in the Second World War then, with the orders of unite all kinds of political parties to resist the Japanese, Chair Mao really did make a difference, and when we talked about that periods in history, we remembered Chair Mao as the one who defeated the Japanese, however, what we fails to see is that millions of Chinese soldiers died in the battles against the Japanese, they sacrificed their lives in order to save the country they loved deeply with no haste. Although their identities are forgotten, what we have to keep in mind is that without them, nothing could really be done under the notion that "beat the Japanese" at that time, they are also the heroes. In the United States, it is the president who makes the final decision when the country is faced with difficulties and dangers, we really appreciate them for their intelligence and determination while we naturally ignores those who give him the suggestions and information that help him greatly before the final decision is made. It seems that it has become a "law" for us to forget the people who really make through the events in history and only remember the one who is actually the "represent" of them.In sum, next time when your mother(我觉得前后不是非常对照，第一是my mother tells me，这一段怎么变成when your mother了。。。) tell you the stories about the famous people, try to ask her whether there are the ones behind him which are ignored by us and keep in mind that history sometimes is written by some heroes and sometimes not.