argument179 [spring小组] 第十一次作业

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   In the memorandum, the director recommends the president of the Cedar Corporation that they should replace Good-taste Company (G) with Discount(D) Company to  provide meals for the employee’s cafeteria. The director proposes this suggestion on the ground of G’s high price and refusal to provide meals for people on special diets, as well as the three employee’s complaints about the unbearable experience of cafeteria and other features of D. Although the director lists many evidence to support his suggestion, still he has little chance to persuade the president for the evidence is unreliable and insufficient.
   To begin with, the information about the prices of the two companies is insufficient to draw a conclusion that G has a higher price than D. In spite of the fact that G is the second most expensive food caterer in the city, but who is the first most expensive one? Since no information about D’s price is provided, it is possible D could be that one. Also, the risen price in the past two years does not necessarily means the price of G would still rise in the next year. Taking these factors into account, it is unreliable to assume that hiring D will cost less.
   Also, the fact that three employees complain about the unbearable experience of eating in the cafeteria can not consequently prove that G has provide a dissatisfied food service. On one hand, many factors may contribute to the unbearable experience, such as poor environment of the cafeteria, bad service, and even personal food choice. No information is given to prove that it is the food provided by G results in the unbearable experience. On the other hand, three employees’ dissatisfactions are far from enough to represent all employees’ attitude. Unless more investigation which involves the majority of employees’ opinions is taken, I am not convinced with the assertion that G has provided dissatisfied food.
   What’s more, the features of D which are described in the memo can not guarantee that D transcends G. First, as I mentioned in the second paragraph, no information is provided of D’s price. Second, a varied menu of fish and poultry does not indicate it can provide various dishes and has the capability to meet the need of those on special diets. Hence, to convince me that D can provide more types of dishes and meet the needs of those on special diets, a comparison between the two companies’ menu must be made.

    In addition, the director’s assumption hiring D as the food caterer will lead to increased satisfaction is problematic for it based on his or her one time degustation of D’s food. Different people have different taste; in all likelihood, the director’s taste can not stand for the collective’s. In order to ensure that the majority of employees would favor the food of D, it is better to let most of them taste D’s food in person.
    Finally, the standard to evaluate food caterers is not only based on whether they can provide delicious food at a low cost. Many other factors should be taken into consideration, like the nutrition of food and the hygiene condition. As the memo mentioned, D is a family-owned local company; it is highly dubious that if it can adopt a series of antiseptic measures to provide sanitary food.
    From all the analysis above, we can see that the memo is unpersuasive. To strength it, specific investigation about the collective’s opinion of G’s food should be involved and more detail information such as, the price, types of food, hygiene conditions should be provided to make a correct decision.

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In the memorandum, the director recommends the president of the Cedar Corporation that they should replace Good-taste Company (G) with Discount(D) Company to  provide meals for the employee’s cafeteria. The director proposes this suggestion on the ground of G’s high price and refusal to provide meals for people on special diets, as well as the three employee’s complaints about the unbearable experience of cafeteria and other features of D. Although the director lists many evidence to support his suggestion, still he has little chance to persuade the president for the evidence is unreliable and insufficient.
   To begin with, the information about the prices of the two companies is insufficient to draw a conclusion that G has a higher price than D. In spite of the fact that G is the second most expensive food caterer in the city, but who is the first most expensive one? Since no information about D’s price is provided, it is possible D could be that one. Also, the risen price in the past two years does not necessarily means the price of G would still rise in the next year. Taking these factors into account, it is unreliable to assume that hiring D will cost less.
   Also, the fact that three employees complain about the unbearable experience of eating in the cafeteria can not consequently prove that G has provided a dissatisfied food service. On one hand, many factors may contribute to the unbearable experience, such as poor environment of the cafeteria, bad service, and even personal food choice. No information is given to prove that it is the food provided by G results in the unbearable experience. On the other hand, three employees’ dissatisfactions are far from enough to represent all employees’ attitude. Unless more investigation which involves the majority of employees’ opinions is taken, I am not convinced with the assertion that G has provided dissatisfied food.
   What’s more, the features of D which are described in the memo can not guarantee that D transcends G. First, as I mentioned in the second paragraph, no information is provided of D’s price. Second, a varied menu of fish and poultry does not indicate it can provide various dishes and has the capability to meet the need of those on special diets. Hence, to convince me that D can provide more types of dishes and meet the needs of those on special diets, a comparison between the two companies’ menu must be made.

    In addition, the director’s assumption hiring D as the food caterer will lead to increased satisfaction is problematic for it based on his or her one time degustation of D’s food. Different people have different taste; in all likelihood, the director’s taste can not stand for the collective’s. In order to ensure that the majority of employees would favor the food of D, it is better to let most of them taste D’s food in person.
    Finally, the standard to evaluate food caterers is not only based on whether they can provide delicious food at a low cost. Many other factors should be taken into consideration, like the nutrition of food and the hygiene condition. As the memo mentioned, D is a family-owned local company; it is highly dubious that if it can adopt a series of antiseptic measures to provide sanitary food.
    From all the analysis above, we can see that the memo is unpersuasive. To strength it, specific investigation about the collective’s opinion of G’s food should be involved and more detail information such as, the price, types of food, hygiene conditions should be provided to make a correct decision.
[ 小结]
笔者经过多次练习，argument的写作流畅清晰，用词造句都很不错，基本没什么错误，看来我得多多学习。