issue41-[GRE-AWER]小组第五次作业

一波疏影UID: 2428286

题目：ISSUE41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
字数：645          日期：2008-1-27 10:41:08
提纲：1.存在的原因。
2.存在有什么好处。
3存在有什么弊端。
4正确地对待不可一言以蔽之。
Whether the nonmainstream area of inquiry as astrology, fortunetelling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits can play a vital role in society? Do really the nonmainstream can satisfying human needs which are not addressed by mainstream science? The speaker claims this view; however, in my part of view, this opinion final judge should depend on a case-by-case analysis of the situations as follows.

The reason that nonmainstream areas of inquiry can exist is because some phenomena which cannot get well explained by the mainstream science in the past. Before many years ago, the ancient people could not totally understand what happened in the nature, and they turn the answer to the astrology and the fortunate.  They hope the nonmainstreams can help them and answer their problem which no one can really understand. Depend on the nonmainstreams they found some secrets which they think it correctly and can be accept answers in the nature.

More over, the reason that why nonmainstream areas can exist thousands of years and still hold considerable influence over the masses as follows. The first of all, people are born with curious, for people with such an anxious propensity to konw their fate and future, whether good or bad, then at this situation the astrology and fortune-telling and psychic sever as a kind of comfort and appease our soul .The second, ignorance, which largely originates from lack of education, allows for acceptance of such metaphysical research. Our civilization and culture has survived since ancient times, when people were ignorant of the cause of natural phenomena. The only way to explain events was to resort to areas like astrology, which respect roles as the source of truth. Even with thousands of year of social evolution, some portion of those traditional cultures remains intact as nonmainstream elements in our present society.

Otherwise, some so-called nonmainstream pursuit pronounced in the past toady may become mainstream fields of science in the future .For example, the theory of hiliocentricism ,the  heliocentric ordering of the planets founded by Copernicus which it couldn't be accepted by the Rome Catholic Church before, between the year 1582 and 1592 there was hardly a teacher in Europe who was persistently, openly and actively spreading the news about the universe which Copernicus had charted except G. Bruno, at last Bruno burned at a strake by the Church, in the mean time the theory of hiliocentricism have been think about as the nonmainstream, however, nowadays, yet no one would disagree with that the theory is correctly in the realm of science.

However, if people take too much emphasis on the nonmainstream area and even depend on it whole heartedly that would not take much good to human being. First, such pursuits are not rooted in reason and science. Most of the Second, without means to evaluate the legitimacy of these avenues of inquiry, and some people even use the characteristic of curiosity and superstition in the born of people to cheat and deceit ignorant people for money.  use the confidence of people disturb their intelligence and cause them suspect science. For example, some people don’t go to hospital or to see the doctor after them got ill, however, they turn to the voodoo doctor or use the sorceries to cure their diseases. All of these treatments are disregularly and dangerous.  

In sum, the nonmastream in our society play a vita role and it still used in our modern society. In some aspects people still used nonmainstream to satisfying people’s needs. Thus, the nonmainastream areas can still exist in our society. Yet people can not trust and credit the nonmainstream completely. In the final analysis, the correct way we treat with the nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits is still a question that need we go on researching and strike a balance between the nonmainstream and mainstream areas .

yubeckhamUID: 2331621

issue41-[GRE-AWER]小组第五次作业

题目：ISSUE41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
字数：645          日期：2008-1-27 10:41:08
提纲：1.存在的原因。
2.存在有什么好处。
3存在有什么弊端。
4正确地对待不可一言以蔽之。
Whether the nonmainstream area of inquiry as astrology, fortunetelling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits can play a vital role in society? Do really the nonmainstream can satisfying human needs which are not addressed by mainstream science? The speaker claims this view（these views这里是两个观点来的啊）; however, in my part of view, this opinion（these opinions’） final judge should depend on a case-by-case analysis of the situations as follows.

The reason that nonmainstream areas of inquiry can exist is because some phenomena which cannot get well explained by the mainstream science in the past. Before many years ago, the ancient people could not totally understand what happened in the nature, and they turn the answer to the astrology and the fortunate.  They hope the nonmainstreams can help them and answer their problem which no one can really understand. Depend(depending) on the nonmainstreams,they found some secrets which they think it correctly and can be accept answers(去掉) in the nature.

More over, the reason that why nonmainstream areas can exist thousands of years and still hold considerable influence over the masses as follows.（这句话有语法错误啊，主句the reason。。。as follows没谓语） The（去掉） first of all, people are born with curious, for people with such an anxious propensity to konw their fate and future（你自己看看这句话有什么语法错误）, whether good or bad (good or bad）, then at this situation the astrology and fortune-telling and psychic sever as a kind of comfort and appease our soul .The second, ignorance, which largely originates from lack of education, allows for(别乱用词组，你看看ALLOW FOR是什么意思) acceptance of such metaphysical research. Our civilization and culture has（have） survived since ancient times, when people were ignorant of the cause of natural phenomena. The only way to explain events was to resort to areas like astrology, which respect roles as the source of truth. Even with thousands of year of social evolution, some portion of those traditional cultures remains intact as nonmainstream elements in our present society.
Otherwise, some so-called nonmainstream pursuit pronounced（什么意思啊？） in the past toady may become mainstream fields of science in the future .For example, the theory of heliocentricism ,the  heliocentric ordering of the planets founded by Copernicus which it（去掉） couldn't be accepted by the Rome Catholic Church before, between the year 1582 and 1592 there was hardly a teacher in Europe who was persistently, openly and actively spreading the news about the universe which Copernicus had charted（我觉得用claimed好点） except G. Bruno, at last Bruno （was）burned at a strake by the Church, in the mean time the theory of heliocentricism have been think about as the nonmainstream, however, nowadays, yet(用那么多转折做什么呢？去掉)no one would disagree with that the theory is correctly（correct）in the realm of science.

However, if people take too much emphasis on the nonmainstream area and even depend on it whole heartedly that would not take much good to human being. (你觉不觉得自己读起来也不通顺的啊？可以改成 Taking too much emphasis on the nonmainstream area and even completely depend on it ,people would not benefit too much from it )First, such pursuits are not rooted in reason and science. Most of the Second（什么意思啊？请教下）, without means to evaluate the legitimacy of these avenues of inquiry, and some people even use the characteristic of curiosity and superstition in the born of people to cheat and deceit ignorant people for money.  use the confidence of people disturb their intelligence and cause them suspect science. For example, some people don’t go to hospital or to see the doctor after them got ill, however, they turn to the voodoo doctor(carlin) or use the sorceries to cure their diseases. All of these treatments are disregularly(没这个单词) and dangerous.  

In sum, the nonmastream in our society play a vita role and it still used in our modern society. In some aspects people still used nonmainstream to satisfying people’s needs. Thus, the nonmainastream areas can still exist in our society. Yet people can not trust and credit the nonmainstream completely. In the final analysis, the correct way we treat with the nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits is still a question that need we go on researching and strike a balance between the nonmainstream and mainstream areas .

文章有进步啊，写得比上次的好多了

但是有几个地方注意下

1、   字数多少呢本文章，我觉得45分钟写那么多不现实

2、   还是老问题，语法错误和词语乱搭配问题，比如动词当形容词用啊等等

3、   不要为了弄个复杂的句型而搞到自己连语法也错了，那不好的哦