issue50[Jet小组]第四次作业

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Topic50:In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and universitylevel, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside theacademic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.


Somepeople think that the more knowledge one faculty has the better quality ofinstruction the faculty provides so they agree the idea that all faculty shouldbe required to spend time working outside the academic world. However, there isno absolute relationship between two aspects because good instruction is notonly based on abundant knowledge but also depends on effective teachingmethods. Meanwhile, the academic world including university or researchinstitute is already a professional and special area, which could provide thebest instruction training for teachers compared with any other areas.


It isundeniable that if teachers have a wider range of knowledge they are able to impartmore to their students. In many cases, if teachers appropriately complement extra-curricularknowledge in their class, it could spark students’ interest and motivate their aspirationto knowledge. The class would become vivid and accordingly it is easy forstudents to learn the course. Thus, the experience of working outside theacademic world could be helpful to teachers to enrich their knowledge and thencould play a positive role in their classes in order to improve the quality ofinstruction. But overemphasising the extension of knowledge by working outsidethe academic world is likely to make people ignore another important aspect forimproving the quality of instruction: effective teaching methods.


Somepeople might first argue teachers could also learn teaching methods by workingoutside the academic world but they have to admit that there is no area whichis more proper than academic world to teach faculty teaching methods because itis only academic world that possesses ample teaching materials andinstructively experimental environment.  Teacherscould make full use of  classroomcircumstance to obsorb teaching experience or perfect their teaching methods. Teachersalso could evaluate their instructional effects by all sorts of students’feedback.. It is also possible that experienced teachers help less-experiencedteachers to increase the quality of instruction.


In addition, in order to improve the qualityof instruction, experience of working outside does not seem as important as peoplethink because teachers are in academic world they could get even more informationthan that they could get by working outside. For example, internet could helpfaculty to enlarge their knowledge and enhance their skills even if they workin academic world. What’s more, it is only some academic institutes thatprovide some free sources like SCI and teachers could get these materialsconveniently.


All inall, it is unnecessary for all faculty to spend time working outside the academicworld only in order to improve the quality of instruction.  Apart from the forementioned points, workingoutside are not equal to the improvement of the quality of instruction.  Experience of working outside is good, but thebetter is to consider whether faculty make full use of the academic worldresources to improve the quality of instruction.

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郁闷啊

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Some people think（in the perspective of some people,）( that) the more knowledge one faculty has, the better quality of instruction the faculty provides(will provide,后面可以另起一句。) so they agree the idea that all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world. However, there is no absolute relationship between two aspects because good instruction is not only based on abundant knowledge but also depends on effective teaching methods. Meanwhile, the academic world including university or research institute is already a professional and special area, which could provide the best instruction training for teachers compared with any other areas.（觉得立论有点偏了首段，你说的是instruction不仅跟知识有关，还跟教学方法有关，但是题目说的是要求在学术领域外工作，这跟知识似乎没有直接关系，怎么联系起来的好像没有说明。）


It is undeniable that if teachers have a wider range of knowledge they are able to impart more to their students. In many cases, if teachers appropriately complement extra-curricular knowledge in their class, it could spark（赞！） students’ interest and motivate their aspiration to knowledge. The class would become vivid and accordingly it is easy for students to learn the course. Thus,（你前面在说的是有课外知识的帮助，但是没有说出，work outside the academic areas will help teachers to enlarge their extra-curricular knowledge,这些知识不去外面工作查资料也可以获得啊，似乎缺了联系起来的句子。） the experience of working outside the academic world could be helpful to teachers to enrich their knowledge and then could play a positive role in their classes in order to improve the quality of instruction. But overemphasizing the extension of knowledge by working outside the academic world（在外工作就一定意味着overemphasizing 么？不能用by吧，说成if太重视在外工作，有可能会。。比较好） is likely to make people ignore another important aspect for improving the quality of instruction: effective teaching methods.


Somepeople might first argue teachers could also learn teaching methods by workingoutside the academic world but they have to admit that there is no area whichis more proper than academic world to teach faculty teaching methods because itis only academic world that possesses ample teaching materials andinstructively experimental environment.  Teacherscould make full use of  classroomcircumstance to obsorb（absorb） teaching experience or perfect their teaching methods. Teachersalso could evaluate their instructional effects by all sorts of students’feedback.. It is also possible that experienced teachers help less-experiencedteachers to increase the quality of instruction.


In addition, in order to improve the qualityof instruction, experience of working outside does not seem as important as peoplethink because teachers are in academic world they could get even more informationthan that they could get by working outside. For example, internet could helpfaculty to enlarge their knowledge and enhance their skills even if they workin academic world. What’s more, it is only some academic institutes thatprovide some free sources like SCI and teachers could get these materialsconveniently.


All inall, it is unnecessary for all faculty to spend time working outside the academicworld only in order to improve the quality of instruction.  Apart from the forementioned points, workingoutside are not equal to the improvement of the quality of instruction.  Experience of working outside is good, but thebetter is to consider whether faculty make full use of the academic worldresources to improve the quality of instruction.

总的来说，我觉得最大的问题就是立论的一部分有点偏了。按我的观点应该这么说，instruction depends on:
1、knowledge
2、teaching method
然而这两个部分都不一定要在外工作才能获得
Knowledge方面你先承认在外工作会丰富课外知识，再说课外知识会怎样怎样有帮助。所以在外工作对instruction是有帮助的。但是，如果一个人花太多时间在外面，that is to say, overemphasize 了在外工作的重要•••（按你说的），就会忽略另一方面。然后你再按后面的论述，后面的我觉得问题都不大。

先改一篇，有时间看看你的别的，一起加油！！！