issue150[Jet小组第五次作业]

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ISSUE150 - "Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

The speaker makes a threshold claim that people can now become familiar with many place, which they have never been, then concludes that tourism will be out of the date because of the television and worldwide computer connections. However, we already have sufficient empirical evidence that this would not happen simply.

Even though the connections on internet and television or video are increasing in the modern world, no evidence illustrate that less people traveling some cities else or abroad.  Decades before, the main purpose of people choose travel might be the business touring, but now, citizen became to pay more attention to enjoying life, thus, they have a rest and play with families by traveling. From this point, we could conclude that the population of tourism has nothing with connections in television and computer, since they are both part of human’s life, and they would bring varieties of color to stressful life in the modern society.

On the country to the speaker’s assertion, television and internet might have actually served to spark more interest in visiting other places. Before the invention of television or computer, most people would spend months’ time on the way to other place, if there are some books, in which the readers were told about the strange culture and different society with one his lived in, what is the result? One adventurer must start his journey at once, such as Columbus, who spend decades of years and finally found the American Land. No better answers to this question, why people would rather going one place even after he has known the place in the book or television, is the inside characteristic—curiosity. People, no matter he live in the Middle Age or in the New Century, are active about what has been unknown, so does the place. Introduced by the public media, this interesting place would be considered to be the most attribute factor in the eyes of curious persons.

If the speaker’s assertion is reasonable, his speech must be based on one allegation that the purpose of tourism is simply to obtain information about other persons and places and scenes on the internet can replace the traveling to the real place. Nevertheless, tourism contains much more than that—only collection of information. During the visiting, one could enjoy the time out of work, beyond of competition, or some trouble one has to face but need a blank before, and one might know other friends, sharing some fun stories with strangers, and these memories are valuable enough to forget sadness and get through. Besides, people one might know in one journey might give his hand at some time. Apparently, a person could gained from one journey is far more than the fresh information about different culture.

Even the computer makes meeting across the earth possible, and the television takes one global journey within one day, but the interest of curiosity is never submerged in hurried steps, one should slow down the footstep and look out of the window. Journey is one of the best ways, and will never lose its beauty even the technology is developing so fast.  

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The speaker makes a threshold claim that people can now become familiar with many place, which they have never been, then concludes that tourism will be out of the date because of the television and worldwide computer connections. However, we already have sufficient empirical evidence that this would not happen simply.
不赞成观点。

Even though the connections on internet and television or video are increasing in the modern world, no evidence illustrate that less people traveling some cities else or abroad.  Decades before, the main purpose of people choose travel might be the business touring, but now, citizen became(为什么要用过去时呢？become吧？感觉用begin更好) to pay more attention to enjoying life, thus, they could have a rest and play(改为enjoy happiness怎样？) with families by traveling. From this point, we could conclude that the population of tourism has nothing with(没见过这个搭配啊，难道是has nothing to do with？) connections in television and computer, since they(指代什么？) are both part of human’s life, and they would bring varieties of color to stressful life in the modern society.
论点一：旅游人数不会减少。

On the country(这个词什么意思?国家？) to the speaker’s assertion, television and internet might have actually served to spark more interest in visiting other places. Before the invention of television or computer, most people would spend months’ time on the way to other place, if there are some books, in which the readers were told about the strange culture and different society with one his lived in, what is the result?这句话明白你想要表达什么意思但是总觉得别扭。改为If the pre-tourist has known that, there exist a place whose culture and tradition are different from the his, from somebooks. what would happen next?怎么样？ One veriest adventurer must(will) start his journey at once, such as(一般是指多个例子吧？换一下咯) Columbus, who spend decades of years and finally found the American Land. No better answers to this question, why people would rather going one place even after he has known the place in the book or television, is the inside characteristic—curiosity.(有比较的意思，应该把is改为than吧？还是有点别扭，或者你看这样why people would go to one place even after he has known the place in the book or television?I think the answer is nothing else but original humanity-curiosity.行么？) People, no matter he live in the Middle Age or in the New Century, are active(为什么不用curious呢，是怕用词单一么？感觉active不太贴切) about what has been unknown, so does the place. Introduced by the public media, this interesting place would be considered to be the most attribute factor in the eyes of curious persons. (最后句话实在是没看明白啊！)
论点二：电视和网络对刺激旅游业的贡献。

If the speaker’s assertion is reasonable(应该用虚拟语气吧？If the speaker’s assertion were reasonable), his speech must be(删掉) based on one allegation that the purpose of tourism is simply to obtain information about other persons and places and scenes; And under this assumption, surfing on the internet can replace the traveling to the real place. Nevertheless, tourism contains much more than that—only collection of information. During the visiting, one could enjoy the time out of work, beyond of(删掉) competition, or some trouble one has to face but need a blank before前面的动词是enjoy，为了一致改为the blank before some trouble which need to face, and one might know(想表达结交朋友么？make更好) other new friends, sharing(紧接might,与make一致，改为share) some fun stories with strangers, and these memories are valuable enough to forget sadness and get through. Besides, people one might know in one journey might give his hand at some time.(想表达旅途中结交的朋友有时候可能会帮上忙么？Besides, the friends one make in journey might give him a favor at some time.) Apparently, the harvest a person could(删掉) gained from one(改为in a) journey is far more than the fresh information about different culture.
论点三：并不想speaker假设的那样，人们旅游只为了获取信息。

Even the computer makes meeting across the earth possible, and the television takes one global journey within one day, but the interest of curiosity is never submerged in hurried steps, one should slow down the footstep and look out of the window. Journey is one of the best ways (这句话不够完整啊，应该是one of the best ways, ***, to do ... 加上to realize that吧), and will never lose its beauty even the technology is developing so fast.
结尾

意见供参考，如有错误请原谅。
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revised by wangzexun@56#jet

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