ISSUE83 thrive小组第五次作业

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题目：ISSUE83 - "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
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1、  从政府的角度看政府有责任和义务去保护。可可西里:Kekexili，藏羚羊。Tibetan Antelope Tibetan pleat Tibetan 这些地方充满人烟稀少，相对的珍惜动物资源可能很多，会可能很多人会去偷猎，poacher偷猎者，如果政府不组织专门的人的话不保护的话很可能某些物种会灭绝。Species extinction

2、  从个体和整体来看。边远地区的环境破坏如果不加注意的话也会影响到更大环境(整体性)举个身边的例子，例如亚马迅森林整体气候变化使得整个南美地区的气候发生了变化。Amazon Rain Forest。Take the depletion of forest in South America as example.

3、  从可发展的角度看。偏远地区虽然可以为子孙后代造福。荒凉地区往往资源较为丰富，矿产资源和各种资源都很丰富，未来人口会越来越多，这些地方必然会成为未来开发的地方。Sustainable development可持续发展。Nature resources and energy resources.

Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in natural state, even thought only a few people lived in the extremely remote areas? The speaker claims so, this is an issue of preserving wilderness areas which is associated many factors. In my opinion, I fundamentally agree with the speaker's claim for below reasons.

As I see it, there are three fundamental reasons for government to preserve publicly owned wilderness. The first reason is that from the points of issue of responsibility of government, government would be necessary to preserve wilderness in natural state. In the present world, there are many remote places which have wildlife resources. Consider the Tibetan Antelopes, an wild animal called "Tibetan pleat", lived in the Kekexili which is a remote places lying in the western areas of China. Attracted by the enormous lucre of skin of Tibetan, many poachers went to Kekexili and brutally hunt Tibetan Antelopes. However, due to a team which is composed by government to prevent these poachers hunting Tibetan Antelopes, the behavior of hunting has been controlled. If not the government of China have take responsibility to preserve the Tibetan Antelopes, it no doubt will result in a specie extinction of Tibetan Antelopes.

The second reason why I fundamentally agree is that the preserve publicly owned wilderness have a significant influence on the relationship between individual and entity. For example, Amazon rain forestry, which is the biggest rain forestry in the world, constituted as a part of South America. Nowadays, due to the depletion of forest of Amazon rain forestry has cased a negative effect on the weather of South American, the temperature of these areas has increased. It is necessary for government to preserve Amazon rain forestry .If without preserving the individual of Amazon rain forestry, overall condition of weather of South America will be influenced badly.

Finally but not least, when it comes to tie issue of sustainable development, government have a high responsibility to preserve remote areas. In the forepast time, there are only a few people living in the world and the nature and energy resources are enough to use. With the development of technology, more people will appear in the world and there will be a more immense need for resources. The remote areas which have wide room for people living and sufficient nature and energy resources will become a suitable places to develop. Consider the importance of sustainable development which truly can benefit our offspring in the future, any politic and responsible government should pay more attention to these remote areas and preserve the nature and energy resource of these areas.

In conclusion, the issue of preserve publicly owned wilderness referring the government responsibility, the relationship between individual and entity, and the sustainable development. Therefore it is not a question that whether government should do or not rather a destiny of government that a politic government would undoubtedly be necessary to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas, even though these remote areas.

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题目：ISSUE83 - "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
字数：496      
个人意见：其实从你这提纲就可以发现一处重大的问题，当然只是我个人这么认为，你的第三个分支观点从可持续发展的角度论述应该保护wilderness areas，是因为将来好更好的开发它们。原文的观点是保护这些地区 in their natural state ，如果说将来要开发，怎么会是保护它们处于natural state呢？从这个意义上讲，你是不支持原文观点的。
全文从总体上来说，各个分支观点之间没有逻辑联系，没有实现对中心观点的有效支持，楼主还需要进一步修改。另外，建议楼主注意句子的语法以及完整性，不要一味追求长句呵复杂句。
个人意见，仅供参考！加油！^_^!
1、  从政府的角度看政府有责任和义务去保护。可可西里:Kekexili，藏羚羊。Tibetan Antelope Tibetan pleat Tibetan 这些地方充满人烟稀少，相对的珍惜动物资源可能很多，会可能很多人会去偷猎，poacher偷猎者，如果政府不组织专门的人的话不保护的话很可能某些物种会灭绝。Species extinction

2、  从个体和整体来看。边远地区的环境破坏如果不加注意的话也会影响到更大环境(整体性)举个身边的例子，例如亚马迅森林整体气候变化使得整个南美地区的气候发生了变化。Amazon Rain Forest。Take the depletion of forest in South America as example.

3、  从可发展的角度看。偏远地区虽然可以为子孙后代造福。荒凉地区往往资源较为丰富，矿产资源和各种资源都很丰富，未来人口会越来越多，这些地方必然会成为未来开发的地方。Sustainable development可持续发展。Nature resources and energy resources.

Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in natural state, even thought only a few people lived in the extremely remote areas? The speaker claims so(这里的好像是“作者这样认为”的意思吧，但是你第一句是一个一般疑问句，并没有包含答案), this is an issue of preserving wilderness areas which is associated many factors. In my opinion, I fundamentally agree with the speaker's claim for below reasons（虽然你表示赞同作者观点，但建议还是将论点再陈述一遍，据说改卷的老师都直接奔首段末句去找中心观点）.

As I see it, there are three fundamental reasons for government to preserve publicly owned wilderness. The first reason is that from the points of issue of responsibility of government（连续三个of，我没看太明白T_T!）, government would be necessary to preserve wilderness in natural state. In the present world, there are many remote places which have wildlife resources. Consider the Tibetan Antelopes, an wild animal called "Tibetan pleat", lived in the Kekexili which is a remote places lying in the western areas of China（貌似有点啰嗦，a kind of wild animal called "Tibetan pleat" living in the Kekexili--a remote place lying in the west of  China）. Attracted by the enormous lucre of skin of Tibetan, many poachers went(建议统一时态) to Kekexili and brutally hunt Tibetan Antelopes. However, due to a team which is composed（comprised） by government to prevent these poachers hunting Tibetan Antelopes, the behavior of hunting has been controlled. If not the government of China have take responsibility to preserve the Tibetan Antelopes, it no doubt will result in a specie extinction of Tibetan Antelopes.（这一段举出了藏羚羊的例子，但没有说明出举例的目的，即没有对中心观点提供支持，而且这一段貌似也没有分支观点，或许是我没看懂的那一句吧？）

The second reason why I fundamentally agree is that the preserve publicly owned wilderness have a significant influence on the relationship between individual and entity. For example, Amazon rain forestry, which is the biggest rain forestry in the world, constituted as a part of South America. Nowadays, due to the depletion of forest of Amazon rain forestry has cased（caused） a negative effect（没有出现主语） on the weather of South American, the temperature of these areas has increased. It is necessary for government to preserve Amazon rain forestry .If without preserving the individual of Amazon rain forestry, overall condition of weather of South America will be influenced badly.

Finally but not least, when it comes to tie issue of sustainable development, government have a high responsibility to preserve remote areas. In the forepast time, there are（时态） only a few people living in the world and the nature and energy resources are enough to use. With the development of technology, more people will appear in the world（因为技术的发展，更多的人出现了。。这个 说法不太妥吧，而且你是表示以前人少用的a few也不太恰当） and there will be a more immense need for resources. The remote areas which have wide room for people living and sufficient nature and energy resources will become a suitable places to develop. Consider the importance of sustainable development which truly can benefit our offspring in the future, any politic and responsible government should pay more attention to these remote areas and preserve the nature and energy resource of these areas.

In conclusion, the issue of preserve publicly owned wilderness referring the government responsibility, the relationship between individual and entity, and the sustainable development. Therefore it is not a question that whether government should do or not rather a destiny of government（？） that a politic government would undoubtedly be necessary to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas, even though these remote areas.

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没有让步观点吗？
可以说有些没有人到达的地方很少有可利用的资源，为了解决目前紧急的土地问题，可以开采用于工业，或者说人迹罕至的地方是某些珍稀动物的栖息地，可以用于开发旅游业……