ARGUMENT51【Aero小组】第13次作业 by bigyan

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In this argument, the arguer concludes that a hypothesis that after serious muscle strain the secondary infection may keep patients from recovering quickly, and recommends that all such patients should take antibiotic as a part of the treatment. To support these points, the author cites that the result of a two group comparative experience indicates antibiotic play a key role during the treatment process. However, the argument relays on a couple of specious assumptions, which render it unconvincing as it stands.


First and foremost, lacking more specific information about the experiment, it is unfair to assess to the conclusion that antibiotic is vital in quick recovery from muscle strain. In fact, the statistics are too vague to see the objectives’ age, gender, cause of hurt, and so forth. Common sense tells us the patient who is suffering a comparatively slight strain might be less likely to spend a longer term on recovering than who is suffering a severe one. To other words, the extent which the patient hurts has effect on the cost of the recovery. Unless the author is able to provide informative evident, the result of experiment is unreliable.


Apart from the information about the patients, other factors such as ability of doctor, patients’ mental condition also lead to a faster recovery. On one hand, it is good chance that the doctor who has great ability or abundant experience can ensure to shorten the time of treatment under the same circumstance. On the other hand, if a patient is optimistic about recovery from the hurt, perhaps the recuperation time would relatively reduce. In short, consider these possible scenarios, the result of experiment is unjustified


Even assuming the reliability of the experiment, it is impossible to assess the author’s border recommendation that all such patients need take antibiotic. While it is true for the member of the experiment, it is not for everyone. It is a case-to-case basis. It is entirely possible that a patient borned with hypersusceptibility to antibiotic is inherently unable to be treated with antibiotic. In addition, the author fails to provide that whether the antibiotic makes any side-effect, which is bad for patients’ heal in long term.


In sum, the arguer hastily comes to the conclusion as it speaks. To strengthen it the author must enable me to clarity something specific in the experiment. To better evaluate the antibiotic, the author should consider any factors that might change the result of treatment.

wenwenwen4444UID: 2377774

In this argument, the arguer concludes that a hypothesis that after serious muscle strain the secondary infection缺谓语 may keep patients from recovering quickly, and recommends that all such patients should take antibiotic as a part of the treatment. To support these points, the author cites that the result of a two group comparative experience indicates antibiotics play a key role during the treatment process他只是说antibotics能帮助恢复，不是在治疗中能起“起主要作用”，常识告诉我们，antibotics的作用只是防止伤口感染，只是antibotics不能治好这病吧^^. However, the argument relays on a couple of specious assumptions, which render it unconvincing as it stands.


First and foremost, lacking more specific information about the experiment, it is unfair？？？ to assess to the conclusion that antibiotic is vital in quick recovery from muscle strain. In fact, the statistics are too vague to see the objectives’ age, gender, cause of hurt, and so forth这句能写得再清楚些. Common sense tells us the patient who is suffering a comparatively slight strain might be less likely to spend a longer term on recovering than who is suffering a severe one. To other words, the extent which the patient hurts has effect on the cost of the recovery啥意思？. Unless the author is able to provide informative evident, the result of experiment is unreliable.


Apart from the information about the patients, other factors such as ability of doctor, patients’ mental condition also lead to a faster你只是说医生、病人心理状态，只能说“影响”恢复速度；只有好的医生、好的心理状态才能促进恢复 recovery. On one hand, it is good chance that the doctor who has great ability or abundant experience can ensure to shorten the time of treatment under the same circumstance. On the other hand, if a patient is optimistic about recovery from the hurt, perhaps the recuperation time would relatively reduce. In short, consider these possible scenarios, the result of experiment is unjustified


Even assuming the reliability of the experiment, it is impossible to assess the author’s border recommendation that all such patients need take antibiotic. While it is true for the member of the experiment, it is not for everyone. It is a case-to-case basis. It is entirely possible that a patient borned with hypersusceptibility to antibiotic is inherently unable to be treated with antibiotic. In addition, the author fails to provide that whether the antibiotic makes any side-effect, which is bad for patients’ heal in long term.
——从antibiotics说

In sum, the arguer hastily comes to the conclusion as it speaks. To strengthen it the author must enable me to clarity something specific in the experiment. To better evaluate the antibiotic, the author should consider any factors that might change the result of treatment.

总的说，模版味太重了些，把应该分析的用模版一笔带过了，我觉得在有模版、有时间的情况下再详细点。

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ARGUMENT51【Aero小组】第13次作业 by bigyan

In this argument, the arguer concludes that a hypothesis that after serious muscle strain the secondary infection may keep patients from recovering quickly, and recommends that all such patients should take antibiotic as a part of the treatment. To support these points, the author cites that the result of a two group comparative experience indicates antibiotic play a key role during the treatment process. However, the argument relays on a couple of specious assumptions, which render it unconvincing as it stands. First and foremost, （作者好喜欢用这个哦）lacking more specific information about the experiment, it is unfair to assess to the conclusion that antibiotic is vital in quick recovery from muscle strain. In fact, the statistics are too vague to see the objectives’ age, gender, cause of hurt, and so forth. Common sense tells us the patient who is suffering a comparatively slight strain might be less likely to spend a longer term on recovering than who is suffering a severe one. To other words, the extent which the patient hurts has effect on the cost of the recovery. （这句话和上面一句话是表达的同一个意思，有这个必要么？这里只着中说了病情严重不同会影响恢复，也可以再说一下职业不同年龄不同恢复也会不同。这样这一段就丰富些了）Unless the author is able to provide informative evident, the result of experiment is unreliable.Apart from the information about the patients, other factors such as ability of doctor, patients’ mental condition（这个点应该放到上一段吧，你自己也说了么：除了病人的信息，医生的情况也应应该考虑到。。。）also lead to a faster recovery. On one hand, it is good chance that the doctor who has great ability or abundant experience can ensure to shorten the time of treatment under the same circumstance. On the other hand, if a patient is optimistic about recovery from the hurt, perhaps the recuperation time would relatively reduce.（这里举病人心理状态的例子并没有说明会导致这两个组的结果有什么不同，如果细解释可能为：第一个组人比较富裕不用担心钱啊啊，有美女护士陪啊，所以比较放松，第二组人比较穷怕交不起医药费啊，旁边总是些丑陋凶狠的男护士啊，所以比较紧张，所以第一组比第二组好的块） In short, consider （considering）these possible scenarios, the result of experiment is unjustifiedEven assuming the reliability of the experiment, it is impossible to assess the author’s border recommendation that all such patients need take antibiotic. While it is true for the member of the experiment, it is not for everyone. It is a case-to-case basis. It is entirely possible that a patient borned with hypersusceptibility to antibiotic is inherently unable to be treated with antibiotic. In addition, the author fails to provide that whether the antibiotic makes any side-effect, which is bad for patients’ heal in long term. In sum, the arguer hastily comes to the conclusion as it speaks. To strengthen it the author must enable me to clarity something specific in the experiment. To better evaluate the antibiotic, the author should consider any factors that might change the result of treatment.

俺的argu 给俺也看看吧 http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=801074&page=1&extra=page%3D1#pid1771423409

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