issue11 [jet小组]第11次作业

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Issue 11. All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problem.

As the history of humans has developed into our modern age of globalization, a myriad of complicated and enduring world social problem occur and impede the process of human civilization, and then there is a trend to argue that a global university should be established by all nations to solve such intractable problems. According to my understanding, there is still a long way to go before humans are capable for the establishment of such a global university.

Admittedly, some severe social problems have haunted us for centuries and remain largely unchanged from when they burgeoned, such as severe starvation, awful poverty and endless wars, etc. Moreover, the process of globalization and technological enhancement, which has escalated these unsolved problems on a global scale, at the same time has brought us new global issues by the irresistable integration of world system. We are now living in a world of warming climate, enviroment pollution, intimidation of terrorsim, polarization of rich and poor and so forth, which involves entangled relationship among multilateral countries, nations and different ethnic groups. Global cooperation----probably in the form of a global university----is needed for seeking an appropriate and effective way to solve these problems, otherwise, they will threaten the development or even survival of human beings.

As a form of global cooperation, a global university sponsored by all nations indeed embraces plenty of merits and advantages for solving several persistent global problems. It is believed that it will concentrate the most outstanding faculties and students, as well as the most abundant capital and advanced apparatus; it will enchance the understanding and communication among different perspectives and methods. However, considering its feasibility and function, the beautiful conceit is no more than idealistic.

First, all the nation will confront the intricate sponsorship and orgnization of such a university. Because of the economic imbalance among different nations, the minority industrialized conturies will control the economic lifeline of the establishment and function, and then such a univeristy would finally step toward the criterions of these powful conturies, who has beening creating and maintaining the imbalance of the world system. In addition, with a overly diverse resources of faculties and students, it is entirely difficult to establish a series of standards for teaching, recruitment and curriculum.

Furthermore, the function of a university is far more than mere solving practical social problems As an essential part of the fabric of our civilization, universities have been established as an instrument for the persevation, transmission and advancement for knowledge. A global university, merely caring for solving social problems in the world, would be overly political and hence lose its accademic independence and finally its vitality. Once students are taught to pursue feasible and practical methods to slove certain social problems rather than pursue the truth, and the research programs are oriented to the exigence of society rather than the inherent requirements of disciplines themseves, the global university would be finally rendered into the control of the dominant ideology of the world.

In conclusion, a global university, designed to slove the most persistent social problems, is no more than a Utopian vision.

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issue11 [jet小组]第11次作业

Issue 11. All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problem.

As the history of humans has developed into our modern age of globalization, a myriad of complicated and enduring world social problem occur and impede the process of human civilization, and then there is a trend to argue that a global university should be established by all nations to solve such intractable problems. According to my understanding, there is still a long way to go before humans are capable for the establishment of such a global university.

Admittedly, some severe social problems have haunted us for（during） centuries and remain largely unchanged from when they burgeoned(这句对persistent social problem的解释不太到位，并不一定在萌芽是就是问题), such as severe starvation, awful poverty（不知道国外是否这样加修饰，感觉怪怪的）and endless wars, etc. Moreover, the process of globalization and technological enhancement, which has escalated these unsolved problems on a global scale, at the same time has brought us new global issues by the irresistible integration of world system. We are now living in a world of warming climate, environment pollution, intimidation of terrorism, polarization of rich and poor and so forth, which involves entangled relationship among multilateral countries, nations and different ethnic groups. 【Therefore, (加个连接词)Global cooperation----probably in the form of a global university----is needed for seeking an appropriate and effective way to solve these problems. Otherwise, they will threaten the development or even survival of human beings.】换个位会好些
As a form of global cooperation, a global universitysponsored by all nations indeed embraces plenty of meritsand advantages for solving several persistent global problems. It is believed that it will concentrate the most outstanding faculties and students, as well as the most abundant capital and advanced apparatus; it will enhance the understanding and communication （用enhance不对吧）among different perspectives and methods. However, considering its feasibility and function, the beautiful conceit is no more than idealistic.

First, all nation will confront the intricate sponsorship and organization of such a university.（） Because of the economic imbalance among different nations, the minority（a few太不地道了） industrialized countries will control the economic lifeline of the establishment and function, and then such a university would finally step toward the criterions of these powerful（其实应该说是developed） countries, who has beening creating and maintaining the imbalance of the world system. In addition, with a overly diverse resources of faculties and students, it is entirely difficult to establish a series of standards for teaching, recruitment and curriculum. 加个结论
Furthermore, the function of a university is far more than mere solving practical social problems as an essential part of the fabric of our civilization, universities have been established as an instrument for the persevation（这是什么词？）, transmission and advancement for knowledge. A global university, merely caring for solving social problems in the world, would be overly political and hence lose its accademic independence and finally its vitality. Once students are taught to pursue feasible and practical methods to solve certain social problems rather than pursue the truth（应该是想说纯理论吧，应该用truth）, and the research programs are oriented to the exigence of society rather than the inherent requirements of disciplines themselves, the global university would be finally rendered into the control of the dominant ideology of the world.

In conclusion, a global university, designed to solve the most persistent social problems, is no more than （not）a Utopian vision.

思想没错，本来issue就是只要你有理就行。

但你的拼写错很多，用词也有问题，句子。。。。。。。会影响别人阅读，这样会很成问题

把开头结尾写好，中间内容简洁明了。而且你怎么没事例呀？这样评卷人会说你不够具体。TOEFL都得写事例。

[ 本帖最后由 sallyplumage 于 2008-2-27 22:50 编辑 ]

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argument明天再给你看，谢谢你的评价。好详细。
我在word上改的，贴上去就。。。。。
有些地方改了没用红色画出，你再看看吧。
这篇正着好写，但别把issue和argument搞混了，要详细事例！！

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谢谢sally的批评……
单词的拼写，总是我的心头之痛……手指一放在台式电脑的键盘上，就移不动不感觉，以后我要多练习的
句子上的问题，你能够说的多一些么？

还有个疑问，issue一定要有事例么？我向来都喜欢用所谓的“说理”（其实说的乱七八糟）的方式，而不喜欢用事例。。。

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好像是要用详细事例来说话。这样才有证据，一味说理不可取的。
我TOEFL 就是没举什么例子结果分数不高，评价是不具体。
我想他们都是ETS所以应该都一样