argument65 [Savior小组]第三次作业

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Argument65.
The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of
cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of
both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five
best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses
from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World
magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its
subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory,
the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue
stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate
primarily on domestic cheeses."

很多年来我们的所有连锁店都储备了很多种类的国产奶酪和进口奶酪。然而去年，我们的最新店里五种销量最高的奶酪都是威斯康星出产的cheddar奶酪。而且，最近一次由Cheese of the World杂志所举行的调查显示，其订阅者对于国产奶酪的倾向性越来越高。由于我们公司可以通过限制库存来减少开支，在我们所有连锁店增加盈利的最好方式就是停止贮备很多进口奶酪而主要集中于国产奶酪。


//促销活动sales promotion

1.       错误的类比，去年的销售量不可拿来比较；草率推广，最新的店的销售量并不代表什么
2.       调查不可信
3.       不全面的思维，因果关系不正确，增加盈利的最好方式不一定就是停止贮备很多进口奶酪而主要集中于国产奶酪

The conclusion that the arguer claim in this argument is that the best way to improve profits in a chain of cheese stores is to discontinue stocking many of varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses. To support the conclusion, the arguer points out the two evidences about the best-selling cheeses at newest store and a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine. At first glance, the arguer’s assumption seems to be accepted. While clearly exam the arguer’s assumption, we may find that it is unconvincing, vague, oversimplified, unwarranted, etc. the argument contains several facets that are questionable.

To begin with, the arguer made a false analogy and comparison. Firstly, the president of a chain of cheese stores mistakenly compares the sale of cheeses last year with today. He can provide enough information about the current sale of cheeses. At the same time, only one newest store does not prove the five best-selling cheeses also sell best in another cheese stores. Maybe their newest store made a sales promotion of the cheeses, domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin, for its sale last year. Thus, the arguer confuses comparison and variation.

Moreover, one major flaw that weakens the logic of this argument is that arguer does not provide enough information on the subject of the statistics. The arguer does not indicate whether the survey by Cheeses of the World magazine is creditable. Maybe it is a magazine of small sale so that it cannot make a logical survey. In the meantime, “an increasing preference” that statistics collected is also unconvincing. If the magazine’s subscribers responded only stand for a tiny proportion of the whole groups, we should not be so sure about the conclusion. Therefore, fact such limited evidence, the conclusion is unwarranted.

In addition, the arguer commits “after this, and therefore because of this” fallacy. The causal relationship between the cause of improving profits of stores and the effect of discontinuing stocking of imported cheese is unwarranted. Even if their company can reduce expense, it does not discontinue stocking many of varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses. They have many another methods to improve profits such as improving on the process of facture of cheeses. So this is a fallacious reasoning unless the arguer can provide persuasive evidences to rule out any other possibilities.

On all accounts, the conclusion reached in this argument is lacking of credibility so that it is not persuasive at it stands. Regardless of who the arguer is, he or she has overlooking or chosen to ignore many aspects of his or her conclusion. To strengthen the argument, the arguer should provide the data of recent sale from all stores and we would need more informants about statistics collecting from the magazine. Additionally, the arguer should give more evidence about the above-mentioned cause-effect relationship.

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Argument65.
The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of
cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of
both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five
best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses
from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World
magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its
subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory,
the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue
stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate
primarily on domestic cheeses."

很多年来我们的所有连锁店都储备了很多种类的国产奶酪和进口奶酪。然而去年，我们的最新店里五种销量最高的奶酪都是威斯康星出产的cheddar奶酪。而且，最近一次由Cheese of the World杂志所举行的调查显示，其订阅者对于国产奶酪的倾向性越来越高。由于我们公司可以通过限制库存来减少开支，在我们所有连锁店增加盈利的最好方式就是停止贮备很多进口奶酪而主要集中于国产奶酪。


//促销活动sales promotion

1.       错误的类比，去年的销售量不可拿来比较；草率推广，最新的店的销售量并不代表什么
2.       调查不可信
3.       不全面的思维，因果关系不正确，增加盈利的最好方式不一定就是停止贮备很多进口奶酪而主要集中于国产奶酪

The conclusion that the arguer claims in this argument is that the best way to improve profits in a chain of cheese stores is to discontinue stocking many of varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses. To support the conclusion, the arguer points out the two evidences about the best-selling cheeses at newest store and a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine. At first glance, the arguer’s assumption seems to be accepted. While clearly exam(应用动词) the arguer’s assumption, we may find that it is unconvincing, vague, oversimplified, unwarranted, etc.（可以用一个词unconvincing就可以了）the argument contains several facets that are questionable（感觉加上as follow，引出下文会好一些）.

To begin with, the arguer made a false analogy and comparison.（时态是否正确） Firstly, the president of a chain of cheese stores mistakenly compares the sale of cheeses last year with today.（可能还有与将来相比） He can provide enough information about the current sale of cheeses. At the same time, only one newest store does not prove the five best-selling cheeses also sell（语态，sell的主语是cheeses） best in another cheese stores. Maybe their newest store made a sales promotion of the cheeses, domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin, for its sale last year. Thus, the arguer confuses comparison and variation.

Moreover, one major flaw that weakens the logic of this argument is that arguer does not provide enough information on the subject of the statistics. The arguer does not indicate whether the survey by Cheeses of the World magazine is creditable. Maybe it is a magazine of small sale so that it cannot make a logical survey. In the meantime, “an increasing preference” that statistics collected is also unconvincing. If the magazine’s subscribers responded only stand for a tiny proportion of the whole groups, we should not be so sure about the conclusion. Therefore, fact such limited evidence, the conclusion is unwarranted.

In addition, the arguer commits “after this, and therefore because of this” fallacy. The causal relationship between the cause of improving profits of stores and the effect of discontinuing stocking of imported cheese is unwarranted. Even if their company can reduce expense, it does not discontinue stocking many of varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses. They have many another methods to improve profits such as improving on the process of facture of cheeses. So this is a fallacious reasoning unless the arguer can provide persuasive evidences to rule out any other possibilities.

On all accounts, the conclusion reached in this argument is lacking of credibility so that it is not persuasive at it stands. Regardless of who the arguer is, he or she has overlooking or chosen to ignore many aspects of his or her conclusion. To strengthen the argument, the arguer should provide the data of recent sale from all stores and we would need more informants about statistics collecting from the magazine. Additionally, the arguer should give more evidence about the above-mentioned cause-effect relationship.
思路清晰，按照题目里的逻辑错误出现的先后顺序进行攻击，但我觉得结论说最好的提高利润的方法是什么，结论既然存在明显的错误，是不是先应该攻击结论部分。攻击顺序我也是搞不太清，但有的题目的内部就存在着内在的逻辑，先攻击最致命的错误。你语言挺好的，感觉平实，简练！向你学习。个人的看法。