ARGUMENT52

九微火UID: 2343684

TOPIC: ARGUMENT52 - The following appeared in a memo to the human resources manager at Baobob Inc., a large architectural firm.

"Several well-known, retired architects were interviewed in Architecture Today about changes in the field. Only one had earned a college degree in architecture. All others had come into the field at an early age by serving apprenticeships that required them to work under the direct supervision of an experienced architect. Several of the colleges that we recruit from report that many promising architecture students leave school early in their undergraduate career. Therefore, because finding talented architecture graduates is becoming more difficult, Baobob Inc. should start an aggressive apprenticeship program and hire students who express an interest in architecture directly out of high school rather than wait for them to get out of college."
WORDS: 361-412          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2008-3-31 11:20:19

In this memo the manager recommends that their company should start an aggressive apprenticeship program and hire students who express an interest in architecture directly out of high school rather than wait for them to get out of college. To support this recommendation the manager provides two reasons. These two reasons seem to be sound at first glance. However, under close consideration, both of them are problematic.

The first reason the manager claimed is that in the interview of Architecture Today, there is only one well-known, retired architect had earned a college degree while other well-known architectures had no college degree. We know, from the common sense, that most students in past can not have the opportunity to enter a college. At the same time, comparing to architecture, other areas may have lower percentage of people who had a college degree. Besides, the manager failed to provide enough information about the percentage in all the architects. Provided that one prominent architect in ten has a college degree, while one common architects in hundred has a college degree, we can infer that the groups of architects who have a college degree are generally more skillful than architects who have not obtain a college degree.   

The secondly reason the manager provided is that several of the colleges that their company recruit from report that many promising architecture students leave school early in their undergraduate career. There are also some evident flaws in this reason. First, the colleges that their company recruits from can not represent all the colleges. It is entirely possible that in other colleges, more well-known colleges, the top students of architecture complete their academic subjects. Secondly, the reasons why the students leave school early have not been interpreted. Perhaps these students have a common in difficult economic condition and therefore they must leave school for survival; it is the pressure of existence that motives their hard working and nurtures them to be outstanding architectures.

Besides, the manager points that they should start an aggressive apprenticeship program and hire students who express an interest in architecture directly out of high school. This measure should be closely examined that it can be taken into practice.

In sum, the conclusion is not well supported. To draw the conclusion that the college degree has no contribution to architects the manager must provide more information concerning other factors that affect the development of architects. Moreover, whether their company can provide an aggressive apprenticeship need more discussion.      

rita_moyoUID: 2274069

In this memo the manager recommends that their company should start an aggressive apprenticeship program and hire students who express an interest in architecture directly out of high school rather than wait for them to get out of college. To support this recommendation the manager provides two reasons. These two reasons seem to be sound atfirst glance. However, under close consideration, both of them are problematic.

The first reason the manager claimed is that in the interview of Architecture Today, there is only one well-known, retired architect had earned a college degree while other well-known architectures had no college degree. We know, from the common sense, that most students in past can not (大学的历史还是很悠久的，觉得应该说很难有机会）have the opportunity to enter a college. At the same time, comparing to architecture, other areas may have lower percentage of people who had a college degree. Besides, the manager failed to provide enough information about the percentage in all the architects. Provided that one prominent architect in ten has a college degree, while one common architects in hundred has a college degree, we can infer that the groups of architects who have a college degree are generally more skillful than architects who have not obtain a college degree.   

The secondly reason the manager provided is that several of the colleges that their company recruit from report that many promising architecture students leave school early in their undergraduate career. There are also some evident flaws in this reason. First, the colleges that their company recruits from can not represent all the colleges. It is entirely possible that in other colleges, more well-known colleges, the top students of architecture complete their academic subjects. Secondly, the reasons why the students leave school early have not been interpreted. Perhaps these students have a common in difficult economic condition and therefore they must leave school for survival; it is the pressure of existence that motives their hard working and nurtures them to be outstanding architectures.（我在想你这样说并不影响作者要聘请学徒的结论。应该说退学并不都是很有潜质的，如果不是有潜质，就不符合学徒的要求，也就不应该得到寻找非毕业生的结论）

Besides, the manager points that they should start an aggressive apprenticeship program and hire students who express an interest in architecture directly out of high school. This measure should be closely examined that it can be taken into practice.(是不是因为时间不够，这段没解释?)

In sum, the conclusion is not well supported. To draw the conclusion that the college degree has no contribution to architects the manager must provide more information concerning other factors that affect the development of architects. Moreover, whether their company can provide an aggressive apprenticeship needs more discussion.

写的比我好多了，结构清晰，逻辑分析很有条理，紫色是我喜欢的。