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TOPIC: ARGUMENT239 - The following appeared as an editorial in the local newspaper of Dalton.

"When the neighboring town of Williamsville adopted a curfew four months ago that made it illegal for persons under the age of 18 to loiter or idle in public places after 10 p.m., youth crime in Williamsville dropped by 27 percent during curfew hours. In Williamsville's town square, the area where its citizens were once most outraged at the high crime rate, not a single crime has been reported since the curfew was introduced. Therefore, to help reduce its own rising crime rate, the town of Dalton should adopt the same kind of curfew. A curfew that keeps young people at home late at night will surely control juvenile delinquency and protect minors from becoming victims of crime."
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In this argument the author argues that a curfew that keeeps young people at home late at night will surely control juvenile delinquency and protect minors from becoming victims of crime. To support the conclusion, the author cites the fact that the neighbouring town of Williamsville adopted a curfew four months ago, and that youth crime in Williamsville decreased by 27 percent during curfew hours, and since then no crime has been reported in williamville's town square where citizens used to be outraged at the high crime rate. However, careful scrutiny of this argument reveals several critical problems, which together render it unpersuasive as it stands.

To being with, the author unfairly infers that the decrease of youth crime during curfew hours in Williamsville had been cause by the adoption of curfew, yet the mere fact that the adoption of the curfew occurs before the decrease of youth crimes does not necessarily reflect a causual relationship between these two events. It is entirely possibly that changes other than the introduction of the curfew have lead to the same result. For instance, the more strict law has been made to restrict youth crime, which would surely lead to less youth crime. Without ruling out other factors the author's claim would be doubtful at best.

Secondly, the fact that no crime has been reported in Williamsville's town squre since the curfew was introduced lends scant support to the author's conclusion that the introduction of curfew has significantly control juvenile delinquency. It is very likely that the crime reported in Williamsville's town square were mostly conducted by adult and therefor has no causal relationship with the curfew. Furthermore, whether the term 'reported' can refect the real situation is unjustifiable. Unless more specific informatoin is provide the conclusion would be groundless.

Finally, even I were to concede that the introduction of curfew did lead to lower juvenile delinquency rate and safer circumstances in Williamsville, the author provide no evidence that the town of Dalton and Williamsville are sufficiently alike to make an analogy. Perhaps in Dalton more crimes are conducted by adults and there is little youth crime at night. Thus, without information about the population and present crime situation of two towns, the author cannot confidently assume that the curfew will also work in Dalton.

To sum up, the author fails to adequately support the conclusion that a similar curfew in the town of Dalton will lead to less juvenile delinquency and protection of minors from becoming victims of crime. To strengthen the reasoning, the author should provide clear evidence that the decrease of juvenile delinquency and less crime rate in town square in Williamsville bear some relationship with the adoption of curfew. To better access the argument, we would also need specific information to show that Dalton and Williamsville are sufficiently alike in the respect that the introduction of curfew will lead to similar result.

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Secondly, the fact that no crime has been reported in Williamsville's town squre square since the curfew was introduced lends scant support to the author's conclusion that the introduction of curfew has significantly control juvenile delinquency. It is very likely that the crime reported in Williamsville's town square were mostly conducted by adult and therefor拼写 has no causal relationship with the curfew. Furthermore, whether the term 'reported' can refect拼写 the real situation is unjustifiable. Unless more specific informatoin拼写 is provide, the conclusion would be groundless.

Finally, even I were to concede that the introduction of curfew did lead to lower juvenile delinquency rate and safer circumstances in Williamsville, the author provide no evidence that the town of Dalton and Williamsville are sufficiently alike to make an analogy. Perhaps in Dalton more crimes are conducted by adults and there is little youth crime at night. Thus, without information about the population and present crime situation of two towns, the author cannot confidently assume that the curfew will also work in Dalton.

To sum up, the author fails to adequately support the conclusion that a similar curfew in the town of Dalton will lead to less juvenile delinquency and protection of minors from becoming victims of crime. To strengthen the reasoning, the author should provide clear evidence that the decrease of juvenile delinquency and less crime rate in town square in Williamsville bear some relationship with the adoption of curfew. To better access the argument, we would also need specific information to show that Dalton and Williamsville are sufficiently alike in the respect that the introduction of curfew will lead to similar result.

只是个人的意见：模板痕迹太重了。可能大家都这样。我也不了解ETS会不会在ARGU方面对模板问题宽松一些。但是好多词汇、语句，尤其是首尾段以及每段开头结尾，我之前也曾糅合修改、自己组成的极为类似的模板。我觉得这证明此类模式的模板被人借鉴的可能性太大了。所以还是稍微注意一下吧~~ BTW，我现在不用这几套模板了




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