argument127 [冲刺 小组] 第二次作业

MryanUID: 2281579

In this argument, the arguer concludes that personal or recreational activities on internet will lead to low productivity, in order to improve the conclusion, the arguer points out that they should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. In addition, the arguer reasons that if they want to improve their overall profits they must limit the time their subordinates spend on shopping or playing games. The argument suffers from several critical fallacies.

First of all, the vice precedent (VP) acclaim that people spend time on personal activities that cause the productivity dissatisfied without give any evidence. May be it was not the recreational activities that cause the productivity dissatisfied, the old machine or former blueprint that cause the low productivity, however, the personal activities have no bad influence to the productivity instead of foster a better work ethic at Climpson.

Secondly, even if the shopping or playing games on internet that caused the low productivity may be implement electronic monitor is still not a good improvement. May be the employees will feel the large pressure when there is an electronic monitoring on his/her PC or they will cause dissatisfaction from the workers which are all the aspect that will reduce the productivity. Without considering and ruling out these and other factors that might have served to reduce the productivity, the author cannot justifiably conclude that his plan will effect very well.

Thirdly, even though this installation well improvement the employees’ efficiency, the VP still fails to prove that install the monitor is a good method.
May be this electronic monitor software will spend a lot of funds or may be this software will slow down the computer because which is another aspect that reduce the efficiency. If it is true, spend this money on upgrade the computer is much better than install the monitor.

In conclusion, the VP fails to convince me that install this equipment is positively a good method, to strengthen the argument the author must account for that it was personal activity that cause the low productivity for sure and the subordinates do not care to install such equipment in their computer and it would cause little effect from the computer.

提纲：
1        文章肯定有问题了
2        效率不理想，是因为购物、游戏等的原因，没有证据证明这个推断，也可能是设备陈旧或者生产方案过时造成的；
3        即便是因为购物、游戏，那么安装监视软件就能提高效率吗？可能会给员工造成心理压力招致不满，这都不能提高效率。
4        即便安装监视软件能提高员工的工作效率，但他是不是会降低电脑的工作效率，或者这个软件成本很高？那么还不如吧这笔资金花在升级电脑上
5        总结

[ 本帖最后由 Mryan 于 2008-8-2 19:59 编辑 ]

chenhaozUID: 2525010

In this argument, the arguer concludes that personal or recreational activities on the Internet will lead to low productivities. In order to improve the conclusion, the arguer points out that they should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. In addition, the arguer reasons that if they want to improve their overall profits they must ban the time their subordinates spend on shopping or playing games. The argument suffers from several critical fallacies.

First of all, the vice president (VP) acclaims that spending time on personal activities will cause the productivity be dissatisfied, by giving no evidence. Maybe the productivity dissatisfied was not caused by the recreational activities, but was did by old machines or former blueprints. Personal activities may have no bad influence to the productivity, instead, it might foster a better work ethic at Climpson.

Secondly, even if shopping or playing games on internet that caused the low productivity may be implemented, electronic monitor is still not a good method. Maybe the employees will feel large pressure when there is an electronic monitoring on their PC, which will cause dissatisfaction of the workers to reduce the productivity. Without regarding such factors possibly reducing the productivity, the author cannot justifiably conclude that his plan will effect very well.

Thirdly, even though this installation well could improve the employees’ efficiency, the VP still fails to prove that install the monitor is a best method.
Maybe this electronic monitor software will cost a lot of funds or slow down the computer, which is another aspect that reduces the efficiency. If it is true, to spend this money on upgrade the computer is required to install the monitor.

In conclusion, the VP fails to convince me that installing this equipment is positively a good method. To strengthen the argument, the author must account for that personal activity causes the low productivity for sure, the subordinates do not care to install such equipment in their computer and it would cause little effect from the computer.