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发表于 2008-8-3 21:11:35 |显示全部楼层

第一次跟帖,看别人的还好,自己写起来还真不容易,胡乱写的,但改起来又有点不知所措,还是发上来,从拍中寻找突破口吧:loveliness:
BTW:总是管不住自己,今天又去逛街耽误了,鄙视自己一下,欢迎以后大家监督:funk:


Do you agree with the following statement: nowadays people spend too much time on personal enjoyment--things they like to do-- rather than the things they should do.

Accompanied with social development, relaxation an entertainment become a popular way of life nowadays. A growing recreation places like various shades of sports clubs for personal enjoyments appear near at hand. Someone may worry about that people spend too much time on the things they like to do rather than ought to do, however, from my point of view, such consideration may go to some degree negative.

The main reason for I hold this idea is that many people make great achievements from their personal enjoyments-the things they like to do. "Interest is the best teacher". The experiences of many scientists, such as Einstein, Newton, can prove it. The artists who devote themselves to their works are stronger evidences, though they might be misunderstood wasting of time before they succeeded. Thus, people should not blindly blame the one who is intrigued with something and attains the enjoyments from that.

Another reason is that it may be difficult to distinguish the things people like to do from the things they should do, except for some detrimental enjoyments like over -gambling. People can be roughly divided into two classes: first those whose work is work, enjoyments are enjoyments; and second whose work and enjoyments are one. For the second group, their work is their enjoyments, and how to tell the differences between them? The "too much personal enjoyments" statement seems a bit nonsense to them.

The final reason I would like to propose in this essay is that personal enjoyments are most important way of relaxation for busy people in modern days. Many people have to work five days a week and overtime working may not rarely be seen in daily work. They live in great pressure and need releasing themselves through personal enjoyments which is benefit for people's health.

In extremly frequent and competitive world, personal enjoyments is indispensable for the healthy life. Meanwhile, it means more to those who are engaged in pursuing great contributions to society. The aim of personal enjoyments is not just to relax, but also to make people more creative and intrepid to meet with new challenges enfronting with them.



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发表于 2008-8-3 22:11:55 |显示全部楼层

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请大家拍我吧,朝我扔砖吧 :mad

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发表于 2008-8-4 00:11:10 |显示全部楼层
我拍不出来,呵呵~觉得你写的挺好。
如果我能像你老是逛街,还写这么好就兴奋咯~~~

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发表于 2008-8-4 10:16:50 |显示全部楼层

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没有啦,我也是菜鸟一个,词汇简单,说理也不够强.....

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发表于 2008-8-4 15:19:07 |显示全部楼层

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请版主指点一下吧,诚心的,先谢过了

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发表于 2008-8-4 23:16:19 |显示全部楼层
哈哈。斑竹还没看到阿。

明天我帮你看看吧。

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发表于 2008-8-5 09:06:10 |显示全部楼层

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终于有人理我了,泪奔……
谢谢,多指教啊

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有6楼的同学帮你看   你们互改是一样的

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发表于 2008-8-6 08:37:34 |显示全部楼层

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我等着呢~~~,组长要看那么多,好忙的。。。。。。。

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发表于 2008-8-6 12:04:56 |显示全部楼层
文章题目。。。我的理解是说人们花费了太多时间在personal enjoyment上,而在the things they should do上花费的时间较少。你是否同意这个观点。lz是反驳这个观点的。那应该持有的观点是,人们花在personal enjoyment的时间其实不比things they should do的多,两者是一样的时间或者enjoyment更少的时间

好像文章后来的观点转而是围绕为什么应该花费更多的时间在personal enjoyment上了。观点一,enjoyment导致achievement,enjoy是应该的。观点二,有人work就是enjoyment,两者不分家。观点三,enjoyment的激发更有效率的工作。

观点二还是可用的,但是观点一和三值得斟酌。。。
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太阳当空照,僵尸对我笑,骷髅说早早早,你为什么背上炸药包?我要炸学校,心情特别好,一拉弦,赶快跑,轰隆一声学校不见了。

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发表于 2008-8-6 21:52:23 |显示全部楼层

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谢谢斑竹,一针见血阿,我改成这样会不会好些?
观点1:人们work的时间比enjoyment长——人们一周工作五天休息两天,甚至周末也要加班。
观点2:有时二者相互联系或转化。首先,对于工作娱乐合为一体的人,二者难以区分;其次,对于道多数普通人而言,personal enjoyments能够帮助人们放松身心,提高效率,从这个意义上来说,它不仅是人们喜欢做的事情,也是人们应该做的事情。

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发表于 2008-8-6 23:39:13 |显示全部楼层
那你支持的观点是哪个呢?
从第一个观点来看支持的观点是things should do的比enjoyment的长,第二个的话陷入混乱,其实两者不分家。

如果你支持的观点是things should do的比enjoyment长,就可以把第二个观点改成有些人工作和享受不分家,比如说跟一些客户之类吃饭K歌的表面上这是enjoyment,实际上还是在为工作努力这之类的examples。或者说周末看似是旅游啊picnic啊这些有时候还是跟工作有关系,为了在旅途中多了解一些东西对工作有用的(像导游啊,作家啊都是需要开阔视野的)
太阳当空照,僵尸对我笑,骷髅说早早早,你为什么背上炸药包?我要炸学校,心情特别好,一拉弦,赶快跑,轰隆一声学校不见了。

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发表于 2008-8-10 19:19:06 |显示全部楼层

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谢谢热心的斑竹MM

我观点2的表达可能太抽象了,本意是说,对于有些人(比如企业家之类),他们的工作和娱乐是一体的,比如一边打高尔夫一边谈生意等。看了斑竹举的例子,我感到思路又开阔了一些,谢谢了!我想一想怎么糅合,:)

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