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The author contends that people should disobey and resist unjust laws, and only obey just ones. In my view, I fundamentally disagree with the author. Every individual should obey laws regardless of whether he views them as just or unjust, which could be substantiated by the following discussions.

To begin with, whether a law is just or unjust is rarely a straightforward issue. The fairness of any law depends on one’s personal value system. A law which benefits certain people may harm the feelings of others’. For example, the euthanasia might be seen as benevolence at the time when patients cannot bear the afflictions any further and their families are also on the brink of collapse mentally and economically. However, other people might think the laws which allow the euthanasia would provide a way to deprive other's lives. The essence of law aims to ensure fairness for general people. Therefore, we should not simply treat laws as two types: just and unjust.
安乐死也许可以换个例子，怕雷同。。。因为好像大家都知道换成安乐死这个例子。

In the second place, individuals should obey even if they suspect the laws are unjust. Laws resemble morality because they are designed to control or alter our behaviors. But unlike rules of morality, laws are enforced by the courts; if you break a law--whether you are on purpose or not--you may be forced to pay a compensate, or even go to prison. Disobeying and resisting the laws which people think are unfair could be seen as the behaviors disturbing the social order. Just like in the military, every soldier should obey the commands given to him; otherwise the troop would be out of order and could not win any war. On the other hand, suspecting the laws might be an excuse for certain people to avoid their responsibilities. Under this circumstance, the morality could be a hindrance for laws to be executed fairly. We should not confound laws and morality. In brief, obeying the laws should be a responsibility for every individual.

Finally, the correct attitude toward the flaws of established laws is to reflect them to the legislators through proper way rather than to resist it. Certainly, with the development of society and people’s views, the laws might have flaws in certain aspects. The amendments for laws are necessary and should be stable and suitable for general people, so the process of reflecting to the legislator to consider and discuss is needed. And actually, if a law is really flawed, the legislators may notice that much earlier before us due to their systematic knowledge of laws and clairvoyance of the laws. Only in this mild way could social regulations be improved appropriately and we maintain our rights to the most and without imprudence.
看得出来有点范文的影子 不过语言改了就不会有什么问题 借助思想不犯法 呵呵
To conclude, every individual should obey laws whether he think they are just or unjust, and he should reflect the unjust laws to the legislature rather than disobey and resist them.
离500字只差几十个了， 你完全可以把结尾再多说几句，撑长结尾就可以到达另一个层次了。

总体来说， 不错！
加油！

1001storyUID: 2516918

The author contends that people should disobey and resist unjust laws, and only obey just ones. In my view, I fundamentally disagree with the author. Every individual should obey laws regardless of whether he views them as just or unjust, which could be substantiated by the following discussions.

To begin with, whether a law is just or unjust is rarely a straightforward issue.(从你后面没有看出来这个问题的复杂性哈！) The fairness of any law depends on one’s personal value system. A law which benefits certain people may harm the feelings of others’. For example, the euthanasia might be seen as benevolence at the time when patients cannot bear the afflictions any further and their families are also on the brink of collapse mentally and economically.（放在on前会不会好点） However, other people might think the laws which allow the euthanasia would provide a way to deprive other's lives. The essence of law aims to ensure fairness for general people. Therefore, we should not simply treat laws as two types: just and unjust.

In the second place, individuals should obey even if they suspect the laws are unjust. Laws resemble morality because they are designed to control or alter our behaviors. But unlike rules of morality, laws are enforced by the courts; if you break a law--whether you are on purpose or not--you may be forced to pay a compensate, or even go to prison. Disobeying and resisting the laws which people think are unfair could be seen as the behaviors disturbing the social order. Just like in the military, every soldier should obey the commands given to him; otherwise the troop would be out of order and could not win any war. On the other hand, suspecting the laws might be an excuse for certain people to avoid their responsibilities. Under this circumstance, the morality could be a hindrance for laws to be executed fairly. We should not confound laws and morality. In brief, obeying the laws should be a responsibility for every individual.（这段写的最好！）

Finally, the correct attitude toward the flaws of established laws is to reflect them to the legislators through proper way rather than to resist it. Certainly, with the development of society and people’s views, the laws might have flaws in certain aspects. The amendments for laws are necessary and should be stable and suitable for general people, so the process of reflecting to the legislator to consider and discuss is needed. （这里的逻辑有点问题：修正法律有必要，立法人应该考虑和讨论，总感觉不对劲，你看这样如何：法律的错误修改很重要，所以修正和立法人的关注很重要！）And actually, if a law is really flawed, the legislators may notice that much earlier before us due to their systematic knowledge of laws and clairvoyance of the laws. Only in this mild way （mild way指什么，如果你要用代词，最好前面是提过的哈！）could social regulations be improved appropriately and we maintain our rights to the most and without imprudence.

To conclude, every individual should obey laws whether he think they are just or unjust, and he should reflect the unjust laws to the legislature rather than disobey and resist them.（你这个结尾有些太仓促了哈！）
以上观点仅供参考哈！