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Do you agree or disagree， if people want to have a good future they should have a careful plan while they are still young（周一作业）.

Nowadays, competition in our society becomes more and more fierce and even if a child is undergoing vast pressure from different aspects, such as family, school and even other children. And so, considering about having a good future, people are more concerning about the issue that whether people should lay out a deliberate plan since they are young. As far as I am concerned, people shouldn't and even couldn't make a careful or perfect plan for their future when they are young, and there are a couple of reasons as follows:

First of all, young people couldn't figure out a thoughtful blueprint for their future because their perspectives to social events, social advancement and personal development are so immature and incomplete. Social events are important factors that will affect young people's plans, but many hot events in our society have bad influence on young person’s development. For example, there are so many people who have invested stock in China and young people accounted for a large percentage. As a result, a large number of young people lost all their money even the money that is supposed to be used in their education. However, other people who have enough social experience will not put their money in stock market. On the contrary, there are admittedly many people who had bought stock acquired much higher interest due to their strong psychological condition and they could undertake strong stress and conquer tough difficulties. Nevertheless, attributing to low abilities in analyzing the trend of social development and their immature characteristics, it is hard for young people to make a better plan for their future development.

In the second place, it is challenging even for parents who have powerful social experience to design an effective plan to their sons not to mention young people themselves. On of the most crucial reasons why young people will confront with difficulties in the process of working out a careful plan for themselves is that the development of our society is faster and faster.  Therefore, it is close to impossible to make considerate plan to any person. Choosing schools of young people is a good example standing around us, young people and even their parents are always lack of determinations when at the critical period that they would step into elementary schools, high schools or colleges. When young people choose elementary schools, they could not immediately make a decision between near home schools with bad education level or high teaching quality but farther schools. When it comes to high school, studying mathematics, physics and chemistry or learning geography, history and politics is another big question in front of them. Even though young people are enrolled by colleges, they still will be annoyed at which majors they should pursue. In a word, by investigating the complication of social development, young people could not ensure which major or which career would have a good future for their personal development.

Last but not least, for a person, the better way to make a complete personal plan is perfecting it again and again during his or his whole life. Only when we go farther, we can see even farther. Person can hardly predict a thing when he or she is far away from it. The same reason, only if one person can really touch his preliminary plan, he can ameliorate them. For instance, many young students set up their dreams to become scientists and hoped to acquire more achievements in their careers while they were just at high school. Indeed, they were enlisted in research-oriented colleges. However, merely through one year's study at those colleges, they found that they were not suitable to consider research as their life-long plans. Eventually, they should modify or alter their plans, and only by doing like this they can get more benefits. And so, people's plans need continuous improvement throughout their life until there are carefully enough.

To sum up, taking social events, social advancement and young people development into consideration, I believe that people couldn't think out a good and careful plan when they are still young. Hence, people who want to harvest a good future are required to pave the way for their successes during whole life

lemon1kgUID: 2309820

LZ你的字数都要飙到600了吧~GRE也不过如此吧。。。太牛掰了。
你怎么保证30分钟字打得这么快，而且基本没有拼写错误啊？

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Nowadays, competition in our society becomes more and more fierce and even if a child is undergoing vast pressure(pressures) from different aspects, such as family, school and even other children. And so, considering about having a good future, people are more concerning about the issue that whether people should lay out a deliberate plan since they are young (this sentence is perfect!~). As far as I am concerned, people shouldn't and even couldn't make a careful or perfect plan for their future when they are young, and there are a couple of reasons as follows:
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First of all, young people couldn't figure out a thoughtful blueprint for their future because their perspectives to social events, social advancement and personal development are so immature and incomplete. Social events are important factors that will affect young people's plans, but many hot events in our society have bad influence on young person’s development. For example, there are so many people who have invested stock in China and young people accounted for a large percentage. As a result, a large number of young people lost all their money even the money that is supposed to be used in their education. However, other people who have enough social experience will not put their money in stock market. On the contrary, there are admittedly many people who had bought stock acquired much higher interest due to their strong psychological condition and they could undertake strong stress and conquer tough difficulties. Nevertheless, attributing to low abilities in analyzing the trend of social development and their immature characteristics, it is hard for young people to make a better plan for their future development.
In the second place, it is challenging even for parents who have powerful social experience to design an effective plan to their sons not to mention young people themselves. On(one) of the most crucial reasons why young people will confront with difficulties in the process of working out a careful plan for themselves is that the development of our society is faster and faster.  Therefore, it is close to impossible to make considerate plan to any person. Choosing schools of young people is a good example standing around us, young people and even their parents are always lack of determinations (I think it is not something about determination, it is about experience or insight. Determination means one is lack of courage to do sth. So it might be better of you to substitute that word)when at the critical period that they would step into elementary schools, high schools or colleges. When young people choose elementary schools, they could not immediately make a decision between near home schools with bad education level or high teaching quality but farther schools. When it comes to high school, studying mathematics, physics and chemistry or learning geography, history and politics is another big question in front of them. Even though young people are enrolled by colleges, they still will be annoyed at which majors they should pursue. In a word, by investigating the complication of social development, young people could not ensure which major or which career would have a good future for their personal development.

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Last but not least, for a person, the better way to make a complete personal plan is perfecting it again and again during his or his whole life. Only when we go farther, we can see even farther(Do native speakers put it in this way? I doubt it, but still not sure). Person can hardly predict a(one) thing when he or she is far away from it. The same reason, only if one person can really touch his preliminary plan, he can ameliorate them. For instance, many young students set up their dreams to become scientists and hoped to acquire more achievements in their careers while they were just at high school. Indeed, they were enlisted in research-oriented colleges. However, merely through one year's study at those colleges, they found that they were not suitable to consider research as their life-long plans. Eventually, they should modify or alter their plans, and only by doing like this they can get more benefits. And so, people's plans need continuous improvement throughout their life until there are carefully enough.

To sum up, taking social events, social advancement and young people development into consideration, I believe that people couldn't think out a good and careful plan when they are still young. Hence, people who want to harvest a good future are required to pave the way for their successes during whole life
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Only when we go farther, we can see even farther
好像在哪里看到的文章里这么写的。忘了 阿。

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原帖由 lemon1kg 于 2008-8-5 12:11 发表
LZ你的字数都要飙到600了吧~GRE也不过如此吧。。。太牛掰了。
你怎么保证30分钟字打得这么快，而且基本没有拼写错误啊？

固定好各部分模式开始写。
写得时候基本感觉像没思考一样。
就可以了。
疯狂的写。