IMPULSE小组作业-周二作业-ktury

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2006 年10 月15 日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. For someone who wants to be successful in the society, knowledge gained from study is more important than the ability of being creative（周二作业）

There are many books on the success calling to us in today's society. Many celebrities are invented to talk about the experiences. Thus, the argument that one who wants to be successful in the society, knowledge is more important than the ability of being creative is discussed seriously. I agree with the statement. it is, however, not to say the creative ability is not useless.

Firstly, there are large amounts of ways to success; the knowledge, however, is the prerequisite. As the development of industrialization society, it is so hard that to be employed without knowledge not to say to be succeed. Those who only suffer lower education and do not keep the special skills could just participant the laborious work. So, those people want to learn some special skills such cooking, automobile repairing, and ect. They would change their living condition or even be successful in the special fields, if they are familiar with one special skill. Learning knowledge does not merely mean gaining knowledge from collages or schools, but also includes getting experiences from those celebrities. But, one sever error exists in learning the experience-just copy their successful pattern totally. If one has decided to use a successful experience, he/she would learn the experience and find his/her own approach, completely copy is useless.  

Furthermore, gaining knowledge from study is a royal road to be successful in the society. Parents are more emphasis on the education and tend to unconsidered the expenditures, spending on the education. they send their children to study variety curriculums such as singing, playing piano, or drawing and so on, in order to make their children excel the peer in the future. Meanwhile, the reason why most students should attend universities is that that is not the necessary way to be succeess but it is an royal way to. Nowadays, the bachelor degree has been normal; more and more students pursue the master degree, even some go to abroad to study since to increase their capability and to be successful in the future.

It is not to mean, however, that the creative ability is not important. The creative ability could push the company to top in its field. For example, at first the SONY is not the top company in the electronic production field. After it designed and produced the first radio, it loomed over others and became the leader in the electronic production field.

In sum, learning knowledge is the prerequisite and the royal road to the success. At the same time, the creative ability could help us a lot to be succeed.


[ 本帖最后由 ktury 于 2008-8-5 22:44 编辑 ]

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There are many books on the success calling to (what is the meaning of Call To?)us in today's society. Many celebrities are invented(invited) to talk about the(their) experiences. Thus, the argument that one who wants to be successful in the society, knowledge is more important than the ability of being creative is discussed seriously(Thus,to those who want to be successful in the society, the argument that which one is more important, knowledge or creativity, is being discussed seriously.). I agree with the statement. it is, however, not to say the creative ability is not useless.(sorry, cannot catch your point. Maybe you should put it in a simple way. Remember, the most important thing in your writing is to make sure the score rater could understand you. )

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[ 本帖最后由 gabby19832004 于 2008-8-6 20:33 编辑 ]

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谢谢你的细心批改 十分感谢

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There are many books on the success calling to us in today's society. Many celebrities are invented to talk about the experiences. Thus, the argument that one who wants to be successful in the society, knowledge is more important than the ability of being creative is discussed seriously. I agree with the statement. it is, however, not to say the creative ability is not useless.(观点不明)

Firstly, there are large amounts of ways to success; the knowledge, however, is the prerequisite. As the development of industrialization society, it is so hard that to be employed without knowledge not to say to be succeed. Those who only suffer lower education and do not keep the special skills could just participant the laborious work. So, those people want to learn some special skills such cooking, automobile repairing, and ect. They would change their living condition or even be successful in the special fields, if they are familiar with one special skill. Learning knowledge does not merely mean gaining knowledge from collages or schools, but also includes getting experiences from those celebrities. But, one sever error exists in learning the experience-just copy their successful pattern totally. If one has decided to use a successful experience, he/she would learn the experience and find his/her own approach, completely copy is useless.  留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAap%e/^!e2P

Furthermore, gaining knowledge from study is a royal road to be successful in the society. Parents are more emphasis on the education and tend to unconsidered the expenditures, spending on the education. they send their children to study variety curriculums such as singing, playing piano, or drawing and so on, in order to make their children excel the peer in the future. Meanwhile, the reason why most students should attend universities is that that is not the necessary way to be succeess but it is an royal way to. Nowadays, the bachelor degree has been normal; more and more students pursue the master degree, even some go to abroad to study since to increase their capability and to be successful in the future.


It is not to mean, however, that the creative ability is not important. The creative ability could push the company to top in its field. For example, at first the SONY is not the top company in the electronic production field. After it designed and produced the first radio, it loomed over others and became the leader in the electronic production field.

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行文很好。
学习了。