COMEON小组--------yuanhu124 9.8 作业

yuanhu124UID: 2444317

现在要开始限时了，今天超时10分钟，感觉时间的分配还不是很熟练，明晰的观点也不能很快形成。唉~~最后的冲刺了啊！

Along with the development of scientific research, more and more animals, such as mouse, dog, are used in the experiments to survey the nature of human beings. As we human beings are evolved from the primate, the studying of animals can definitely help us to learn our physical functions. However, we should recognize that animals are animals. They are different from humans in many aspects and the study of animals for the aim of human research should be limited.

According to Darwin's evolution theory, we human beings and others primate animals, such as monkey, ape are relatives. We can even say that human is a kind of animal in the nature. Comparing with some animals, we do not only have many same physical organs, but also with a lot of common behaviors and emotions. Take monkey for example, if you observe them carefully, you may learn that their face expressions are very like our human beings'. They can laugh, or cry as what we would do in the same situations. Therefore, it is absolutely a possible approach to learn human nature by the research of animals.

Nevertheless, we have to admit that in the process of evolution, human has gained a large number of advanced organs and skills. We can not learn ourselves only by the experiments on animals. For instance, human's brain is the largest and most complex one in all species. We can not learn all of the human brain’s characters by using animals. What is more, many medicines which have been applied in the animals can not be directly used in human body in that it may cause unforeseeable effects.

Furthermore, to the animal protectors, there should be ethic principles to save animals from being easily killed in the experiments. Animals have the right to survive as well. While in the development of scientific research, too many animals have lost their life. For the animal protectors, it remains a question whether the study of animals is the only way to know our humans.

To sum up, we human beings do relate to the animals, while we are not the same in every aspect. The utilization of animals to learn human nature should be maintained in a reasonable state.

[ 本帖最后由 yuanhu124 于 2008-9-9 11:58 编辑 ]

kathyfei2007UID: 2436983

Along with the development of scientific research, more and more animals, such as mouse, dog, are used in the experiments to survey the nature of human beings. As we human beings are evolved from the primate, the studying of animals can definitely help us to learn our physical functions. However, we should recognize that animals are animals. They are different from humans in many aspects and the study of animals for the aim of human research should be limited.


According to Darwin's evolution theory, we human beings and others primate animals, such as monkey,(monkeys) apes,  are relatives. We can even say that human is a kind of animal in the nature. Comparing with some animals, we do not only have many same physical organs, but also with a lot of common behaviors and emotions. Take monkey for example, if you observe them carefully, you may learn that their face expressions are very like our human beings'. They can laugh, or cry as what we would do in the same situations. Therefore, it is absolutely a possible approach to learn human nature by the research of animals.
Nevertheless, we have to admit that in the process of evolution, human has gained a large number of advanced organs and skills. We can not learn ourselves only by the experiments on animals. For instance,(the) human's brain is the largest and most complex one in all species. We can not learn all of the human brain’s characters by using animals. What is more, many medicines which have been applied in the animals can not be directly used in human body in that it may cause unforeseeable (unpredictable bad) effects.
Furthermore, to the animal protectors, there should be ethic principles to save animals from being easily killed in the experiments. Animals have the right to survive as well. While in the development of scientific research, too many animals have lost their life. For the animal protectors, it remains a question (that) whether the study of animals is the only way to know our humans.


To sum up, we human beings do relate to the animals, while we are not the same in every aspect as animals. The utilization of animals to learn human nature should be maintained in a reasonable state.
楼主的这篇文章论证充分，结构清晰，层次分明，是一篇不错的文章，但如果把反对题目的方面论证的在充分详细一些，支持的方面少写一些就更好了，因为这才是楼主这篇文章的主题，个人意见，仅供参考。
麻烦帮我也改一下https://bbs.gter.net/thread-876618-1-1.html，谢谢

candyamUID: 2325105

我认为这篇文章至少做到了言之有物，而不是泛泛的空谈。值得肯定。
至于其他方面，比如更好的逻辑，更好的内容，还需仔细斟酌，大家都有待提高啊~~~~

但是我认为言之有物是非常重要，空洞的谈来谈去好像不太适合托福作文。
所以我认为基本调调是好的。

yuanhu124UID: 2444317

谢谢楼上二位的修改和意见！使得我看到一些光明啊。说实话，前前后后在COMEON小组里已经练习了差不多十来篇作文了，自己感觉提高还是挺明显的，至少现在对作文的结构比较有底了，知道大概该写什么了。不过，就现在的水平看，想拿高分还很难，大家共勉吧！