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Does study of animals help us to learn human natural.

Countless studies and experiments of animals have been done by researchers in order help understand more about human natural and we get all kinds of conclusions from these studies. Most of these results could be divided into two groups, the physical natural and the emotion natural. These studies do let us have a much better understanding about human natural as discussed below.

First of all, the results from the animal experiment can provide us with precious information due to the physical similarities between animal and human beings. This is especially true when it comes to the medical field. Take the invention of new medical method for example. It is not appropriate to do experiment directly on people. What we should do is to turn to certain animals and see their reaction to these medical methods. During the experimental time, we can adjust the proportion of each kind of medicine segments, and we can also try any new surgical method until the result is satisfying. It is no doubt that we learn more about the human physical natural by studying animals.

Moreover, the results from the animal experiment could also provide us with clues to know more about human being’s emotional natural. It is widely accepted that animal have emotions. For instance, a male animal will looked depressed when losing his female partner, and a mild character may be irrated(激怒) by departing with her newly both children. Back to the medical field mentioned above, based on the emotional similarities, we could do experiment on animals to see their reaction to different treatment which could be applied to human beings if the results is positive.

Someone may hold different opinion that human natural including physical and emotional is more complex than the animal, and it make no sense to study animal natural.However, we could not deny the similarities between animal and human beings. And we could consider animal natural to be an important reference for the study of human natural, as long as we share the same natural.

In sum, as discussed above, the study of natural has already helped us know about human being's natural to some extend and it will make more sense if we choose the right species for the right study topic of human natural.


写得太混乱了，时间太紧张了。

devilkinelevenUID: 2442869

Countless studies and experiments of animals have been done by researchers in order (to) help understand more about human natural(nature,natural是形容词，后面还有同样错的，就不改了)and we get all kinds of conclusions from these studies. Most of these results could be divided into two groups, the physical natural and the emotion natural. These studies do let us have a much better understanding about human natural as discussed below.
First of all, the results from the animal experiment can provide us with precious information due to the physical similarities between animal and human beings. This is especially true when it comes to the medical field. Take the invention of new medical method for example. It is not appropriate to do experiment directly on people. What we should do is to turn to certain animals and see their reaction to these medical methods. During the experimental time, we can adjust the proportion of each kind of medicine segments(ingredient), and we can also try any new surgical method until the result is satisfying. It is(There is) no doubt that we learn more about the human physical natural by studying animals.
Moreover, the results from the animal experiment could also provide us with clues to know more about human being’s emotional natural. It is widely accepted that animal have emotions. For instance, a male animal will looked(去ed） depressed when losing his female partner, and a mild character（person） may be irrated(激怒) by（when) departing with her newly both children. Back to the medical field mentioned above, based on the emotional similarities, we could do experiment on animals to see their reaction to different treatment which could be applied to human beings if the results is positive.
Someone may hold different opinion that human natural including physical and emotional (nature) is more complex than the animal(animals), and it make（s） no sense to study animal natural.However, we could not deny the similarities between animal(s) and human beings. And we could consider animal natural to be an important reference for the study of human natural, as long as we share the same natural.
In sum, as discussed above, the study of natural has already helped us know about human being's natural to some extend and it will make more sense if we choose the right species for the right study topic（subject） of human natural.

条理上还是挺清楚的，展开部分不很顺畅，可能是都谈的太泛没有具体的例证。

kturyUID: 2274868

楼上的对你用词和语法上的问题 提的很好，那我就 说一下论证的部分
Countless studies and experiments of animals have been done by researchers in order help understand more about human natural and we get all kinds of conclusions from these studies. Most of these results could be divided into two groups, the physical natural and the emotion natural. These studies do let us have a much better understanding about human natural as discussed below.

first of all, the results from the animal experiments can provide us with precious informations due to the physical similarities between animals and human beings. This is especially true when it comes to the medical field. Take the invention of new medical method for example. It is not appropriate to do experiment directly on people. What we should do is to turn to certain animals and see their reaction to these medical methods. During the experimental time, we can adjust the proportion of each kind of medicine segments, and we can also try any new surgical method until the result is satisfying. It is no doubt that we learn more about the human physical natural by studying animals.[感觉用动物作试验不妥，题目是说观察动物行为，human nutare 指人的本性]

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Moreover, the results from the animal experiment could also provide us with clues to know more about human being’s emotional natural. It is widely accepted that animal have emotions. For instance, a male animal will looked depressed when losing his female partner, and a mild character may be irrated(激怒) by departing with her newly both children. Back to the medical field mentioned above, based on the emotional similarities, we could do experiment on animals to see their reaction to different treatment which could be applied to human beings if the results is positive.[你同意研究动物对人有益  但是有益的方面说的太少。]

Someone may hold different opinion that human natural including physical and emotional is more complex than the animal, and it make no sense to study animal natural.However, we could not deny the similarities between animal and human beings. And we could consider animal natural to be an important reference for the study of human natural, as long as we share the same natural.

In sum, as discussed above, the study of natural has already helped us know about human being's natural to some extend and it will make more sense if we choose the right species for the right study topic of human natural。

全文结构很好  但是对题目的剖悉不够 总体讲有些跑题，尽管你在最后努力地扣题