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03/02/08：Do you agree or disagree the following statement: people today spend too much time on their enjoyment-what they like to do, rather than what they should do.

Nowadays there is an increasingly notable controversy concerning whether people spend too much time on entertainment rather than the things that they should do.  Arguing for people spend more time on what they should do are those people who hold the opinion that we live in a fast-paced and fierce competitive society, therefore people need spend most of their time on work and study. As far as I am concerned, however, people do spend a lot of time on their enjoyment, when considering the increasing number of online player and couch potato.

To begin with, it is undeniable that some people do focus on work and study in most of their time, such as successful businessmen, passionate politicians, college students as well as scientists. It seems ironical but actual that this relatively small proportion of people supports the operation of the whole society.  For instance, a resent survey indicates that less than one million IT professionals provide a huge amount of services, such as developing a variety of software, solving hardware problems, to more than two billion customers around the world in order to meet their requirements.

Nevertheless, most of people spend little time and energy on work, study, or anything else they should do, but rather to waste their time on enjoyment and entertainment.  One compelling reason supporting my point is the dramatically increasing number of online player.  With the development of computer and the Internet technology, many teenagers addict to online games, lots of them immerse in online game almost 24 hours a day, they even do not eat and sleep, let alone work or study.

An additional reason is more and more couch potatoes in the United States.  As we know, the U.S.is a highly developed country with high degree of mechanization and sound social welfare system.  Farmers in the U.S. work only a short time per day for the benefits brought by mechanization; workers who lose their jobs do not anxious to find another one because of the sound social welfare system.  Therefore, a specially group of people, couch potato, emerge in modern American society who waste their time on watching television with snack.  This phenomenon illustrates that nowadays lots of people spend their time on enjoyment rather than valuable issues.

In conclusion, although a considerable number of people still work or study hard in modern society, it cannot compete with the number of people who waste time on enjoyment, when both people addict to online game and couch potatoes are taken into account.  From my point of view, people today spend too much time on their enjoyment-what they like to do, rather than what they should do.

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Nowadays there is an increasingly notable controversy concerning whether people spend too much time on entertainment rather than the things that they should do.  Arguing for people spend more time on what they should do are those people who hold the opinion that we live in a fast-paced and fierce competitive society, therefore people need spend most of their time on work and study. As far as I am concerned, however, people do spend a lot of time on their enjoyment, when considering the increasing number of online player and couch potato.(观点是同意)
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To begin with, it is undeniable that some people do focus on work and study in most of their time, such as successful businessmen, passionate politicians, college students as well as scientists. It seems ironical but actual that this relatively small proportion of people supports the operation of the whole society.  For instance, a resent survey indicates that less than one million IT professionals provide a huge amount of services, such as developing a variety of software, solving hardware problems, to more than two billion customers around the world in order to meet their requirements.(首先本段论证方法是比较丰富的,但是没有支持论点!只有少数人办正事并不是说人们花太多时间在娱乐上~)&ki{g(M"}
Nevertheless, most of people spend little time and energy on work, study, or anything else they should do, but rather to waste their time on enjoyment and entertainment.(句意矛盾)  One compelling reason supporting my point is the dramatically increasing number of online player(立意好).  With the development of computer and the Internet technology, many teenagers addict to online games, lots of them immerse in online game almost 24 hours a day, they even do not eat and sleep, let alone work or study.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE H3t,}\*hT
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An additional reason is more and more couch potatoes in the United States.  As we know, the U.S.is a highly developed country with high degree of mechanization and sound social welfare system.  Farmers in the U.S. work only a short time per day for the benefits brought by mechanization; workers who lose their jobs do not anxious to find another one because of the sound social welfare system.  Therefore, a specially group of people, couch potato, emerge in modern American society who waste their time on watching television with snack.  This phenomenon illustrates that nowadays lots of people spend their time on enjoyment rather than valuable issues.(本段写的好值得学习~) bbs.gter.net(fj:T'~2]){
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In conclusion, although a considerable number of people still work or study hard in modern society, it cannot compete with the number of people who waste time on enjoyment, when both people addict to online game and couch potatoes are taken into account.  From my point of view, people today spend too much time on their enjoyment-what they like to do, rather than what they should


    首先,作者的文笔还是很好的~ 但在词汇的使用上偏简单化,要想拿高分的话要对词汇进行培养.
    其次,楼主对本题的把握还有待考虑,问题是"人们花太多的时间在娱乐上........."不是"大多数人花太多时间在...."