COMEON作文小组------cleanwater25 10月23日作业

cleanwater25UID: 2295333

A or D : Grades(marks) encourage students to learn? (2008/2/16，185里面的经典题目 学习和教育类
提纲：同意
1，分数让我们知道我们的弱点
2，分数可以激励我们追求更好
3，虽然分数有写负面作用，但是老师的良好引导可以避免

When referring to the effect the grades marks on the development of a student, there are a lot of different voices from various people. Some people hold the opinion that grades mark usually play a positive role to encourage students to study harder, meanwhile others hold the opposite consideration. However, as far as I am concerned, grades mark was stimulation for almost every student to improve their study in any courses they learn.

The chief reason for my preference to the grades mark is that it is beneficial for us to point out exactly where our weakness exists. Figuratively speaking, a test or examination is just like a mirror in which we can obviously find out what ourselves are like. To illustrate this point, here is my real experience which is relatively persuasive. In the first English exam, I got a quite terrible score. On my paper, every question I had answered wrong was marked by a big red "cross". In the grammar section, I did even worse. Nevertheless, those mistakes definitely helped me figure out my weakness. What is more, they also helped me concentrate all my attention on the explanation given by my teacher. As a result, I did not make any similar errors in my later exams which truly enhance both my grades mark and study.


Another reason why I agree with this idea is that low marks are generally regarded as stimulation for students to study harder than before. As it is know to all of us, our society is filled with any kinds of competitions. No one can deny the fact that there would be an activity excluding competition, not to mention study among the students. Only by comparing with our classmates can we both feel discontent to our achievements and scores, and pursuit a better marks. For example, I got 95 in my math test when I was a freshman in my university, I felt so satisfactory about it. However, when I was told that three of my classmates got higher marks, all my sense of elation soon gone away which encouraged me to study harder.


Although, no one can imprudently claim score must be positive to every student, because low score can frustrate the confidence of a student, especially for that of introverted students, however, we can avoid such problems by our teachers' correct encouragement. For example, one of my friends usually cried after got low scores, and she did not feel like communicating with any other students for a long period of time. Fortunately, our head teacher found out her problem in time and stimulated her to do well in the next test, which gradually adjusted her psyche.

In sum, grade mark is double-edged sword. Although score has some negative effects on small group of students, it helps most students to find out their weakness and encourage them to performance better. What's more, the influence of the negative aspect can be reduced or even can be removed by a good conduction by teachers.

gjunUID: 2537391

:cool: 绝对的好文章!!!!!结构上,词汇上,TS,论证都十分棒.文章很流畅,读起来很舒服的感觉~
要向你学习!
错误十分罕见,下面是两处我认为需斟酌的地方.

Another reason why I agree with this idea is that low marks are generally regarded as stimulation for students to study harder than before. As it is know(known) to all of us, our society is filled with any(many, all, various) kinds of competitions.

有个问题问楼主,你这篇文章有近500字,是在30'之内完成的么?

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

When referring to the effect the grades marks on the development of a student, there are a lot of different voices from various people. Some people hold the opinion that grades mark usually play a positive role to encourage students to study harder, meanwhile others hold the opposite consideration. However, as far as I am concerned, grades mark was stimulation for almost every student to improve their study in any courses they learn.

The chief reason for my preference to the grades mark is that it is beneficial for us to point out exactly where our weakness exists. Figuratively speaking, a test or examination is just like a mirror in which we can obviously find out what ourselves are like. To illustrate this point, here is my real experience which is relatively persuasive/前几天看了别人的文章，有个词组shed some light on it用在这貌似很合适. In the first English exam, I got a quite terrible score. On my paper, every question I had answered wrong was marked by a big red "cross". In the grammar section, I did even worse. Nevertheless, those mistakes definitely helped me figure out my weakness. What is more, they also helped me concentrate all my attention on the explanation given by my teacher. As a result, I did not make any similar errors in my later exams which truly enhance both my grades mark and study.


Another reason why I agree with this idea is that low marks are generally regarded as stimulation for students to study harder than before. As it is know to all of us, our society is filled with any/numerous kinds of competitions. No one can deny the fact that there would be an/no activity excluding competition, not to mention study among the students. Only by comparing with our classmates can we both feel discontent to our achievements and scores, and pursuit a better marks. For example, I got 95 in my math test when I was a freshman in my university, I felt so satisfactory about it. However, when I was told that three of my classmates got higher marks, all my sense of elation soon gone away which encouraged me to study harder.

Although, no one can imprudently claim score must be positive to every student, because low score can frustrate the confidence of a student, especially for that of introverted students, however, we can avoid such problems by our teachers' correct encouragement. For example, one of my friends usually cried after got low scores, and she did not feel like communicating with any other students for a long period of time. Fortunately, our head teacher found out her problem in time and stimulated her to do well in the next test, which gradually adjusted her psyche/feeling.

In sum, grade mark is double-edged sword. Although score has some negative effects on small group of students, it helps most students to find out their weakness and encourage them to performance better. What's more, the influence of the negative aspect can be reduced or even can be removed/avoid by a good conduction by teachers.

没什么好改的啊……基本上只能发现点小问题……
我是求回拍的，呵呵~

jimibtUID: 2560923

When referring to the effect the grades marks(改为grades mark，因为grades首次提出，不是某个具体的grades) on the development of a student, there are a lot of different voices from various people. Some people hold the opinion that grades mark usually play a positive role to encourage students to study harder, meanwhile others hold the opposite consideration. However, as far as I am concerned, grades mark(google没查到这个说法，建议将mark去掉) was（改is ） stimulation(改为an important，否则原话意义不大) for almost every student to improve their study in any courses（改为course） they learn

The chief reason for my preference to the grades mark is that it is beneficial for us to point out exactly where our weakness exists. Figuratively speaking, a test or examination is just like a mirror in which we can obviously find out what ourselves are like. To illustrate this point, here is my real experience which is relatively persuasive. In the first English exam, I got a quite terrible score. On my paper, every question I had answered wrong was marked by a big red "cross". In the grammar section, I did even worse. Nevertheless, those mistakes definitely helped me figure out my weakness. What is more, they also helped me concentrate all my attention on the explanation given by my teacher. As a result, I did not make any similar errors in my later exams which truly enhance both my grades mark and study.

Another reason why I agree with this idea is that low marks are generally regarded as stimulation for students to study harder than before. As it is know to all of us, our society is filled with any kinds(觉得any 用法不妥，改为many 似乎好一点) of competitions. No one can deny the fact that there would (加not)be an activity excluding competition, not to mention study among the students. Only by comparing with our classmates can we both feel discontent to our achievements and scores, and pursuit a （a删掉）better marks. For example, I got 95 in my math test when I was a freshman in my university, I felt so satisfactory about it. However, when I was told that three of my classmates got higher marks, all my sense of elation soon gone away which（觉得这个which 用法不好，应指前面的got higher marks，建议分为2句，改为it） encouraged me to study harder.

Although, no one can imprudently claim score must be positive to every student, because low score can frustrate the confidence of a student, especially for that of introverted students, however, we can avoid such problems by our teachers' correct encouragement. For example, one of my friends usually cried after got(getting) low scores, and she did not feel like communicating with any other students for a long period of time. Fortunately, our head teacher found out her problem in time and stimulated her to do well in the next test, which gradually adjusted her psyche(觉得有点chinglish，改为recover).

In sum, grade mark is double-edged sword. Although score has some negative effects on small group of students, it helps most (觉得前文中没有证据说是most)students to find out their weakness and encourage them to performance better. What's more, the influence of the negative aspect can be reduced or even can be removed by a good conduction by teachers.

文章写的很好，一些小瑕疵值得注意。

这是我的作文。
COMEON作文小组——jimibt 2008 10月23日作业
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=887287
请使劲拍！！！

cleanwater25UID: 2295333

首先，那句话是低分能够激励学生更加努力。你想，现在的孩子都很不服输，所以有的时候低分更能激发他们的斗志。
再次，因为自从去年gre以后我就没怎么练过作文，所以导致写第一篇的时候用了2个多小时，主要是摸索文章的论证方式

这篇是我的第三篇，明显比之前的好多了，这篇写了45分钟，当然要想30分钟内写500很困难。不过大多数人都可以达到420-450.相信再练几篇应该会达到30分钟之内写450

cleanwater25UID: 2295333

我的水平也不高，但是会很认真
其实仔细帮助别人拍作文真的可以进步很多
呵呵，你的作文我会认真拍的

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

:) 我觉得你看到我24号的文章会很无语的

关于论证方法有什么心得体会没有？很有兴趣交流一下~