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agree of disagree:Getting advice from the older friends is more valuable than getting advice from friends at your age.

When encountering some trouble,or hesitating to make a decision about something ,we are inclined to ask friends to give us some advices.While a fairly propotion of people are willing to consult their older friends about things that confuse them,I cannot compeletely agree with the point that a advice from older friends is more valuable than that from peers at the same age.

To some extent,older friends with advance knowledge can provide us with more feasible advices.Comparing with ourselves,Older friends usually have more knowledge about a various of fields such as science ,arts,or something about social events.For instance,when I was working in the school laboratory to do the research in my own major-the solar cell.My older schoolmates instruct me in the procedure of making a solar cell to work,that was quite complex and complicated.With the help,My understanding of it deepened in a short period.And if I meet any trouble of the research proccess or the funcion of a equipment.I can easily turn to them-older friends for surpport.

Furthermore,suggestions from older friends may be parts their own experience and have been tested in the past.Since older people did experience more things than we did,it is not reasonable to ignore their opinions.Take one of my neighbors as an example.After entering  the university ,I was quite relaxed and lazy.In a time,I sliped class and played computer games frequently,and did a variety of things not concerning my academic career.It is the advice that the older friend gave waking me up,making me I realized that  the opportunity to study in a famous university shouldn't be wasted in playing games,dating,or even doing nothing at all.Therefore,I cherish the advice given by my older friends ,especially about life experience.

Although there may exist certain advantages ,if we obtain advices from older friends,I'd like to say ,in some aspects,age privilege dose not matter.For instance.Why I'm sitting here, after a whole day's hard work,to write this composation with passion and enthusiasm?Just because one of my roommates.He is a man with deep thought and his action finally influence my decision about future life-going abroad to pursuit further study.From that moment.I'm struggling to fulfill my prospect and eventually understand the meaning of the famous line "hope is a good thing" .

In a word,no matter who gives us his/her own reference or what idea they express.what really matters is the suggestion itself,not the age .We should evalue the advice through our own rational thought,but not a stereotype that who is right or not.So,I hold the contention that idea from older friends is not definetely more valuable than that getting from friends as same age as our own .

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When encountering some trouble,or hesitating to make a decision about something ,we are inclined（often incline用主动，而且不可以太绝对） to ask friends to give us some advices.While a fairly （large. fairly是副词） propotion of people are willing to consult their older friends about things that confuse them,I cannot compeletely agree with the point that a(an) advice from older friends is more valuable than that from peers at the same age.

To some extent,older friends with advance(d)其实这里用advance有点别扭，我也不确定应该换什么词 knowledge can provide us with more feasible advices.Comparing（compared） with ourselves,Older friends usually have more knowledge about a(去掉) various of fields such as science ,arts,or something about social events（social events??我也不确定这里用什么好。）.For instance,when I was working in the school laboratory to do the research in my own major-the solar cell.My older schoolmates instruct（ed） me in the procedure of making a solar cell to work(work),that was quite complex and complicated.With the help,My understanding of it(请指代明确) deepened in a short period.And if I meet any trouble of the research proccess or the funcion of a equipment.I can easily turn to them-older friends for surpport。
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Furthermore,suggestions from older friends may be parts their own experience and have been tested in the past.Since older people did experience more things than we did,it is not reasonable to ignore their opinions.Take one of my neighbors as an example.After entering  the university ,I was quite relaxed and lazy.In a time,I sliped class and（不用and连接，用逗号） played computer games frequently,and did a variety of things not concerning my academic career.It is the advice that the older friend gave waking me up,making me I realized that  the opportunity to study in a famous university shouldn't be wasted in playing games,dating,or even doing nothing at all.（it is.... that....强调句型，应该是it is the advice 从句（建议用of my older friend’s避免使用从句。）....that woke...and made....）Therefore,I cherish(ed) the advice given by my older friends ,especially about life experience.        ?YF%EKy3U
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]4sAlthough there may exist certain advantages ,if we obtain advices from older friends,I'd like to say ,in some aspects,age privilege dose not matter.For instance.Why I'm sitting here, after a whole day's hard work,to write this composation with passion and enthusiasm?Just because one of my roommates.(这句话写在考场上可真不太好)He is a man with deep thought and his action finally influence（s）my decision about future life-going abroad to pursuit further study.From that moment.I'm struggling to fulfill my prospect and eventually understand the meaning of the famous line "hope is a good thing" .(个人感觉这句应该用过去时)
In a word,no matter who gives us his/her own reference or what idea they express（or的前后两句是重复的。。。）.what really matters is the suggestion itself,not the age .We should evalue the advice through our own rational thought,but not a stereotype that who is right or not.So,I hold the contention that idea from older friends is not definetely more valuable than that getting from friends as same age as our own .

结构很清晰，句法总体来说没有太大错误。一些小的语法错误应尽量避免。个人认为举例稍微欠一点力度。可能举个人的事例就有这样的弊端。个人认为尽量举一些大众认可的事例。若是找不到这样的名人，也可以列举一些社会上广泛存在的现象，或者调查统计。要写个人的例子最好写的更具体一些，举更多的细节，以增强说服力。

以上纯属个人观点，仅供参考。

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agree of disagree:Getting advice from the older friends is more valuable than getting advice from friends at your age.T1c#o?l8W#\&le留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAf6o-}6L:{?GWhen encountering some trouble,or hesitating to make a decision about something ,we are inclined to ask friends to give us some advices.While a fairly propotion of people are willing to consult their older friends about things that confuse them,I cannot compeletely agree with the point that a advice from older friends is more valuable than that from peers at the same age.To some extent,older friends with advance knowledge can provide us with more feasible advices.Comparing with ourselves,Older friends usually have more knowledge about a various of fields such as science ,arts,or something about social events.For instance,when I was working in the school laboratory to do the research in my own major-the solar cell.My older schoolmates instruct me in the procedure of making a solar cell to work,that was quite complex and complicated.With the help,My understanding of it deepened in a short period.And if I meet any trouble of the research proccess or the funcion of a equipment.I can easily turn to them-older friends for surpport(support).(例子举得不错，用自己亲身的经历来说明。很好。)|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE{KQ [f#ubbs.gter.netk:AA4gnw3L^"B3nFurthermore,suggestions from older friends may be parts their own experience and have been tested in the past.Since older people did experience more things than we did,it is not reasonable to ignore their opinions.Take one of my neighbors as an example.After entering  the university ,I was quite relaxed and lazy.In a time,I sliped class and played computer games frequently,and did a variety of things not concerning my academic career.It is the advice that the older friend gave waking(waked) me up,making me I realized that  the opportunity to study in a famous university shouldn't be wasted in playing games,dating,or even doing nothing at all.Therefore,I cherish the advice given by my older friends ,especially about life experience. y*p*\a/jr7bAlthough there may exist certain advantages ,if we obtain advices from older friends,I'd like to say ,in some aspects,age privilege dose not matter.For instance.Why I'm sitting here, after a whole day's hard work,to write this composation with passion and enthusiasm?Just because one of my roommates.He is a man with deep thought and his action finally influence(influenced) my decision about future life-going abroad to pursuit(pursue) further study.From that moment.I'm struggling to fulfill my prospect and eventually understand the meaning of the famous line(saying) "hope is a good thing" .|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREHfLH$Mt`bbs.gter.net6B~+pF!z}*P&VIn a word,no matter who gives us his/her own reference or what idea they express.what really matters is the suggestion itself,not the age .We should evalue the advice through our own rational thought,but not a stereotype that who is right or not.So,I hold the contention that idea from older friends is not definetely more valuable than that getting from friends as same age as our own .总体来讲，观点明确，理由很充分。例子都很有支持理由段的作用。建议在句型和词汇方面多采用些变化。