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devilwingUID：2505617

In some classes, course grades are basedsolely on exams, while in other classes, grades are based more on classparticipation than on exams. Which type of grading do you prefer? Use specificreasons to support your response.


Nowadays there is a vehement discussion onhow to measure students' academic performance. Some people believe that coursegrades should be determined by exams only, while others argue that grades basedon class participation is more advisable. As for me, a students in auniversity, the second view seems more reasonable.

There is no denying that there are someadvantages to use exams to determine one's course grades. First, score of aexam, to some extent, reflects a student's ability and attitude toward studybecause generally speaking, students who work hard will get a relatively higherscore in the exams. Also, students can compare their own scores with those ofothers clearly and will be inspired to work even harder.

Though the scores of exams can somehow showhow much time students have spent on their study, class participation, in myopinion, is the better method to measure a student's academic performance.First of all, it indicates how much the students really learn in the classes.That is because to participate more actively in the activities in the classsuch as the discussion between students or giving a lecture, they have to get adeeper understanding on the courses and subjects they are learning. If not,they may not be able to express their ideas and opinions clealy and convinceothers. For example, course grades in our university are related to theperformance of the students in class, and we have to give a lecture to ourclassmates and answer their doubts and questions for several times. Therefore,we have to delve deep into the study materials and try to cover all thepossible questions that may be brought forward by the classmates. Taking a examon the other hand, are less demanding since a student who has crammed for itwithin a short time without understanding the knowledge can also get a highscore.

In addition, grading system based on classparticipation can also encourage students to take part in the class activitiesmore proactively, thus allowing students to receive an all-around development.Being involved in a class will give students more chances to speak out theirown viewpoints, argue with their classmates and cast doubt on some wrong ideas.Therefore, they may developed their social skills and analyzing ability whichcan never be resulted from taking an exam which is mainly carried out through aquiet and rigid style.

Based on the above comparisons we can findthat though exam scores can reflect how many efforts students have made toprepare the exam to some extent, class participation is more suitable tomeasure and further develop students' study abilities.




先谢过了
PS: 能否问下遇见一个作文题应该如何在最短时间内想出理由和例子来？

mpromanusUID：2565872

Nowadays there is are a vehement discussions on how to measure students' academic performance. Some people believe that course grades should be determined by exams only, while others argue that grades based on class participation is more advisable. As for me, a students in a university, the second view seems more reasonable.

There is no denying that there are some advantages to in using exams to determine one's course grades. First, score of an exam, to some extent, reflects a student's ability and attitude towards studies because generally speaking, students who work hard will get a relatively higher score in the exams. Also, students can compare their own scores with those of others clearly (Seems not the best word to use here. Do you mean 'openly'?) and will be inspired to work even harder.

Though (Since you're refuting the point above and making your actual stand, you need a stronger connective here, like 'even though') the scores of exams can somehow show how much time students have spent on their studies, class participation, in my opinion, is the better method to measure a student's academic performance. First of all, it indicates how much the students really learn in the classes.That is because to participate more actively (It'll be better if you avoid using the same root word repeatedly in the same clause. I suggest 'spontaneously') in the activities in the classes (This is a bit wordy. Just 'class activites' will do) such as the discussions between students or giving a lecture, they have to get a deeper understanding on the courses and subjects they are learning. If not, they may not be able to express their ideas and opinions clealy and to convince (The repeated use of 'and' here makes the layers in this sentence pretty confusing. Naturally, when readers reach the 2nd 'and', they would assume 'clearly and xxx' would be describing 'ideas and opinions', since 1. the phrases are next to each other 2. they're parallel in structure. Yet, the 'convince others' part after the second 'and' is coupling with 'express'. You need to frame the structure so that it's easy to tell which 'and' joins which parts.) others. For example, course grades in our university are related to the performance of the students in class, and we have to give a lecture to our classmates and answer their doubts and questions for several times (This is another place where it's hard to tell which part of your sentence this 'for several times' is describing. I think you meant for it to describe the whole part of 'give a lecture..and answer...'. In that case, you'll need a comma before the 'for'). Therefore, we have to delve deep into the study materials and try to cover all the possible questions that may be brought forward by the classmates. Taking a exam, on the other hand, are is less demanding since any student who has crammed for it within a short time, without understanding the knowledge, can also get a high score.

In addition, grading system based on class participation can also encourage students to take part in the class activities more proactively (This word means to 'act with anticipation', normally with anticipation of problems or changes. It's a business report favourite but I'd still suggest you use it with caution.), thus allowing students to receive an all-arounded development. Being involved in a class will give students more chances to speak out their own viewpoints, argue with their classmates and cast doubts on some wrong ideas.Therefore, they may developed their social skills and analysis ability, which can never (This is quite exaggerated. What if the exam IS case-analysis focused? You may want to stay safe with 'seldom') be resulted from taking an exam, which is mainly carried out through a quietly and rigidly style.(I don't quite get the relationship between 'quiet', 'rigid' and your point. If you are trying to say that exams hardly allow students to develop social skills, etc. because their formats discourage communication and flexibility, you'd need to add something like 'the quiet, rigid style of exams don't allow students to interact and develop social skills, etc.'.)

Based on the above comparisons we can find that though exam scores can reflect how many much efforts students have made to in preparation the exam to some extent, class participation is more suitable to for measuring and further developing students' study abilities.

总结：

This is quite a good essay. Just pay attention to your long running sentences and remember to pause them properly when appropriate. I've raised a few comments about possible ambiguities - proper pacing can help to clarify those.

Avoid using 'and's repeatedly near to each other. It could be a misleading connective when used that way.

另外回答你的问题：不是很确定你说的‘最短时间’是多短。俺一般半个小时的作文花5分钟列提纲。大体上可以参考经典的双正一反写法，两个正面论点+一个反面论点和反驳，例子方面双正各带一个例子，一反因为有反驳，可以不用具体例子，用也是以简单一句话可以说清楚的最好。至于论点和例子怎么来，这个只能说是靠平时积累了，可以练练brainstorming..

[ 本帖最后由 mpromanus 于 2008-11-22 03:44 编辑 ]

devilwingUID：2505617

谢谢mpromanus抽出时间修改这篇文章 学到了很多东西 呵呵:handshake