11.30作文求批

coalaxixiUID：2353397

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One should never judge a person by external appearances. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

People often say, “You should never judge a person by external appearances”. Is it an absolute truth? From my point of view, a person’s character and morels should never be judged from the appearance. Whereas you can tell more or less about some other information, like the living habits, taste and even background from a person’s appearance.

To begin with, you should never judge a person’s character and morels from his appearance. People’s looks are firmly determined when they are born. There is no way to be changed as people wish. You may easily get a wrong answer if you simply judge an ugly person to be with an evil mind and a good-looking person to be with a beautiful mind. The real situation may prove to be quite the opposite. A famous master piece “Notre Dame de Paris” teaches us an incisive lesson about this. The ugly and deaf Quasimodo is actually the most kindhearted and brave one. In contrast, the apparently handsome and decent Claude turns out to be insidious and vicious in nature. People’s appearances just do not have the direct connection with their natures.

However, a person’s external appearance can still convey certain clue of what he is like. For example, it tells about a person’s living habits. Dirty clothes and stink smell of a person may disclose that he is not a tidy one; and vice versa. Also, the appearance can tell about the tastes. People who are fond of Punk fashion are intended to appear as confrontational, shocking and rebellious as possible. Punks are characterized by wearing deliberately offensive T-shirts which are often torn by purpose, big clunky boots, tightly tapered pants and vests painted with logos that express musical tastes or political views. Their hairs are typically dyed in bright colors such as red, green or orange and arranged into Mohawk. You can easily judge a person who is Punk from these clear characteristics. Moreover, you can even judge a person’s background from his looks. The famous detective Sherlock Holmes often judges people’s occupation and history from some details on their looks. Once he judges a lady to be musician because she has delicate fingers and behaves elegantly. Holmes seldom gets wrong answers. Amazingly, all his inferences are merely based on the details on people’s appearances.

To conclude, there’s something that the appearance can tell and something it can not. A person’s external appearance can tell you about his living habits, taste and even background, but never his character and morals.





[ 本帖最后由 coalaxixi 于 2008-11-30 22:54 编辑 ]

mpromanusUID：2565872

People often say, “You should never judge a person by external appearances”. Is it an absolute truth? From my point of view, a person’s character and morals should never be judged from the appearances. Whereas you can tell more or less about some other information ('tell about information'是比较诡异的搭配. You tell 'things' about a person but not 'tell about' information.), like the living habits, taste and even background from a person’s appearances. (问题是问你agree还是disagree，你需要在这一段很明确地说出你是agree还是disagree. 就算你非要骑墙，也要用题目的话骑..I agree with the statement in question when...however I don't agree with the statement when it comes to...)

To begin with, you should never judge a person’s character and morals from his appearances. People’s looks are firmly (determine已有firm的意思，不需要重复) determined when they are born. There is no way to be changed them as people wish (? 不是有整容术和化装术吗?). You may easily get a wrong answer if you simply judge an ugly person to be with an evil mind and a good-looking person to be with a beautiful mind good. The real situation may prove to be quite the opposite. A famous masterpiece “Notre Dame de Paris” (This is the French name of the novel. In the English-speaking world, it's more commonly known as 'The Hunchback of Notre Dame'.) teaches us an incisive lesson about this. The ugly and deaf Quasimodo is actually the most kindhearted and brave one. In contrast, the apparently handsome and decent Claude turns out to be insidious and vicious in nature. People’s appearances just do not have the direct connections with their natures. (点题点题就差一句。。therefore we shouldn't judge people by their appearances就结了. 就差这一句，文章就会总有点没说到点子上的感觉.)

However, a person’s external appearances can still convey certain clues of to what he is like. For example, it they tells about a person’s living habits. Dirty clothes and stink (stink就是一种气味，不需要重复smell) smell of on a person may disclose that he is not a tidy one; and vice versa. Also, the appearances can tell about the tastes. People who are fond of Punk fashion are intended to appear as confrontational, shocking and rebellious as possible. Punks are characterized by wearing deliberately offensive T-shirts which are often torn by purpose, big clunky boots, tightly tapered pants and vests painted with logos that express musical tastes or political views. Their hairs are typically dyed in bright colors such as red, green or orange and arranged into Mohawks. You can easily judge that a person who is Punk from these clear characteristics. Moreover, you can even judge a person’s background from his looks. The famous detective Sherlock Holmes often judges people’s occupation and history from some details of their looks. Once he judges a lady to be a musician because she has delicate fingers and behaves elegantly. Holmes seldom gets wrong answers. Amazingly, all his inferences are merely based on the details of people’s appearances. (又是没点题。并且已经有些偏题了。judge a person通常是指做出带着感情色彩 - 通常还是负面色彩 - 的结论，你所举的例子基本上只能叫做conclude about a person，而不是judge. 例如，看见一个人穿punk fashion，认为他是punk，这是conclusion；而看见一个人穿punk fashion，认为他一定是叛逆青少年，这是judgement..)

To conclude, there’s something that the appearances can tell and something it cannot. A person’s external appearances can tell you about his living habits, taste and even background, but never his character and morals.

总结:

基本上没有很大的问题，请注意冠词的使用。另外就是文中已经评论的，judge这个字倾向于带有感情色彩，所以请小心处理例子，避免写出来之后读者看了以为你的题目是what can we tell about a person from external appearances..

coalaxixiUID：2353397

Ok, I see. Thanks a lot! :)

janseaUID：2445451

Toefl中的观点必须是站在某一边，不能是“不全同意”这样的意思吗？

mpromanusUID：2565872

4楼：这是看题目要求而定的。一般的题目有很多是这样的：Do you agree or disagree...这种你必须明确指出你是agree还是disagree，不建议骑墙是因为在30分钟写3-400字的局限内两方面都讨论的话通常要么写不完要么两边都泛泛而谈，所以还不如选一边好好认真讨论~如果题目没有明确要求站边，就没什么局限了~如果题目是compare and contrast，这就和agree or disagree相反，是明确要求两边都谈。不过还是那句话，建议能不骑墙就不骑墙的原因是时间和字数的限制，而不是因为托福作文需要怎么样怎么样。托福作文这个概念本身没有任何局限，局限是具体到每个题目的，和是不是托福作文题完全没有关系~

janseaUID：2445451

楼上解释的很清楚，我明白了，非常感谢！