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amyyUID: 2332487

【12月-1月IBT综合备考大帖】之【TWE作文】amyy 12.12号作业 :loveliness:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays.
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Nowadays, many people would have been tired of spending so many time on cooking and preparing food, but they have no choose, because some delicious dinners can only be done by themselves,and they must do all the process, from buying the cooking material to washing the dishes.Fortunately, I bet this serious situation can be changed in twenty years, thanks to the increasingly improved technology and restaurent service, the change of people's values,and what is more, the more fiercely pressure people will meet in the future.

Primarily, i should point out that people really benifit a lot from all kinds of scientific technologh. In the term of cooking, the new machines, such as microwave oven and electrical rice cooker, have saved a lot time of people. So it will not difficult to imagine how magical machine or technology will be invented to impove our living standard,to let people get rid of the boring time spent on cooking. May be there will be a completely auto-cooker, which can make a perfect dinner only after you putting the raw material in it and pressing the   certain buttom you wish it makes out. Who will doubt this possibility? No one, because all those things have been surely described in   fancy films. So it is not so far.

What is more, the valuas of people will change in the future, which can be inferred from the trend in current society, and which will      lead the less time people spending in cooking. There is alway a womon in family to prepare food, because the wife in a family alway  not have a job outsite, the only responsbility of her is to prepare the food. So she has a lot of time to prepare a complex and delicate     dinner before her husband come back from work. Howevee, many things will be changed in twenty year. By then, the discrimination     against womem will decrease, or in a much better way, women and men are equal. So, when the wife and the husband owns the same level degree of education, who will prefer to stay at home , but to abandon the job opportunity to become successful in his or her field?

Additionally, people will confront more pressure in the future, which also contributes much to the less time of cooking. People have     been through so tired work all day outside, they may prefer to have dinner outside, in the restaurent, or have some bread. Anyway,     the cooking may not the first choice.

In conclusion, the leap of the level of technology, the alter of the values of the people and the more intense pressure of people in the future, the major three factor will lead people spend less time in cooking or preparing food.

[ 本帖最后由 amyy 于 2008-12-13 08:55 编辑 ]

d596086UID: 2522476

写的不错，文章结构，条理都很好！开头结尾都不错
论点写的很有道理，真惊叹中国人思路一致性， 我的思路和你差不了多少

不过第3段开始说得还行，可是后面有点偏，觉得有点没说服力了
By then, the discrimination     against womem will decrease, or in a much better way, women and men are equal。。。这句不要写吧，你意思是说现在有性别歧视？不要涉及这方面东西

james011137UID: 2280989

不错！比我写的强多了。。
但是有几点要注意：1  有拼写错误  你自己没有检查吧?

2 有些词用法可以再斟酌  In the term of 是不是改为 In the field of好些？

反问句用得不错 学习了。。

amyyUID: 2332487

谢谢啊！没时间了，所以没检查，这篇用了35分钟才写好的:)
谢谢指教

amyyUID: 2332487

谢谢鼓励 和 指教:) :)

amyyUID: 2332487

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays.
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Nowadays, many people would have been tired of spending so many time on cooking and preparing food, but they have no choose, because some delicious dinners can only be done by themselves,and they must do all the process, from buying the cooking material to washing the dishes.Fortunately, I bet this serious situation can be changed in twenty years, thanks to the increasingly improved technology and restaurant service, the change of people's values,and what is more, the more fiercely pressure people will meet in the future.

Primarily, i should point out that people really benefit a lot from all kinds of scientific technologh. In the field of cooking, the new machines, such as microwave oven and electrical rice cooker, have saved a lot time of people. So it will not difficult to imagine how magical machine or technology will be invented to improve our living standard,to let people get rid of the boring time spent on cooking. May be there will be a completely auto-cooker, which can make a perfect dinner only after you putting the raw material in it and pressing the   certain bottom you wish it makes out. Who will doubt this possibility? No one will suspect, because all those things have been surely described in   fancy films. So it is not so far.

What is more, the values of people will change in the future, which can be inferred from the trend in current society, and which will      lead the less time people spending in cooking. There is always a woman in family to prepare food, because the wife in a family alway  not have a job outside, the only responsibility of her is to prepare the food. So she has a lot of time to prepare a complex and delicate  dinner before her husband come back from work. However, many things will be changed in twenty year. By then, the discrimination     against women will decrease, or in a much better way, women and men are equal. So, when the wife and the husband owns the same level degree of education, who will prefer to stay at home , but to abandon the job opportunity to become successful in his or her field?

Additionally, people will confront more pressure in the future, which also contributes much to the less time of cooking. People have     been through so tired work all day outside, they may prefer to have dinner outside, in the restaurent, or have some bread. Anyway,     the cooking may not the first choice.

In conclusion, the leap of the level of technology, the alter of the values of the people and the more intense pressure of people in the future, the major three factor will lead people spend less time in cooking or preparing food.

nickey0809UID: 2349468

思路很清晰哦
知道你时间紧 呵呵
可是我的你还没改哦
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