【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】之【TWE写作】-12.16日作业

闹闹喵UID: 2500331

People can never make agreement on whether television programs should focus primarily on entertainment or education. Those who are inclined to the latter one might list numerous reasons to their allegation, and yet I'm determined to support the former one.

First, let us get down to fundamentals and confess that television, as well as movie, is part of the entertainment industry. The programs are produced by the company to make people relaxed and happy. If they overwhelm audiences with tremendous information in a academic and serious way, chances are that they'll lose their markets. Because frankly speaking, most people tend to watch television after a whole day of work. If alone they long for tranquility and relief, if with friends they seek for happiness and enjoyment. There is not much chance for education, for patience and brain energy have been depleted during daily work and study. That's why even Discoveries Channel has to appear in a more entertained way, otherwise those academic theory can drive you crazy.  

Secondly, it always confused me when people blame TV entertainment induces the popularity of fast food culture, and has given the audience a degraded taste and empty mind, and that these phenomenons can simply be solved with no more entertainment but merely education in the programs. Funny though, they have no idea of what on earth entertainment is. Entertainment, is something that can make people happy and relaxed. Some find opera interesting, some are addicted to sport events, while some waste their times in talk shows and reality shows. What people often do is to exaggerate the harm of inferior entertainment and ignore the advantages of the superior. As far as I am concerned, the manufacturee should stop producing junks like soap opera, tv series showing nothing but vanity and luxurious taste of middle class, talk shows full of blah, which are all inferior and useless entertainment that make people idiots. They should stop fooling audiences around and provide something brisker, smarter, and more profound. At this point, I think BBC and HBO have done a great job. Carnivale provide a fantastic trip of a circus, and talking about authentic none should defeat the series Pride and Prejudice made of BBC 1995. They all give excellent paraphrases of how entertainment should be. It is the superior we need, not the inferior ones.

I do agree education should be involved into the programs, but it should never take the crown. After all, tv is invented to provide people pleasure. It should never contain too much academic items and serious atmosphere. Leave the education to books and let us enjoy the tv show!

nickey0809UID: 2349468

phenomenon的复数是phenomena
其他都很好，用词和造句值得学习

d596086UID: 2522476

文章开头写的很好，没啥好挑的，不过也很模版的话。但老美的思维也就这么死板没办法
第二段写的很好，主题句后面扩展的很好，中间if的对偶也很漂亮
第三段的话，这个段不应该放在toefl实际考试中，本段有点argument的感觉，偏G了，思路较为复杂。T作文简单直接点更好，在3个小时后的半小时作文这么写会容易混乱的。
另外，这段文章语言个别有点口语话。你的作文写得都很活泼，我很喜欢。不过个别刺眼的词尽量避免，比如idiots
还有就是，这段你说的是什么才是真正的并且好的娱乐节目。但是这个偏离了主题在教育和娱乐之间讨论

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