Argument10 [g群]第一次作业 2008.12.26 by poboso

pobosoUID: 2318913

10.The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia
newspaper.

"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy
farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10
years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the
local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per
gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on
an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should
begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to
ensure both lower prices and an adequate supply of milk for consumers."


The writer recommends that the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Because the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago while the price of milk at local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.5 to over $3.00 per gallon. So the government should ensure both lower prices and an adequate supply of milk for consumers. At the first glance, the recommendation seems reasonable and apparent. However, it can stand closer reasoning.
The growing number of dairy farms throughout the country doesn’t mean the supply of milk is overload. The need for milk has to be considered too. We should consider the balance between the supply and need, instead of the pure increasing production of milk. The writer makes a false conclusion simply based on the number of farms. The number of farms may be the production of flourish economic and increasing population. So the argument will be more persuasive if the arguer rule out other possibilities.
The increasing price of milk at local Excello Food Market is due to many factors despite that the retailers sell them at a relatively high price. The inflation of the whole country is an important factor to consider about. The developing producing industry is another essential factor to think about. It is also a ridiculous thought to compare the price nowadays with that ten years ago. As we know , things rarely remains unchanged over a long period of time. The arguer has to rule out other related factors in order to make it more reasonable.
The writer concludes that the price of milk of Batavia is more expensive only concerning that of ExcelloFood Market. The quantity of sample is not enough, and the author fails to persuade us the market is representative. So it is unscientific to deduce that the retail price is increasing widely.
We can’t simply deduce the conclusion only the single sample. There are many other retailers who may sell milk at low prices. If the government takes measures to regulate the price of milk, the harm for many other retailers may soon be problematic.
The writer lacks of the basic economical knowledge. To regulate the price of retail milk doesn’t do good to ensure an adequate of milk supply.  As a general rule the price of merchandise goes beyond the supply of production.
In conclusion, the argument is full of fallacy, it lacks of sufficient evidence and oversimplify many complex factors. The author makes false conclusions simply from a unrepresentative sample too. In order to persuade us, the author has to perfect the argument as mentioned above.

jenny11235UID: 2585428

The writer recommends that the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Because the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago while the price of milk at local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.5 to over $3.00 per gallon. So the government should ensure both lower prices and an adequate supply of milk for consumers. At the first glance, the recommendation seems reasonable and apparent. However, it can stand closer reasoning.（这句话有问题吧？ cannot？不过句子很好！第一段感觉重复原题的成分有点多，建议简洁点，把字数留在下面几段，这样论据会更充分）
The growing number of dairy farms throughout the country（与第一段表述基本相同，能否换个表达方法，否则让人觉得有点单调） doesn’t mean the supply of milk is overload. The need for milk has to be considered too. We should consider the balance between the supply and need, instead of the pure increasing production of milk. The writer makes a false conclusion simply based on the number of farms. The number of farms may be the production of flourish economic and increasing population. So the argument will be more persuasive if the arguer rule out other possibilities.


The increasing price of milk at local Excello Food Market is due to many factors despite that the retailers sell them （them 这里用的不对，主语是price，指milk也应该单数）at a relatively high price. The inflation of the whole country is an important factor to consider about. The developing producing industry is another essential factor to think about. （很流畅！且角度好！）It is also a ridiculous thought to compare the price nowadays with that ten years ago. As we know, things rarely remains（主谓不一致） unchanged over a long period of time. The arguer has to rule out other related factors in order to make it more reasonable.


The writer concludes that the price of milk of Batavia is more expensive only concerning that of ExcelloFood Market. The quantity of sample is not enough, and the author fails to persuade us the market is representative. So it is unscientific to deduce that the retail price is increasing widely. We can’t simply deduce the conclusion only the single sample. There are many other retailers who may sell milk at low prices. If the government takes measures to regulate the price of milk, the harm for many other retailers may soon be problematic. The writer lacks of the basic economical knowledge. To regulate the price of retail milk doesn’t do good to ensure an adequate of milk supply.  As a general rule the price of merchandise goes beyond the supply of production.（感觉不是很有说服力~有点牵强）


In conclusion, the argument is full of fallacy（单数还是复数？）; it lacks of sufficient evidences and oversimplify（oversimplifies）many complex factors. The author makes false conclusions simply from a (an) unrepresentative sample too. In order to persuade us, the author has to perfect the argument as mentioned above.
作者对文章中的逻辑错误把握到位，举得范例也很说明问题，个人感觉还是倒数第二段说的不是很清楚，前两段很多值得我学习！

[ 本帖最后由 jenny11235 于 2008-12-28 10:30 编辑 ]

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