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d596086UID: 2522476

Governments should focus more on natural environment problems and less on economic developments
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Nowadays, with the global economic developing in such a rapid spice, many new problems emerge gradually, among which the most vital problems relate to environment. The debate that whether government should focus more on natural environment problems or on economic developments became dramatic, especially in recent years. Considering the terrible fact that human's behavior bring so large damage to our earth and cause more and more piece being extinct, I strongly support the view that the environment issues should be put in the first place on government's schedule.


The first environment problem I want to mention is the air pollution. One study coming from the Science shows that every year, the total number vehicles of the whole world will increase by 15% on average, which means the pollution air generated by these transportations will soar year by year. Besides, the smog coming from industries also pollutes the air a lot. If the government do not take actions control fountain, the air situation will became even worse, which in turn will bring big disaster to both the craters and structures on the land. Human and animals can not live without the fresh air; and most of the building and farmland will be eroded and destroyed by the acid rain, and so on. All of them are due to the air pollution.


In addition, the water also can not avoid to be contaminated. If you go to the inshore cities in my country, China, you will be amazed to find that the color of all the seawater around the land is black, not blue. Obviously, rarely fish is able to live in this terminated water, not to mention the corals. Not just the sea, the under ground water as well as the river, lake and so on are all facing the rigorous pollution problems. We fist pollute the water, and then we have to drink them. I always confuse that why human are so silly. Why not to protect our precious water recourse? Is really important to improve the social economy? I want to ask a question to our government, if there is no drinkable water in our living area, is there any sense of we own a very highly developed society?


Numerous examples can be listed. Apart from the air and the water pollution, our forest, atmosphere, and many other environments are all confronted with the pollution problems. If our government do not play significant attention on it, in the nearly future, there will be no place that are available for human and animal to live. If that day is coming, our highly human civilization will become meaningless.

[ 本帖最后由 d596086 于 2008-12-31 17:36 编辑 ]

nickey0809UID: 2349468

Nowadays, with the global economic developing in such a rapid spice(??pace), many new problems emerge gradually, among which the most vital problems relate to environment. The debate that whether government should focus more on natural environment problems or on economic developments became dramatic, especially in recent years. Considering the terrible fact that human's behavior bring so large damage to our earth and cause more and more piece(species) being extinct, I strongly support the view that the environment issues should be put in the first place on government's schedule.

The first environment problem I want to mention is the air pollution. One study coming from the Science shows that every year, the total number vehicles of the whole world will increase by 15% on average peryear, which means the pollution air generated by these transportations will soar year by year. Besides, the smog coming from industries also pollutes the air a lot. If the government do not take actions control fountain？？, the air situation will become even worse, which in turn will bring big disaster to both the craters？？ and structures on the land (of what?? delete "the"). Human and animals can not live without the fresh air; and most of the building and farmland will be eroded and destroyed by the acid rain, and so on. All of them are due to the air pollution.

In addition, the water also can not avoid to be contaminated. If you go to the inshore cities in my country, China, you will be amazed to find that the color of all the seawater around the land is black,（其实这不完全是污染的原因，也不是全黑，褐色而已） not blue. Obviously, rarely fish is able to live in this terminated water, not to mention the corals. Not just the sea, the under ground water as well as the river, lake and so on are all facing the rigorous pollution problems. We fist（first） pollute the water, and then we have to drink them. I always confuse that why human are so silly. Why not to protect our precious water recourse? Is really important to improve the social economy? I want to ask a question to our government, if there is no drinkable water in our living area, is there any sense of we own a very highly developed society?

Numerous examples can be listed. Apart from the air and the water pollution, our forest, atmosphere, and many other environments are all confronted with the pollution problems. If our government do not play significant attention on it, in the nearly future, there will be no place that are available for human and animal to live. If that day is coming, our highly human civilization will become meaningless.


结构和句子还可以，就是作者回避了一个问题为什么政府放在环境的问题要多于经济，只是讲环境污染怎么怎么严重，这是政府已经知道的呀

如果能把谁主谁次的问题讲明白就完美了

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xlwxxyUID: 2568970

iNowadays, with the global economic developing in such a rapid spicespeed, many new problems emerge gradually(huge amount of problems emerged), among which the most vital problems related to environment. The debate that whether government should focus more on natural environment problems or on economic developments became dramatic, especially in recent years. Considering the terrible fact that human's behavior bring so large damage to our earth and cause more and more piece being extinct, I strongly support the view that the environment issues should be put in the first place on government's schedule.

The first environment problem I want to mention is the air pollution. One study coming from the Science shows that every year, the total number vehicles of the whole world will increase by 15% on average, which means the pollution air generated by these transportations will soar year by year. Besides, the smog coming from industries also pollutes the air a lot. If the government do not take actions in controlling fountain(further?), the air situation will became even worse, which in turn will bring bighuge disaster to both the craters(好学术的词汇,不过用在这里...好像有点莫名其妙!) and structures on the land. Human and animals can not live without the fresh air; and most of the building and farmland will be eroded and destroyed by the acid rain, and so on. All of them are due to the air pollution.

(整段都是对环境污染的描述,有点到和经济发展的关系,像车辆,但不明确)

In addition, the water also can not avoid to be contaminated. If you go to the inshore(高级词) cities in my country, China, you will be

amazed to find that the color of all the seawater around the land is black, not blue. Obviously, rarely fish is able to live in this terminated water, not to mention the corals. Not just the sea, the under ground water as well as the river, lake and so on are all facing the

rigorousserious(你可能和我所处的阶段一样,都想用高级词,但是有时词不达意,这里的 rigorous的意思是严厉的. 在没有把握的情况下,还是用一些自己比较熟悉的词吧.) pollution problems. We fist pollute the water, and then we have to drink them. I always confuse that why human(不要这样写,好像把你自己排除在外似的.) are so sillyidiot(程度深点). Why not to protect our precious water recourses? Is really important to improve the social economy? I want to ask a question to our government, if there is no drinkable water in our living area, is there any sensemeaning(in a sense 才是有意义的意思) of we own a very highly developed society?

Numerous examples can be listed. Apart from the air and the water pollution, our forest, atmosphere, and many other environments are all confronted with the pollution problems. If our government do not play significant attention on it, in the nearly future, there will be no place that are available for human beings and animal to live. If that day iswas come ing(你是想用虚拟语气吧), our highly human civilization will become meaningless.

不好意思改晚了.
好像两段都在讲环境污染的现状多,没有和经济发展密切联系起来的.

[ 本帖最后由 xlwxxy 于 2009-1-2 20:52 编辑 ]