Issue11【六人作文小组】第1周第1次作业

空即是色UID: 2496914

Issue 11: All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems.
提纲:1、解决社会问题需要共同合作
        2、但是现实的矛盾导致方法不可取
When face to some difficulties that need us to cooperate, it does make sense that there should be no doubt on establishing a global university could solve the worst social problems and foster a sense of unity among the whole world to some degree.

One thing we should consider is co-prosperity. People always concentrate together due to the same objective, the same ideal, and especially the same benefit or problem. As an old adage said, “Unity is strength”, none of a country could be up against environment pollution, economic crisis and natural disaster alone. So it is meaningful and crucial for all the nations live in the world to enhance the ability of solving such problems, with a global university which provide a more professional education and more advanced forum. And anyone of people work and study in global university will hold the brief of living for contributing to humans. Furthermore, to some extend, the teachers and students who come from the different part of the world with the different culture bring up their own details. Obviously, it means a larger origin of information in doing research and abstract ideas from factors. Not only it improves the condition and leads to a more accurate consequence, but also leave us plentiful sources of information about the world.

But another thing we also should recognition is that the adversity of human nature--self concern, the embarrassment of co-action. What results in the world’s persistent social problems? And why there still exist wars, racism, sexual discrimination and restraint of trade continually? As a developed country, it absolutely first calculates whether the cooperation would threaten its own benefit, whether the cooperation would improve the force of economy and politics in the international society. Basically, humans are not as rational as to thinking others as themselves. A global university is a really good method but not good enough. Nevertheless to say, a global university could never stop to scramble resources that cause the war and never destroy the disparity between rich and poor. It cannot reach to the deep inside while just spend time and money on the surface. It is true that the most persistent social problems are coincided with the less developed technology and economic situation. What we should do now is try our best to enhance and intensify our own strength. And if every country, as a part of the world, could run well, the whole world would be well definitely.

We humans are always on a road of seeking for better, because of many precursors’ efforts; we obtain what we hold now. And we will continue in chasing for a better world condition that without war, and only tends to understanding and tolerance.

[ 本帖最后由 空即是色 于 2009-1-5 12:42 编辑 ]

sneakerliuUID: 2481691

When face to some difficulties that need us to cooperate, it does make sense that there should be no doubt on establishing a global university could solve the worst social problems and foster a sense of unity among the whole world to some degree.

One thing (how about write the threshold issue) we should consider is co-prosperity. People always concentrate together due to the same objective, the same ideal, and especially the same benefit or problem. As an old adage said, “Unity is strength”(算你狠), none of a country could be up against environment pollution, economic crisis and natural disaster alone. So it is meaningful and crucial for all the nations live in the world to enhance the ability of solving such problems, with a global university which provide a more professional education and more advanced site. And anyone of people work and study in global university will hold the brief of living for contributing to humans. Furthermore, to some extend, the teachers and students who come from the different part of the world with the different culture bring up their own details. Obviously, it means a larger origin of information in doing research and abstract ideas from factors. Not only it improves the condition and leads to a more accurate consequence, but also leaves us plentiful sources of information about the world.

But another thing（a more serious problem） we also should recognition is that the adversity of human nature--self concern, the embarrassment of co-action. What results in the world’s persistent social problems? And why there still exist wars, racism, sexual discrimination and restraint of trade continually? As a developed country, it absolutely first calculates whether the cooperation would threaten its own benefit, whether the cooperation would improve the force of economy and politics in the international society. Basically, humans are not as rational as to thinking others as themselves（值得思考，可以再展开一点，比如举例）. A global university is a really good method but not good enough（is a fantastic method but should be better if we want to save the world ）. Nevertheless to say, a global university could never stop to scramble resources that cause the war and never destroy the disparity between rich and poor. It cannot reach to the deep inside while just spend time and money on the surface. It is true that the most persistent social problems are coincided with the less developed technology and economic situation. What we should do now is try our best to enhance and intensify our own strength. And if every country, as a part of the world, could run well, the whole world would be well definitely.

We humans are always on a road of seeking for better, because of many precursors’ efforts; we obtain what we hold now. And we will continue in chasing for a better world condition that without war, and only tends to understanding and tolerance.(the ending is cool)
空姐姐的第一篇，小M顶了

levinshireUID: 2559564

When face to some difficulties that need us to cooperate, it does make sense that there should be no doubt on establishing a global university could solve the worst social problems and foster a sense of unity among the whole world to some degree.

One thing we should consider is co-prosperity. People always concentrate together due to the same objective, the same ideal, and especially the same benefit or problem. As an old adage said, “Unity is strength”, none of a country could be up against environment pollution, economic crisis and natural disaster alone. So it is meaningful and crucial for all the nations live in the world to enhance the ability of solving such problems, with a global university which provide a more professional education and more advanced site. And anyone of people(anyone就可以了吧) work and study in global university will hold the brief of living for contributing to humans(这句话有点儿生硬，虽然是这么个理，但总觉得有点儿武断). Furthermore, to some extend, the teachers and students who come from the different part of the world with the different culture bring up their own details. Obviously, it means a larger origin of information in doing research and abstract ideas from factors. Not only it(it放在not only前面吧) improves the condition and leads to a more accurate consequence, but also leave us plentiful sources of information about the world.

But another thing we also should(感觉应该是should also，待确认) recognition(recognize) is that the adversity of human nature--self concern, the embarrassment of co-action. What results in the world’s persistent social problems? And why there still exist wars, racism, sexual discrimination and restraint of trade continually? As a developed country, it absolutely first calculates whether the cooperation would threaten its own benefit, whether the cooperation would improve the force of economy and politics in the international society. Basically, humans are not as rational as to thinking others as themselves(厄……rational的定义好像就类似于只琢磨自己利益;最好换个字眼吧~~). A global university is a really good method but not good enough. Nevertheless to say, a global university could never stop to scramble resources that cause the war and never destroy the disparity between rich and poor. It cannot reach to the deep inside while just spend time and money on the surface. It is true that the most persistent social problems are coincided with the less developed technology and economic situation. What we should do now is try our best to enhance and intensify our own strength. And if every country, as a part of the world, could run well, the whole world would be well definitely.

We humans are always on a road of seeking for better, because of many precursors’ efforts; we obtain what we hold now. And we will continue in chasing for a better world condition that without war, and only tends to understanding and tolerance.(结尾再稍微点点题会更吸引评委眼球吧~:) )

写得很好啊，只能挑点儿小毛病。实在不好意思，我水平太差，还不能做点儿有水平的修改。
不过我看很多人的建议，开头和结尾段写得充实一点儿会好些，毕竟评委们的注意力会更集中在开头和结尾。
加油加油！再接再厉！