【09年1月-4月】TOEFL作文互改小组-之【TWE作文】2.1号作业 by genius_east

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第一次写这类文章，很吃力阿，考个托福不容易啊

        In this set of materials, the lecturer discusses the side effect of working a four-day week. He makes several points which opposites the reading passage that gives some positive views of it.

        First, it will spend more money if employees are taken options to work a four-day week. The lecturer argues that much more money will be spent in training, medical benefits, offer states and computers, while the reading passage doesn't mention that.

        Second, the lecturer says many more jobs will become available. In other words, a four-day-work employee may have taken a five-day job every week.However, the reading passage notes that working a four-day week will give them more time to relax.

         Finally, it will reduce life quality if choosing a four-day job, which contradicts the reading passage stating that it will improve life quality. The lecturer gives us an example. If an economy crisis has come, it is more likely for a four-day worker to lose his job first.

         In short, the points asserted by the professor are different from what the reading says.

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In this set of materials, the lecturer discusses the side effect of working a four-day week. He makes several points which opposites the reading passage that gives some positive views of it.(我觉得第一段也要提及passage是与之相悖的，因为综合写作除了要归纳lecture的内容，还有理清lecture和passage的关系)

First, it will spend more money if employees are taken options to work a four-day week. The lecturer argues that much more money will be spent in training, medical benefits, offer states and computers, while the reading passage doesn't mention that.

        Second, the lecturer says many more jobs will become available. In other words, a four-day-work employee may have taken a five-day job every week.However, the reading passage notes that working a four-day week will give them more time to relax.

         Finally, it will reduce life quality if choosing a four-day job, which contradicts the reading passage stating that it will improve life quality. The lecturer gives us an example. If an economy crisis has come, it is more likely for a four-day worker to lose his job first.

         In short, the points asserted by the professor are different from what the reading says.

1.lz，三个方面应该是company,employees,country吧，这三个分段有问题
2.主要论述lecture的观点，但passage在那些方面与之相悖也要说明，不能光说 the reading passage doesn't mention that.

哈哈~加油加油，fighting