【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 chelseajcole 第五次作业】

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Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

July 21,1969,when Armstrong placed his left foot on the surface of moon,just like what he said:"That's one small step for
man,one giant step for mankind",I believe,is the time of technology.Thus,obviously,the technology widen the horizontal knowledge of human may make our lives  more convenient than any time before.


Avigation industry is only the elite,or little part of all technology.The fact is that people work for technology,utilize technology and enjoy it in the recent 200 years.The inventation of telephone by American inventor Alexander Bell let us communicate with everyone around world no matter faraway distance between them ;the first successful airplane created by Wright brothers turn the world into a village which promote the tourism and trading among continents;the gasoline-powered automobile designed by German engine designer Karl Benz replace the function of our legs and accelerate movement of person from one area to another.All these new products with new technology make our world better than foretime.


In retrospect,the history without the modern technology,people not only suffered the shortage of food but the threaten from disease.People in many parts of the world were die of starvation.With the help of technology we have been able to save millions of lives by developing vaccinations,cures,and treatments for disease which used  to be considered fatal such as phthisis,smallpox and gonorrhea.Similarly,technology has figured prominently in the area of food production and may one day allow us to stamp out hunger all over the world.Since that,people live longer and longer,happier and happier through the progress of technology.


Admittedly,some people argued that technology contribute to some contemporary problems.The very prior problem is  
enviromental pollution and degradation ,and the massive utilization of machines conduce more people lose their job so that make the unemployment rate rised.However,as my opinion,these troubles only technology can slove.


All in all,I appreciate the expedient and comfortable life offered by highly developed technology,and thchnology was,is and always the fundamental thesis for the progress of human being.

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July 21,1969,when Armstrong placed his left foot on the surface of moon(set food on the moon),just like what he said:"That's one small step for
man,one giant step(leap) for mankind",I believe,is the time of technology(Era of Technology).Thus,obviously,the technology widen the horizontal knowledge of human（是想说开拓眼界还是增加知识？） may make our lives  more convenient than any time before.

Avigation industry is only the elite(用词不准),or little part of all technology.The fact is that people work for technology,utilize technology and enjoy it in the recent 200 years.The inventation of telephone by American inventor Alexander Bell let us communicate with everyone around world no matter faraway（the） distance between them ;the first successful airplane created by Wright brothers turn the world into a village which promote the tourism and trading among continents;the gasoline-powered automobile designed by German engine designer Karl Benz replace the function of our legs and accelerate movement of person from one area to another.All these new products with new technology make our world better than foretime.3 E! m7 n! _3 a- n
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In retrospect,the history without the modern technology,people not only suffered the shortage of food but the threaten from disease]（这句说得不通，想要表达什么意思）.People in many parts of the world were die of starvation.With the help of technology we have been able to save millions of lives by developing vaccinations,cures,and treatments for disease which used  to be considered fatal such as phthisis,smallpox and gonorrhea.Similarly,technology has figured prominently in the area of food production and may one day allow us to stamp out hunger all over the world.Since that,people live longer and longer,happier and happier through the progress of technology.

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Admittedly,some people argued that technology contribute to some contemporary problems.The very prior problem is  $ n- v8 Q- [' w& P# w
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All in all,I appreciate the expedient and comfortable life offered by highly developed technology,and thchnology was,is and always the fundamental thesis for the progress of human being.
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长句太多，强烈要求断句
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文章挺有新意，但是很多表达很别扭。减少长难句，用词要准确
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第二段主题例子很好
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建议第三段发对的观点放在第一段，先说有限那些缺点然后but再阐述自己的观点。