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[未归类] 【09年1月-4月】TOEFL作文互改小组-之【TWE作文]第9次作业,2.23号作业 by 滴滴雨儿 [复制链接]

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The speaker disagree with the idea which shows in the passage that charitable giving will stay low in the future. There are mainly three reasons as follows.

Firstly, because of the increasing number of the elder people, the government may not able to cover all the expense needed in health care and other facilities. These responsibilities will be taken by citizens of the United States. Therefore, unlike what shows in the passage, charitable giving will increase in the future.

Secondly, the fact that managers of charities used to receive large salaries will not affect people keep donating. According to the speaker, manager knows what the charity money goes to and what contribution it will make.

Lastly, although charity fraud exists, people will learn to donate wisely instead of giving up charitable giving. The speaker gives a case in point that when people receiving calls asking for charitable giving, they will ask to see legal documents before they donate. So even if people being skeptical, we can expect the charitable giving will not decline.

To summarize, the speaker totally disagree with what the passage says.

无比纠结的一次作业。。开学忙七忙八的。。十来天没写了手生得不像个样子。。。帮我批改的同学真是辛苦你们了。。
What if everything happens out of control?
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发表于 2009-2-25 00:00:54 |只看该作者
第二小点主旨是对的,不过细节似乎有些差错。还有第二点和第三点都没有和Passage内容做联系和对比,这个是要扣分的。
最后一段和第一句基本表达都一样,最好还是变化一下句子结构和表述。
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The speaker disagrees with the idea which shows in the passage that charitable giving will stay low in the future. There are mainly three reasons as follows.

Firstly, because of the increasing number of the elder people, the government may not able to cover all the expense needed in health care and other facilities. These responsibilities will be taken by citizens of the United States. Therefore, unlike what shows in the passage, charitable giving will increase in the future.

Secondly, the fact that managers of charities used to receive large salaries will not affect people keep donating. According to the speaker, manager knows what the charity money goes to and what contribution it will make.

Lastly, although charity fraud exists, people will learn to donate wisely instead of giving up charitable giving. The speaker gives a case in point that when people receiving calls asking for charitable giving, they will ask to see legal documents before they donate. So even if people being skeptical, we can expect the charitable giving will not decline.

To summarize, the speaker totally disagree with what the passage says.
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