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歹歹UID: 2593319

Schools offer a wide range of courses such as physical education, music, economics, philosophy, math, English，geography, physics and history. Among all these subjects, which one do you think is the most important and which one is the least important?

Which subject is the most important one catered by the school? The answers may be difficult to make, for people’s flavor is different from one to another. However, as far as I’m concerned, we can not simply tread a course the most significant, instead, every subject students received in school has its own function.

To start with, different course can benefit students indifferent ways. For instance, when learning physics, the abstract and logical thinking pattern will be established. As for the PE class, youth will not only enjoy themselves by playing funny games, but also built a strong body. The course of arts, such music, can plant the seeds of beautiful into the students’ heart. In addition, the subject of English will grant them a great opportunity to look into a totally different culture.

What’s more, it is easier to find the hobby of a student when involved with a wide variety of course. Obviously, we have the students who are crazy about geography whereas some others find themselves fall in love with history. As the proverb going “ Interesting is the best teacher.” If we only choose one subject a vital, we may kill the enthusiasm of those who are fond in other course.

Another suggestion is that different types of course will go hand in hand to board students horizon and in this way, offer them a whole new way of thinking about and looking at the world.

All in all, every subjects in the school is meaningful to the subsequence generation. We can not and should not tell which one is the most significant. Instead, we should realize that all of them are crucial.

饱饭仔UID: 2505959

开头典型的中式思维...不如直接偏一种观点,或者引入两种看法,说理比说空话强
中间三段议论段的话,思路是比较明确的,不过,建议写得更为扎实一点,逻辑更清晰一点
结尾就是概括性的了,没啥好说

歹歹UID: 2593319

超级谢谢斑竹！！！:loveliness:～～～继续努力！

67169619UID: 2320695

眼熟:lol

歹歹UID: 2593319

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俺可是自己一笔一划写的~~~郁闷呀。。就是这个作文。。