Argument35 【☆09GRE作文冲刺组】swbai3月1日作文

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题目：ARGUMENT35 - The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
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In this summary the author recommends using calicylates as flavor additives for foods to decline the occurring of headaches of citizen. To support this recommendation the author cites the following facts about salicylates: (1) they are members of the same chemical family as aspirin; (2) food-processing companies adding salicylates to food correlate with a steady decline of headaches; (3) salicylates can also be used as flavor additives. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, results that none of them lend credible support to the recommendation.

First, salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin do not necessarily indicates that they can treat headaches as well. Perhaps the chemical family including several drugs and only aspirin has the effect to cure disease. For that matter, perhaps salicylates have noting to do with the headaches but only to comfort the patient. In short, without ruling out other possible reasons for saclicylates can cure headaches as aspirin does, the author can not convince me on the basis of them that we can use salicylates to make the number of headaches decline.

Secondly, food-processing companies adding salicylates to food as preservatives correlate with a decline of number of headaches is little indication that salicylate can treat headaches. Perhaps the citizen in last twenty years emphasis on healthy life, and they have less work and more exercises, which make the headache actually hard to happen. Or perhaps the average number of aspirin which citizen of Mentia taken for the last twenty years is increasing steadly. Besides, there may be another drug that citizens prefer to use, which strongly cure the headaches.

Finally, even if salicylates can cure headaches, the author assumes further that put salicylates into food as flavor additives can also treat headaches. Yet the summary contains no evidences to support assumption. Lacking such evidence it is equally that salicylates must be taken a lot to cure headaches, yet flavor additives in food is very little indeed. In fact, perhaps salicylates can have a chemical reaction that they actually turned another thing that have noting to do with the headache.

In conclusion, the recommendation relies on certain doubtful assumptions that render it unconvincing as it stands. To bolster the recommendation, the author must provide clear evidence--perhaps by a way of local survey or study--that salicylate can truly treat headaches, and the salicylates which food-processing companies added in food certainly made the decline of number of headaches. To better assess the recommendation, I would need to know why salicylates can treat headaches. I would also need to know whether salicylate can have affection to headaches as flavor additives for foods.

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In this summary the author recommends using calicylates as flavor additives for foods to decline the occurring of headaches of citizen. To support this recommendation the author cites the following facts about salicylates: (1) they are members of the same chemical family as aspirin; (2) food-processing companies adding salicylates to food correlate with a steady decline of headaches; (3) salicylates can also be used as flavor additives. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, results that none of them lend credible support to the recommendation.

First, salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin do not necessarily indicates that they can treat headaches as well. Perhaps the chemical family including several drugs and only aspirin has the effect to cure disease. For that matter, perhaps salicylates have noting to do with the headaches but only to comfort the patient. In short, without ruling out other possible reasons for saclicylates can cure headaches as aspirin does, the author can not convince me on the basis of them that we can use salicylates to make the number of headaches decline.
丝袜，你可以多写一点反驳的观点，比如说S的药效啊，是否它的阵痛效果不好，是否太强对人体有害，结尾句不要总是这样写嘛，因为其实没有什么内容的哈~（其实有个commen sense的是阿司匹林只能止痛，不能根治。。可是我也不知道怎么反驳）

Secondly, food-processing companies adding salicylates to food as preservatives correlate with a decline of number of headaches is little indication that salicylate can treat headaches. Perhaps the citizen in last twenty years emphasis on healthy life, and they have less work and more exercises, which make the headache actually hard to happen. Or perhaps the average number of aspirin which citizen of Mentia taken for the last twenty years 题目的意思不是这样的，这个研究没说在M城镇进行，反而这个点可以被反驳的~is increasing steadly. Besides, there may be another drug that citizens prefer to use, which strongly cure the headaches.

Finally, even if salicylates can cure headaches, the author assumes further that put salicylates into food as flavor additives can also treat headaches. Yet the summary contains no evidences to support assumption. Lacking such evidence it is equally that salicylates must be taken a lot to cure headaches, yet flavor additives in food is very little indeed. In fact, perhaps salicylates can have a chemical reaction that they actually turned another thing that have noting to do with the headache.我觉得哈，作者的意思是“作为香料的S可以治M镇的人的头痛病”

In conclusion, the recommendation relies on certain doubtful assumptions that render it unconvincing as it stands. To bolster the recommendation, the author must provide clear evidence--perhaps by a way of local survey or study--that salicylate can truly treat headaches, and the salicylates which food-processing companies added in food certainly made the decline of number of headaches. To better assess the recommendation, I would need to know why salicylates can treat headaches. I would also need to know whether salicylate can have affection to headaches as flavor additives for foods.

好了，你的句子什么的已经没有问题了，句式很多变。。NND，我都不知道A怎么写了。。