TOEFL 4—6月Dark_Tournament写作小组 sjy52852231 第九次作业

sjy52852231UID: 2528187

TOEFL 4—6月Dark_Tournament写作小组 sjy52852231 第九次作业

Agree or disagree, technology causes children show less creative than they were in the past' |; o7 R+ f% p# H

With the rapid development of technology, more and more people pay attention to the hot issue about technological inventions and what the inventions brought to our world. It is sure that technology can solve problems and make life convenient and better. But at the same It is easy for us to neglect that how significant creativity it is to children. From my perspective, technology brings various benefit for children in simulating them to show more creative than they were in past. To begin with, the technology inventions such as the computer, TV and so on, which make our world seem smaller. Children can get more information about the new machines and things in the world, what is more, the information may stimulate the creativity of them to think more. Children will involve the opportunity to have many new friends who can them share their ideas.
Another important point is that the technological advances of some tools also benefit for the children. Thanks to many developments, children now have materials and processes that simply did not exist 100 years ago to follow their own aspirations in seeking full expression.
However, there is a short point of the technology, it may causes children become a bad accustom in depending the technology to do everything without individual thinking. If there is a question which be put in front of a children, he or she will want to seek the answer through the internet or asking their parents, teachers or partners but not do it by themselves. In conclusion, I believe that technology plays an important role in the growing process of children. But we should know how to employ the technology reasonably by guidance of adult. Only on this way, technology can have maximum merit.

大家不好意思啊，因为是第一次写，没有看任何资料的，所以写的很不好，希望大家多多帮忙啊。。。。谢谢了。。

jackie1983UID: 2484456

With the rapid development of technology, more and more people pay attention to the hot issue about technological inventions and what the inventions brought to our world. It is sure that technology can solve problems and make life convenient and better. But at the same It is easy for us to neglect that how significant creativity it is to children. From my perspective, technology brings various benefit for children in simulating them to show more creative than they were in past.

To begin with, the technology inventions such as the computer, TV and so on, which make our world seem smaller. Children can get more information about the new machines and things in the world, what is more, the information may stimulate the creativity of them to think more. Children will involve the opportunity to have many new friends who can them share their ideas（with whom they can share their ideas.）
Another important point is that the technological advances of some tools also benefit for(benefit是及物动词，所以去掉for) the children. Thanks to many developments, children now have materials and processes that simply did not exist 100 years ago to follow their own aspirations in seeking full expression.5 A( p2 M1
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However, there is a short point of the technology, it may causes（cause） children become a bad accustom（在这的意思是？） in depending（on）the technology to do everything without individual thinking. If there is a question which be（is） put in front of a children（child）, he or she will want to seek the answer through the internet or asking their parents, teachers or partners but not do it by themselves.

In conclusion, I believe that technology plays an important role in the growing process of children. But we should know how to employ the technology reasonably by guidance of adult. Only on this way, technology can have maximum merit
文章从两个正面一个反面来阐述，很不错
指出了一点词汇问题， 欢迎指正交流

幻风炎UID: 2524862

With the rapid development of technology, more and more people pay attention to the hot issue about technological inventions and what the inventions brought to our world. It is sure that technology can solve problems and make life convenient and better. But at the same It is easy for us to neglect that how significant creativity it is to children. From my perspective, technology brings various benefit for children in simulating them to show more creative than they were in past.(个人认为这里分段比较好)
To begin with, the technology inventions such as the computer, TV and so on, which make our world seem smaller. Children can get more information about the new machines and things in the world, what is more, the information may stimulate the creativity of them to think more. Children will involve the opportunity to have many new friends who can them(去掉) share their ideas. & [1 E/ \* e! m& _+ G
Another important point is that the technological advances of some tools also benefit for(去掉) the children. Thanks to many developments, children now have materials and processes that simply did not exist 100 years ago to follow their own aspirations in seeking full expression.(看不懂你想表达什么)
, r  D( G8 {4 \+ m/ xHowever, there is a short point(disadvantage) of the technology, it may causes children become a bad(badly) accustom in depending the technology to do everything without individual thinking. If there is a question which be put in front of a children, he or she will want to seek the answer through the internet or asking their parents, teachers or partners but not do it by themselves. In conclusion, I believe that technology plays an important role in the growing process of children. But we should know how to employ the technology reasonably by guidance of adult. Only on this way, technology can have maximum merit.,
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