[TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组gundammole 第十三次作业]

gundammoleUID: 2300958

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Drivers should pay a fee to be allowed to drive on the city streets during the time when there is the greatest amount of traffic. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.(07.1.14)



Nowadays, when it comes to a vital topic of whether drivers need to pay a fee during the traffic jam time in order reduce pressure on traffic jam, there are always different viewpoints among the general public in society. Traffic jam has already been a crucial and complex issue for a period of time, but in my opinion, it is unwise of asking drivers to pay for the traffic problem.

First of all, how to give a scientific price and specific period for charging? As a matter of fact, there is not standard for measuring the traffic jam time, and it is hard to tell the most accurate for money taking. At the same time, how much drivers should pay is another a controversy. Provided one dollar each time, vehicles might be as many as before. But if the price is too high, citizens might be angry about it and fight against the policy.

Secondly, drivers stand on a line waiting to pay a fee is still a waste of time. Imagine after office time, you hurry to drive home for making delicious dinner for family, but you are blocked by several toll stations on the way home. No doubt, you have to stand on line and wait for your turn, which is slower than waiting for traffic lights. Main city streets should be efficient way for drivers, which should not be crowded of toll stations of forcing vehicles to stop.

Furthermore, compared with many other solutions, asking drivers to pay a fee is a superficial policy. For instance, on one side, it is wise for government to change each offices working time in order to separate people's time on the streets. On the other side, they can also expend city main streets for more vehicles or build more subways of leading people to choose public traffic instead of driving. Those solutions are better than money taking.

In conclusion, I totally disapprove the policy of taking money from drivers at the traffic jam time. We should not deal with traffic problem on surface, instead, more efficient policy should be found to erase drivers worry about traffic jam.

yangxiaohanhitUID: 2460575

Nowadays, when it comes to a vital topic of whether drivers need to pay a fee during the traffic jam time in order reduce the pressure on traffic jam, there are always different viewpoints among the general public in society. Traffic jam has already been a crucial and complex issue for a period of time, but in my opinion, it is unwise of asking drivers to pay for the traffic problem.
First of all, how to give a scientific price and specific period for charging? As a matter of fact, there is not standard for measuring the traffic jam time, and it is hard to tell the most accurate for money taking.(you mean ”the most accurate time for the money paying?”) At the same time, how much drivers should pay is another a controversy. Provided one dollar each time, vehicles might be as many as before. But if the price is too high, citizens might be angry about it and fight against the policy.
Secondly, drivers stand on a line waiting to pay a fee is still a waste of time. Imagine after office time, you hurry to drive home for making delicious dinner for family, but you are blocked by several toll stations on the way home. No doubt, you have to stand on line and wait for your turn, which is slower than waiting for traffic lights. Main city streets should be efficient way for drivers, which should not be crowded of toll stations of forcing vehicles to stop.建议参考这一段The modern city consists of monstrous edifices and of dark, narrow streets full of petrol fumes and toxic gases, torn by the noise of the taxicabs, lorries and buses, and thronged ceaselessly by great crowds.  
Furthermore, compared with many other solutions, asking drivers to pay a fee is a superficial policy. For instance, on one side, it is wise for government to change each offices working time in order to separate people's time on the streets. On the other side, they can also expend city main streets for more vehicles or build more subways of leading people to choose public traffic instead of driving. Those solutions are better than money taking.
In conclusion, I totally disapprove the policy of taking money from drivers at the traffic jam time. We should not deal with traffic problem on surface, instead, more efficient policy should be found to erase drivers worry about traffic jam.

yangxiaohanhitUID: 2460575

总的来说写得很好啊，我也是反对的，但是我们的三个观点没有相同的，呵呵。主要是冠词的问题要注意，有没有the。。。还有就是用词重复的问题。所有的都是用pay a fee不太好

qiangweiciUID: 2478469

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Drivers should pay a fee to be allowed to drive on the city streets during the time when there is the greatest amount of traffic. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.(07.1.14) $ ?+ M) B) P( C% N7 v
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Nowadays, when it comes to a vital topic of(去掉) whether drivers need to pay a fee during the traffic jam time（高峰期不一定就是交通堵塞时段哦 LZ有偷换概念的嫌疑 建议换成peak time） in order reduce pressure on traffic jam, there are always different viewpoints among the general public in society. Traffic jam has already been a crucial and complex issue for a period of time, but in my opinion, it is unwise of asking drivers to pay for the traffic problem.(如果lz想要在首段narrow the topic down,建议手法要明显一点 不然会出现审题偏差或者偷换概念的嫌疑 换成这样吧 pay a fee during the traffic peak time which obiviously reduces pressure on potential traffic jam)
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First of all, how to give a scientific price and specific period for charging?(TS最好用陈述句，将它改成反问句或者疑问句这样的处理非常冒险呀~~可以将它与As a matter of fact后面的内容换下 会比较合理一点~) As a matter of fact, there is not standard for measuring the traffic jam time, and it is hard to tell the most accurate for money taking. At the same time, how much drivers should pay is another a（去掉） controversy. Provided one dollar each time, vehicles might be as many as before. But if the price is too high, citizens might be angry about it and fight against the policy.

Secondly, drivers stand on a line waiting to pay a fee is still a waste of time. Imagine（Imaging） after office time, you hurry to drive home for making delicious dinner for family, but you are blocked by several toll stations on the way home. No doubt, you have to stand on line and wait for your turn, which is slower than waiting for traffic lights. Main city streets should be efficient way for drivers, which should not be crowded of toll stations of forcing vehicles to stop.(本段的那个例子用得好！)( I$ r)
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Furthermore, compared with many other solutions, asking drivers to pay a fee is a superficial policy. For instance, on one side, it is wise for government to change each offices（office's） working time in order to separate people's time(driving intervals) on the streets. On the other side, they can also expend city main streets for more vehicles(make city main streets available for more vehicles) or build more subways of leading people to choose public traffic instead of driving. Those solutions are better than money taking.' [8 e: T# G. _: R* v" M+ n. m- ~

In conclusion, I totally disapprove the policy of taking money from drivers at the traffic jam time. We should not deal with traffic problem on surface, instead, more efficient policy should be found to erase drivers worry about traffic jam.

好！！！尤其是在思路和论证方式上，现实、假想事例和对比方式都用地恰到好处~~只是要注意一下narrow topic down的方式 还有一些表达的考究~~就这样 不好意思 改晚了~~呵呵