【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组jackie1983的 第14次作业】

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第十四次作业
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People can learn more from watching television than reading books. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
television:
vivid, listen

passive
books: systematic,
disagree
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From which medium can we learn more--televisions or books? Different people may respond to this question variously, according to their distinguished characters, personal experiences and even educational backgrounds. As far as I'm concerned, although television is quite vivid in learning, books are more important in the process of learning because books are more systematic,
more convenient, and sometimes we can only use books in order to get some knowledge.

Admittedly, televisions are of great importance when we are learning something. As we know, by providing vivid videos and sound, television can make the process of study more interesting.

However, in my opinion, the advantage of books can outweigh that of televisions. Firstly, knowledge in books is more systematic than that in television. For example, if we want to learn the relative theory proposed by Einstein, it's better for us to refer to the books that depicts and explains it systematically. Thus, we can see that books are systematic.

Secondly, to study by using books is more convenient than by using televisions. Books are small and portable, so we can take them here and there with a bag. And whenever we want to study, we can simply take the books out. On the contrary, a television is too heavy to be carried here and there.

Last but not least, sometimes we can acquire some information only through referring to books. Because some precious data were only recorded in books, under such a circumstance, we cannot depend on a television to provide us such information.

From what has been discussed above, we can easily reach the conclusion that although television is important in study, books are more significant when we study.

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From which medium can we learn more--televisions or books? Different people may respond to this question variously, according to their distinguished characters, personal experiences and even educational backgrounds. As far as I'm concerned, although television is quite vivid in learning, books are more important in the process of learning because books are more systematic, more convenient, and sometimes we can only use books in order to get some knowledge.

Admittedly, televisions are of great importance when we are learning something. As we know, by providing vivid videos and sound, television can make the process of study more interesting.

However, in my opinion, the advantage of books can outweigh that(用复数会好点吧) of televisions. Firstly, knowledge in books is more systematic than that in television. For example, if we want to learn the relative theory proposed by Einstein, it's better for us to refer to the books that depicts and explains （还是单复数问题）it systematically. Thus, we can see that books are systematic.（我怎么觉得LZ的例子表现不出书的systematic呢 还是要具体再阐述一下吧）

Secondly, to study by using books （很奇怪的用法 用studying by books如何？）is more convenient than by using televisions. Books are small and portable, so we can take them here and there with a bag. And whenever we want to study, we can simply take the books out. On the contrary, a television is too heavy to be carried here and there.
（我和楼主用了一样的例子 可以再深入点讲啊~）
Last but not least, sometimes we can acquire some information only through referring to books. Because some precious data were only recorded in books, under such a circumstance, we cannot depend on a television to provide us such information.

From what has been discussed above, we can easily reach the conclusion that although television is important in study, books are more significant when we study.（两个study有重复之嫌）

LZ的逻辑还是很清晰的 毕竟是考过G的人~~~~但每点都没展开 感觉都挺单薄的 其实托福的作文也还是要讲字数的 相信LZ如果想写多肯定也能写出来 G的成绩在那摆着呢~~~~

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1# jackie1983
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Secondly, to study by using books is more convenient than by using televisions. Books are small and portable, so we can take them here and there with a bag. And whenever we want to study, we can simply take the books out. On the contrary, a television is too heavy to be carried here and there.$ j% p: a0 {5 ~( c

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From what has been discussed above, we can easily reach the conclusion that although television is important in study, books are more significant when we study.(两个study,可以换个说法: although television is important in study, books play more significant role in learning.)

总体来说文章虽然长句不多,但几乎没有语法错误,写的比较保险,学习.
个人感觉作者的观点最好在第一段就阐述,但是LZ在第三段才出现自己的立场,显然不太合适,很可能会扣分.在同样的时间下,建议LZ花更多的时间在论点的论证上面,现在每个论点还显得有些单薄.LZ有基础在,练习几次相信你很快就能写出高分的文章了,加油!