TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组legolastu第23次作业

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第二十三次作业

teacher should be paid according to their students' performs（07.10.28）

周三22：00前交上来

As a matter of fact, teacher is a most important part of education.They have a great influence of both science knowledge and characters on their students.But it is such a consulting problem whether we should pay the teachers accoring to the performs of students or not that debates keep going for a long time. In my opinion, I would more appreciate the former view.The reasons are sited below.

Firstly,teachers are the leader of konwledge for students,and,to same extent,student’s behaviour is the consequence of the teacher’s effort.To pay the teacher owning to the performance of students can actually encourage those who have more efficient method to educate their students and make them do better on their studies and other aspects of the school activities.In the meantime, those whoes teaching methods can not make the students peform well would get less pay and they will ponder on the problems or discuss with the students to make an effort to improve the situation so that students could make up the scarcity and improve themselves.


On the contrary,if we give the identical salary to teachers whose students might have a dissimiliar behaviour,we can not say it equal to the better teachers and their hard work.Since there is no difference of education methods, a few of the better teachers may slacken themselves in teaching and no longer pay much attention to the students to see if they are progressive.

Additionally,the extra bonus could help the teacher buy more materials using for his or her teaching or organize various activities for students attending the course.No matter what way do the teacher use the money, he or she should feel pleased and encouraged.With the pleasure and enthusiasm to the curriculum,teacher could undoubtly give out a vivid and excellent presentation to the class.


To conclude,it would be a wise decision to pay those whose class performs well.And with the encouragement,the quality of the curriculum should increase without a doubt.

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teacher should be paid according to their students' performs（07.10.28）
周三22：00前交上来
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As a matter of fact, teacher is a（the） most important part of education. They have a great influence of(on) both science knowledge and characters on their students. But it is such a consulting problem whether we should pay the teachers according to the performs(performance) of students or not that debates keep（两个动词？） going for a long time. In my opinion, I would more appreciate the former view. The reasons are sited below.


Firstly, teachers are the leaders of knowledge for students, and, to same extent, student’s behavior is the consequence of the teacher’s effort. To pay the teacher owning to the performance of students can actually encourage those who have more efficient method to educate their students and make them do better on their studies and other aspects of the school activities. In the meantime, those whose teaching methods can not make the students perform well would get less pay and they will ponder on the problems or discuss with the students to make an effort to improve the situation so that students could make up the scarcity and improve themselves.


On the contrary, if we give the identical salary to teachers whose students might have a dissimilar behavior, we can not say it is equal to the better teachers and their hard work. Since there is no difference of education methods, a few of the better teachers may slacken themselves in teaching and no longer pay much attention to the students to see if they are progressive.' k) Y4
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Additionally, the extra bonus could help the teacher buy more materials using for his or her teaching or organize various activities for students attending the course. No matter what way do(去掉) the teacher use the money, he or she should feel pleased and encouraged. More importantly(有个连词比较好), with the pleasure and enthusiasm to the curriculum, teacher could undoubtedly give out a vivid and excellent presentation to the class.


To conclude, it would be a wise decision to pay those whose class performs well. And with the encouragement, the quality of the curriculum should increase without a doubt.

楼主文章不错~没什么大错误，内容完整，文字流畅
但是不知道这样纯说理的写法效果怎样，如果每个论点配有例子会更加详细和具体。
第3、4段略显淡薄了。
继续努力、加油！