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Some people may honor(这里是表达羡慕还是尊敬呢?如果是尊敬的话跟后面的refuse不大搭) the theacher as an great occupation, and refuse to evaluate teachers' job by their
student's perform. They might say"The teacher can not study for you, It's the students' duty to study ' ^ Y _7 I# {9 _: n9 g
harder to get higher score" (to...to感觉句式有点单调,改成to study harder for higher score).However, it is undeniable that it's teacher's duty to pay attention to
every one of their students(每一个他的学生?这句怪怪的,有点Chigish...), no necessary to make every one achieve(s) the best, but to help them improving (help sb do sth,改成improve)J) Pthemselves from their current level. In this point,teacher should be paid according to their students' performs.6 T8
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Basiclly, teacher as an occupation should have some kind(s) of evaluation system to decide how much they $ q1 O0 z) c1 F1 O
deserved for their job. Just like students' exams, the harder they studied during the class the higher score ! o% |+ j0 `6 w
they will get from(in?) the test. (,)it can be a good way to examine teachers too. Meanwhile, payments as the
"score" relate to their student's performs in the test(这句,嘶,没看懂...). From my personal experience, when I was in high school, students receive(d) papers form(from吧?) te(a)cher management department to ask them (这边有点罗嗦)if they are(时态?)satisfied to their current teacher, the optional answer were separated as "fair,good,or poor." I clearly remembered the 5 mpapar because there was really some different type(s) of teacher in our class, one of them is especially welcomed by(用populared with)our classmate(s), whenever she came into classroom, we could felt the rejoice (rejoice是动词啊,这里该用个形容词)atmosphere accompany(ied) with her. Her cheering characteristic and patient attitude in(to) the teaching process earned "the best teacher of the year" title for her, also gained a big increase for(of) her salary. From(Since比较好) then, our school tests teachers every year to encourag other teachers to pay more attention on their duty.
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这一段句型结构有点问题哦,时态要注意~
On the other hand, it is unfiar(unfair) to teachers by paying their salaries depends on the number of years they 6 q; d- e& q4 b( }2 P+ w
worked in school. Imagine a school without an standard evaluation on their teachers, and gave(时态?) them the . q9 f/ K7 M2 l7 P2 h8 t( c2 v
same paycheck regardless their students' achievements. It would be a great disappointment for those
teacher(s) tried their best to help students. also an unfair payment to thoes(?) didn't working hardly for their(重复). when I was in senior high school, there was an old teacher in our mathmatic class(直接改成an old math teacher) really disappointing . \us, he recived a highly paybill from shcool because of her (his or her?)teaching ages. I always heard my classmate 2 {discussing about him that did not make his lecture clear on the class, neither could they found him during office hour(s) in his room.2 [. o# ]7(
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这一段简单句式有点多,It be,There be的句式不要用太多,从句有点不通顺~
After all, teacher is an(a) career just like others, they needs (need)a certain system to be supervised, to make(改成making是不是好些) sure every they gets(每个所得?这个用法也有点怪..) what their deserves from their work. also the students' score is the best teller of a teacher's 2 |+ z8 @" L4 xachievement.
文章结构很好,内容事例也很丰富,但是在语法和句型上要注意下,另外关于时态和拼写的小细节也要多关注下哈
其实我水平也有限啦,请多指教,鞠躬^_^
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