5.6月份 cracking ibt essay! 小组写作组 想秋刀鱼的猫 第2次作业

想秋刀鱼的猫UID: 2304079

请多指教，我可怕的作文…
Do you agree or disagree: Teacher should be paid according to their students' performs?

Admittedly, the prosperity of modern society is based on the systematic application of education, thus attracting much greater attention on educational outcomes. Education is essential for progress, the widespread acceptance of this concept led in turn to the discussion about how to improve the quality of education. As a result, some educational institutions gives many suggestions including that teacher should be paid according to their students’ performs, touching off a drastically controversy in the society. Whether the teachers’ salary related to their students’ performs? I am inclined to the denial.

In most degree, learning is largely activity, and teachers play an accessorial role in students’ studying process. If we related the teachers’ salary to their students’ performs, this balance would be broken up. It is not difficult to imagine that teachers have to consider making out methods to improve the student’s scores or manners, with giving too much homework or regulating the students harshly. In fact, these methods may obtain opposite effects.

On the other hand, it is unfair, to the teachers, that is paid according to their students’ performs. No one could deny that the main responsibility of the teachers is to try their best to help their students develop academic abilities and other talents. But different student has different actions during the studying, someone does well when someone doesn’t well which all depend on themselves. As we known, one should be rewarded through his/her hard working. If a teacher always does his/her work seriously, he/she should get his/her pay.

Finally, the relationship of teachers and students is taken for granted for long history-summed up, not altogether accurately, as”
kids an parents”. Teachers mean not only teaching us knowledge but also guiding us life in the students’ growing ways. Once we put the teachers’ paid related to their students’ performs, the harmonious relationship will disappear, in stead of commercial connection.

Therefore, it is no exaggeration to say that teacher shouldn’t be paid according to their students' performs.

lingyao1UID: 2467525

1# 想秋刀鱼的猫
我才看完xiushe的，花了很久，我正在看你的作品，晚点交报告，还请领导原谅！！

lingyao1UID: 2467525

2# lingyao1
Admittedly, theprosperity of modern society is based on the systematic application ofeducation, thus attracting much greater attention on educational outcomes.（这句我不是太懂和前面prosperity的联系） Education isessential for progress, thewidespread acceptance of this concept led in turn to the discussion about howto improve the quality of education. As a result, some educationalinstitutions gives many suggestions including that teacher should be paidaccording to their students’ performs and touching off adrastically controversy in the society. （给出suggestions的同时激起争论）Whether the teachers’ salary related to their students’performs? I am inclined to the denial.（这是你的模板吗，挺好的，我能借鉴吗？）

In most degree, learning is largely activity,and teachers play an accessorial role in entire students’studying process. If person（尽量避免用we、us、you、I、me） related the teachers’ salary to their students’performs, this balance would be broken up. It is not difficult to imagine thatteachers have to consider making out methods to concentrateon the student’s apparent scoresor manners, with giving too much homework or regulating the students harshly.In fact, these methods may obtain opposite effects.（我认为用improve有正面褒义的意思，所以既然我们要否定题目就别“提高”成绩了，换上“死盯”“表面上”来体现题目的弊端，你看行不）

On the other hand, it is unfair, to theteachers, that is paid according to their students’ performs. No one could denythat the main responsibility of the teachers is to try their best to help theirstudents develop academic abilities and other talents. But different studenthas different actions during the studying, someone does well when someonedoesn’t well which all depend on themselves. As we known, one should berewarded through his/her hard working. If a teacher always does his/her workseriously, he/she should get his/her pay.

Finally, the relationship of teachers andstudents is taken for granted for long history-summed up, not altogether accurately,as “kids a parents." Teachers mean not only teaching usknowledge, but also tobe a pilot in the students’ growing ways. Once we put theteachers’ paid related to their students’ performs, the harmonious relationshipwill disappear, instead of commercial connection.
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Therefore, it is no exaggeration tosay that teacher should not be paid according to their students' performs.

8错8错，一看功力就在我之上！小民的能力也就是简单改一下明显疏漏错误和自我理解的推荐词汇。

语法和结构完全够了，中心句、主题句、keywords、论点、论据都有，作文25+应该没问题！

日后还请多多照顾！

xiusheUID: 2136439

厄= _ = 晚上出去溜达回来晚了...先顶一下明天早点起来继续看这篇

想秋刀鱼的猫UID: 2304079

3# lingyao1

多谢啦,那个第一段不是模板..是我自己编滴~
米事,亲愿意用就用哈

xiusheUID: 2136439

Admittedly, the prosperity of modern society is based on the systematic application of education, thus attracting much greater attention on educational outcomes. Education is essential for progress(social progress?), the widespread acceptance of this concept led in turn to the discussion about how to improve the quality of education. As a result, some educational institutions gives many suggestions including that teacher should be paid according to their students’ performs, touching off a drastically controversy in the society. Whether the teachers’ salary related to their students’ performs? I am inclined to the denial.

In most degree, learning is(+a) largely activity, and teachers(-s?) play(+ed?) an accessorial role in students’ studying process. If we related the teachers’ salary to their students’ performs, this balance would be broken up. It is not difficult to imagine that teachers have to consider making out methods to improve the student’s scores or manners, with giving too much homework(+ to students?) or regulating the students harshly. In fact, these methods may obtain opposite effects.

On the other hand, it is unfair, to the teachers, that is paid according to their students’ performs. No one could deny that the main responsibility of the teachers is to try their best to help their students develop academic abilities and other talents. But different student has different actions during the studying(-ing?), someone does well when(while) someone doesn’t well which all depend on themselves. As we known, one should be rewarded through his/her hard working. If a teacher always does his/her work seriously, he/she should get his/her pay.

Finally, the relationship of teachers and students is taken for granted for long history-summed up, not altogether accurately, as kids an parents”. Teachers mean not only teaching us knowledge but also guiding us life in the students’ growing ways. Once we put the teachers’ paid related to their students’ performs, the harmonious relationship will disappear, in stead of commercial connection.(in stead of 用在结尾句似乎结构不恰当)

Therefore, it is no exaggeration to say that teacher shouldn’t be paid according to their students' performs.

啊啊啊…写的很棒，句子还有用词都非常值得俺学习，只有一些小的疏忽，再稍微细心一点就好了！ 一起加油！