issue7 =so what=小组第一次作业by gabyyw

gabywUID: 2633725

Electronic products are increasingly becoming the focus of consumers in modern society, and relatively more attention has been paid to the video camera. Even more attention has been paid to the function of video camera, which can record actual life by virtue of accurate consecutive images. There emerged an awareness that video camera is more important than written records as a form of documentation.


It comes to no surprise that video camera can record some significant events or accidents, as does not mean that it can totally replace written records or is more important than that, at least in principle. As digital technology developed, although videos are accurate and active, some plots in videos can delete or revise and distort without notice by means of advanced technology, which nearly can not be found. Those revised absolutely can not be regarded as a kind of proof in law cases. For example, in the TV series of break prison, the video described Lincoln Burrows killed Terrence Steadman, the younger brother of vice president in the United States, which was filmed by someone who actually distorted the event and intentionally covered the truth. Even videos have not been revised in the early time. However, it is hard to guarantee that it would be done later. Additionally, videos stored in computers or hard discs are quite vulnerable to lose in formatting, once it occurs, as nearly can not be recovered. On the country, written records are not very easy to revise as a form of documentation, particularly handwriting.


It is coming light that languages have spread for many centuries and will spread further because of having written records. Undoubtedly, history, culture and technology knowledge, all of the above are written by languages. If there have no written records, people can not learn languages, in return, if people can not learn the languages, they even impossible to record history, write literacy, compose music, and so on. If in that case, people would be in original society for ever, let alone video camera. Moreover, it is obvious fact that written records is a basic and extensive form of documentation, which used in various areas in order to record information for effective management, and is also independent and necessarily in this era, when the information is explosive and disorder. For example, in our daily life, most of files are written records such as contracts, certificates, identifications, receipts and bills. Due to videos just can reflect situations at certain time point, whilst written form can record many detailed information in long periods.
Quite often, written records documentations can not take the place of video files.

In conclusion, videos files and written records files are both the form of documentation, which can be applied in different areas. Videos files, for instance, are often used in film and TV industries, or used in monitoring system for security. However, videos records may do little in recording history literacy, language. We can apparently aware of the evident fact that videos file are a kind of form of documentation, but less important than written records.

2006201652UID: 2496703

Electronic products are increasingly becoming the focus of consumers in modern society, and relatively more attention has been paid to the video camera. Even more attention has been paid to the function of video camera, which can record actual life by virtue of accurate consecutive images. There emerged an awareness that video camera is more important than written records as a form of documentation.(论点？)

It comes to no surprise that video camera can record some significant events or accidents, as does not mean that it can totally replace written records or is more important than that, at least in principle. As digital technology developed, although videos are accurate and active, some plots in videos can delete or revise and distort(用被动) without notice by means of advanced technology, which nearly can not be found (again). Those revised absolutely can not be regarded as a kind of proof in law cases.(不懂…) For example, in the TV series of break prison, the video described Lincoln Burrows killed Terrence Steadman, the younger brother of vice president in the United States, which was filmed by someone who actually distorted the event and intentionally covered the truth. Even videos have not been revised in the early time. However, it is hard to guarantee that it would be done later. Additionally, videos stored in computers or hard discs are quite vulnerable to lose in formatting, once it occurs, as nearly can not be recovered. On the country, written records are not very easy to revise as a form of documentation, particularly handwriting.

It is coming light that languages have spread for many centuries and will spread further because of having written records. Undoubtedly, history, culture and technology knowledge, all of the above are written by languages. If there have(are) no written records, people can not learn languages, in return, if people can not learn the languages, they (are) even impossible to record history, write literacy, compose music, and so on. If in that case, people would be in original society for ever, let alone video camera. Moreover, it is (a) obvious fact that written records is a basic and extensive form of documentation, which (is) used in various areas in order to record information for effective management, and is also independent and necessarily(necessary) in this era, when the information is explosive and (in) disorder. For example, in our daily life, most of files are written records such as contracts, certificates, identifications, receipts and bills. Due to videos just can reflect situations at certain time point, whilst (美式说法while) written form can record many detailed information in long periods.
Quite often, written records documentations can not take the place of video files.

In conclusion, videos files and written records files are both the form of documentation, which can be applied in different areas. Videos files, for instance, are often used in film and TV industries, or used in monitoring system for security. However, videos records may do little in recording history literacy, language. We can (be) apparently aware of the evident fact that videos file are a kind of form of documentation, but less important than written records.
文章写的很好，逻辑性强，结构严谨。语言功底很深（至少比我好N倍），句式变化多样，看出你词汇量很大，除了个别语法错误，:hug: 很高兴和你分到一组哦。

sha-shineUID: 2610662

Electronic products are increasingly becoming the focus of consumers in modern society, and relatively more attention has been paid to the video camera. Even more attention has been paid to the function of video camera, which can record actual life by virtue of accurate consecutive images. There emerged an awareness that video camera is more important than written records as a form of documentation.


It comes to no surprise that video camera can record some significant events or accidents, as（这是转折么？） does not mean that it can totally replace written records or is more important than that, at least in principle.（第一段的总结应该是全文意义的概括，各个主题句的总结，这段的主题没有在第一段体现出来） As digital technology developed, although videos are accurate and active, some plots in videos can delete or revise and distort without notice by means of advanced technology, which nearly can not be found. Those revised absolutely can not be regarded as a kind of proof in law cases. For example, in the TV series of break prison, the video described Lincoln Burrows killed Terrence Steadman, the younger brother of vice president in the United States, which was filmed by someone who actually distorted the event and intentionally covered the truth.(我认为这个例子举得没有说服力~而且总篇说的是影像记录的好处，这里大部分说的是不好，即使是大正小负，小负的文字有点过多) Even videos have not been revised in the early time. However, it is hard to guarantee that it would be done later.（这两句之间是什么关系~没读明白）Additionally, videos stored in computers or hard discs are quite vulnerable to lose in formatting, once it occurs, as nearly can not be recovered. On the country, written records are not very easy to revise as a form of documentation, particularly handwriting.（感觉有点思维混乱
也没有提纲不知你的意图是什么，如果这段是让步段，那接下来中间部分最少也该写两段啊）


It is coming light that languages have spread for many centuries and will spread further because of having written records. Undoubtedly, history, culture and technology knowledge, all of the above are written by languages. If there have no written records, people can not learn languages, in return, if people can not learn the languages, they even impossible to record history, write literacy, compose music, and so on. If in that case, people would be in original society for ever, let alone video camera. Moreover, it is obvious fact that written records is a basic and extensive form of documentation, which used in various areas in order to record information for effective management, and is also independent and necessarily in this era, when the information is explosive and disorder. For example, in our daily life, most of files are written records such as contracts, certificates, identifications, receipts and bills. Due to videos just can reflect situations at certain time point, whilst written form can record many detailed information in long periods.Quite often, written records documentations can not take the place of video files.

In conclusion, videos files and written records files are both the form of documentation, which can be applied in different areas. Videos files, for instance, are often used in film and TV industries, or used in monitoring system for security. However, videos records may do little in recording history literacy, language. We can apparently aware of the evident fact that videos file are a kind of form of documentation, but less important than written records.
没大看懂你终究要写什么第一二四段写的是影像记录重要，第三段又写的文字记录重要…
你的开头给人的感觉是说影像记录重要
中间第二段写的是影像记录的缺点
第三段写的是书面记录的优点
结尾说的是两个都重要要结合应用
思维混乱吧
写提纲就好了