0910G spectacular备考日志by窟窟【大洋彼岸之风】

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Issue5
As is known to us, studying in a form of general education is quite important to students, which enable them to look at the world in a more comprehensive perspective. But is it the case that studying same curriculum all over the nation amount to receiving general education or former guarantee latter? And is it necessary and effective to implement the same national curriculum?

Admittedly ,the fact that require all students study the same national curriculum may prevent schools and students from paying more attention to one or certain subjects while neglecting the study of other fields. But the key problem is that how and who set standards for this curriculum? Is it really possible that some subjects in this national curriculum can be carried on efficiently range from area to area? 例子 The level of education , quality of facility vary from places to places. 比如一套侧重于实验课的化学学科课本在师资力量薄弱和教学设施落后的地方,将难以有效实现.,这不仅压制学生学习热情,同时浪费财力

Assuming that problems of teaching facilities mentioned above can be solved easily and properly, but when it comes to some subjects such as politic and religion ,it must raise controversy in some area.不同地区人民有不同宗教信仰.不可能要求回族人民相信无神论.现阶段不可能强迫香港学生学习社会主义政治课,接受社会主义意识形态.

Furthermore, the conclusion rest on one presumptuous assumption that all the students are able to enter colleges is inconsiderate and irresponsible Such way of education can be likely to damage the interests of those who fail to receive further education owing to lack of money or talent in study, since heir purpose of studying is to find a good job after graduates easily and immediately.职业技术学校的存在是最好的证明

The most advisable way of education is that a nation should require students to learn certain national curriculum which is necessary for their further study and job and can be introduced effectively, at the same time, various schools in different regions should be given adequate freedom to offer distinctive and advantageous curriculum according to different situation.

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Issue5
As is known to us, studying in a form of general education is quite important to students, which enable them to look at the world in a more comprehensive perspective. Admittedly ,the act of requiring all students to study the same national curriculum may prevent schools and students from paying too much attention to one or certain subjects while neglecting the study of other fields. But is it the case that studying same national curriculum  amounts to receiving general education or former guarantees latter? And is it actually necessary and effective to implement same national curriculum all over the country?

In the first place, one key problem is that whether some subjects in this national curriculum can be efficiently carried out range from area to area equally(这句话怪怪,但改不来). The current situation that level of education and quality of facility vary from places to places should be taken into account. For instance, one chemistry subject which lay great emphasis on the experiments can hardly be put into practice in some area where there is a lack of advanced facilities such as standard laboratory. Not only does it lead to a waste of money, but also damage students' learning enthusiasm to some extent. On the contrary, the same chemistry subject that was designed for the students in undeveloped places would probably fail to take advantage of facilities and meet demands of students in the developed places, which can lead to another form of wasting use of resource and destroying enthusiasm of students.

Assuming that problems of teaching facilities mentioned above can be solved easily and properly, but when it comes to some subjects such as politics and religion, it must raise controversy in some area because people would  likely challenge that how and who make the standard of this national curriculum .One nation consists of several races that show differences in culture ,religion and so on with each other,however,the contain of curriculum will never satisfy all the people due to the inevitable enormous distinction between races. You can never ever force a Muslim to believe there is no Allah. In fact, the same thing applies to politics curriculum. It is hard to imagine such circumstance that students in HK attend one lesson where the idea that socialist system must take place of capitalist system in HK immediately proposed by teacher and reflected from book.

Furthermore, the conclusion rest on one presumptuous assumption that all the students are able to enter colleges is inconsiderate and irresponsible. Such way of education can be likely to damage the interests of those who fail to receive further education owing to lack of money or talent in study, since their purpose of studying is to find a good job after graduate easily and immediately. The common existence of technical schools is the best proof, which indicate that one technical skill to those who prefer to get jobs rather than receive further study is fairly significant. Therefore, the act of implementing national curriculum without considering different background of the students mentioned above can bring more harms than helps for some students.

As far as I am concerned, the most advisable and efficient way of education is that one nation should require students to learn certain national curriculum which is necessary for their further study and job and can be introduced pragmatically and effectively(这句话也怪怪), at the same time, various schools in different regions should be given adequate freedom to offer distinctive and advantageous curriculum according to different situation.

我根据提纲,补上例子,加强衔接,将第二段开头移到第一段,使第二段中心明确..
希望高人能指点呵``小弟万分感激..
早上自己又改了些词句..

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两点半了...想到端午后有十门考试就想哭...特别是那个万恶的毛邓三!!瓦草泥马!!!!
发泄一下哈!!!!!!!!!!

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红色是我觉得有疑问的地方~绿色是好的句子~刚开始光改了没注意好的句子后来才开始发掘的~不好意思哈~下次注意....
As是不是应该加个it~没有主语 is known to us, studying in a form of general education 很别扭 is quite important to students, which enable 改为enables them to look at the world in a more comprehensive perspective. Admittedly ,the act of requiring all students to study the same national curriculum may prevent schools and students from paying too much attention to one or certain subjects while neglecting the study of other fields. But is it the case that studying the same national curriculum  amounts to receiving general education or former guarantees latter? 没看懂…=.=!!! And is it actually necessary and effective to implement same (the same,好像是第二次写错了) national curriculum all over the country?

In the first place, one key problem is that whether some subjects in  this national curriculum can be efficiently carried out range from area to area equally(这句话怪怪,但改不来) 的确怪怪的… one key concern is that whether the general curriculum over the country could be efficiently carried out 水平实在有限，想了很久也就才想成这样…汗颜. The current situation that 去掉 level of education and quality of facility vary from places to places place to place should be taken into account. For instance, one chemistry subject which lay lays great emphasis on the experiments can hardly be put into practice in some area where there is a lack of advanced facilities such as standard laboratory.这句有点罗嗦了 Not only does it这个it有点突兀没指代清楚 lead leads to a waste of money, but also damage damages students' learning enthusiasm to some extent. On the contrary, the same chemistry subject that was designed for the去掉the students in undeveloped places would probably fail to take advantage of facilities and meet demands of students in the developed places, which can lead to another form of wasting use of resource and destroying enthusiasm of students.

Assuming that problems of teaching facilities mentioned above can be solved easily and properly, but去掉but好些 when it comes to some subjects such as politics and religion, it must will好些 raise controversy in some area areas because people would  likely challenge that how and who make the standard of this national curriculum没太…明白 .One nation consists of several races that show shows differences in culture ,religion and so on with each other, however, the contain （combination） of curriculum will never satisfy all the people due to the inevitable enormous distinction distinctions between races. You can never ever force a Muslim to believe there is no Allah. In fact, the same thing applies to politics curriculum. It is hard to imagine such circumstance that students in HK attend one lesson where the idea that socialist system must take place of capitalist system in HK immediately proposed by teacher and reflected from book.
有点晚了~~精神状态不佳~剩下的两段下次改哈...见谅见谅~~
有些改的不对的地方请指正！呵呵~互相学习嘛....

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不对不对，是蓝色的句子是我觉得好的~~色盲了一下~~呵呵

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Furthermore, the conclusion rest on one presumptuous assumption 这里读起来不是很顺that all the students are able to enter colleges is inconsiderate and irresponsible. Such way of education can be likely to damage 改为would dampen the interests of those who fail to receive further education owing to lack of money or talent in study, since their purpose of studyingstudy is to find a good job after graduate改为is to find a good job easily and immediately after graduation easily and immediately. The common existence of technical schools is the best proof, which indicateindicates that one technical skill to those who prefer to get jobs rather than receive further study is fairly significant.用个小倒装好点~免得头重脚轻technical skill is fairly significant to those who prefer to get jobs rather than receive further study Therefore, the act of implementing national curriculum without considering different background of the students mentioned above can bring more harms than helps for some students.

As far as I am concerned, the most advisable and efficient way of education is that one nation should require students to learn certain national curriculum which is necessary for their further study and job and can be introduced pragmatically and effectively(这句话也怪怪), 整句话改为 the most advisable and efficient way is to introduce the general curriculum when it  helps peoples' futher study and job .后面那个can be introduced pragmatically and effectively有点太突兀了at the same time, various schools in different regions should be given adequate freedom to offer distinctive and advantageous curriculum according to different situation.
窟窟兄有点爱写长句子啊~~不过很多写着写着就不知道在说什么了，而且句子的衔接不是很好~读起来经常怪怪的~不过鄙人阅读也不是很好的说....还有就是经常把名词单数后面的谓语动词写成复数的，如喜欢写it show...希望这些小错误能多多改正

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还有就是很多地方我也不知道怎么改~~~水平有限请见谅哈~
希望其他同学能多多努力指出来~~~我有不对的地方也可以直接批评！:)

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7# akongworld
恩..我知错了`以后小弟尽量写明晰! 不再犯时态错误..

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Issue7


With the rapid development of scientific technology, human being inevitably indulges into a digital age .As one of the most extraordinary inventions derived from this age; video camera produces a profound impact on not only people's daily lives, but also the way of documentation.

Thanks to the comparative advantage brought by video camera, more and more people are inclined to neglect another form of documentation, written record, which tends to be mingled with excessive subjective opinion from the writer and therefore leads to the alteration of facts. Striking images provided and direct way recorded by video camera can easily shock people at the fist sight. When you see the picture that one girl buried under the collapsed building during the Wenchuan earthquake was crying for her lost legs, are you crying too? In contrast, tedious characters on the papers can hardly produce such immense impact on us, since most of us dislike being forced to believe or accept some fact we do not witness and experience.

Nevertheless, owing to the tremendous visual impact provided by video camera, the misuse of picture can lead to more severe distortion of facts than written records. When I see the picture that two Japanese soldiers patted one Chinese child's head with a smile in Nanjing during World War Two, I am really in a fury. Such picture made by Japanese government tried to hide the truth that thousands of Chinese were suffering indignity and slaughter, which indicates that people can use video camera for personal or political benefits in an illegal and dirty way. Additionally, some pictures or videos without necessary and appropriate illustration are prone to make people confused, even lead to meaningless controversy due to the distinction of religions and civilizations between different regions. In Japan, the right way to eat noodles is slurping nosily, if not, it means that you dislike the noodles. Those who know nothing about this strange custom would think that such slurping is rather impolite and uncivil. Consequently，concise literal interpretation is fairly conductive for reader to learn the fact accurately.

Furthermore, the written record plays a vital role in the transmission of civilization. Assuming that after thousands of years when our offspring confront with stacks of pictures and disc, how they choose and analyze them, how they know and study the civilization and history we created entirely? Just imagining that all kinds of books lying on the shelves in the library have been substituted by those filled with pictures without any literal interpretation, can we make sure that we could learn philosophy or history easily just by analyzing pictures? The intensive study of ancient civilization such as Mayas and Babylon is based on the decoding of hieroglyph. For this reason, civilization can never be transmitted completely and effectively from generations to another without written records.

In conclusion, the role that written record plays in digital age is still crucial. The combination of pictures and characters is the most effective way, which can provide us more accurate and convincing records of lives and history. The only thing we should pay more attention is trying to avoid the misuse of pictures and excessive subjective opinions in written records

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嗯嗯~~~比上篇容易懂~而且有的地方立意很好啊~呵呵
加油加油~~~顺便有空也给批评批评我哈~~~虚心受教...

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11# akongworld
恩`好的蛤``

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10# 窟窟
With the rapid development of scientific technology, human being都是用复数的吧？inevitably indulges into a digital age .As one of the mostextraordinary inventions derived from this age; video camera produces aprofound impact on not only people's daily lives, but also the way ofdocumentation. not only  but also 稍微有个递进语气，这里的两个成分又太短 有点刻意用句子的嫌疑 不如用both and

Thanks to the comparative advantage brought by video camera, more andmore people are inclined to neglect another form of documentation,written record, which tends to be mingled with excessive subjectiveopinion from the writer and therefore leads to the alteration of facts.整个句子有点头轻脚重  倒装一下试试？Striking images provided and direct way recorded by video camera caneasily shock people at the fist sight. When you see the picture thatone girl buried under the collapsed building during the Wenchuanearthquake was crying for her lost legs, are you crying too? Incontrast, tedious characters on the papers can hardly produce suchimmense impact on us, since most of us dislike
being forced to believeor accept some fact we do not witness and experience.

Nevertheless, owing to the tremendous visual impact provided by videocamera, the misuse of picture can lead to more severe distortion offacts than written records. When I see the picture that two Japanesesoldiers patted one Chinese child's head with a smile in Nanjing duringWorld War Two, I am really in a fury. Such picture made by Japanesegovernment tried to hide the truth that thousands of Chinese weresuffering indignity and slaughter, which indicates that people can usevideo camera for personal or political benefits in an illegal and dirtyway. Additionally, some pictures or videos without necessary andappropriate illustration are prone to make people confused, even leadto meaningless controversy due to the distinction of religions andcivilizations between different regions. In Japan, the right way to eatnoodles is slurping nosily, if not, it means that you dislike thenoodles. Those who know nothing about this strange custom would thinkthat such slurping is rather impolite and uncivil. Consequently，conciseliteral interpretation is fairly conductive for reader to learn thefact accurately.

Furthermore, the written record plays a vital role in the transmissionof civilization. Assuming that after thousands of years when ouroffspring confront with stacks of pictures and disc, how they chooseand analyze them, how they know and study the civilization and historywe created entirely? 疑问语气用的挺到位的Just imagining that all kinds of books lying onthe shelves in the library have been substituted by those filled withpictures without any literal interpretation, can we make sure that wecould learn philosophy or history easily just by analyzing pictures?The intensive study of ancient civilization such as Mayas and Babylonis based on the decoding of hieroglyph. For this reason, civilizationcan never be transmitted completely and effectively from generations toanother without written records.

In conclusion, the role that written record plays in digital age isstill crucial. The combination of pictures and characters is the mosteffective way, which can provide us more accurate and convincingrecords of lives and history. The only thing we should pay moreattention is trying to avoid the misuse of pictures and excessivesubjective opinions in written records
  写的很好了，强！我的水平也一定不够，评的不好的请见谅

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13# xiaoxiaoW

谢谢点评哈``

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issue 8

Is it often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public? To be sure, whether withhold information or not depends on different situation.However, no matter how compelling reason showed, to withhold information from the public is to sacrifice people's right to know the truth, therefore, careful consideration should be given before any action.

Admittedly, withholding information from the public properly could bring more benefits than harms both individual and nation. For instance, if one successful political leader could always be confident and competent under the spotlight, it would help him to retain his prestige and administer national fairs more smoothly and effectively. In contrast, one political leader who deliberately expose his some flaws or eccentric preference that have no connection with his competence in politics to the public would probably win unnecessary antipathy from people, which exert negative influence on his work. When it comes to national interests, one film named Assembly can illustrate the significance of withholding information. The story happened during the World War Two that 47 soldiers took the responsibility to cover the troop's withdrawal and also were told to withdraw if heard the bugle for assembly. But the voice of bugle never closed to them, because the leader decided to protect the main force at the expense of these soldiers finally. Such withholding information is based on the premise that national interests come before everything else, which is cruel, but desirable.

Unfortunately, political leaders sometimes withhold information from the public in the name of maintaining social stability that deviate from the original purpose. In the last century, China underwent a series of reform led by Den Xiaoping, which was notable in the rapid growth of national economic and the policy of opening to the outside world. Nevertheless, leaders neglected the importance of reforming political system and still ruled the country by withholding information from the public despite people's demand for democracy. On June 4, 1989, thousands of students and workers who had stayed at Tiananmen Square for several days conflicted with the army, resulting in an unforgettable and unforgivable tragedy finally. From then on, China began to set foot on the path of reforming political system, althought we still have a long way to go, but both government and people are aware of the paramount importance of mutual trust and respect, which is the most meaningful thing we learn from this tragedy.

Government and its officers elected by people directly or indirectly should make every effort to represent the benefits of people and satisfy their reasonable demand. The most effective way is to let people know that what government can do and what government can not do. Only in this way are people willing to cooperate with government to realize the mutual goal they believe in .On the contrary, if government wished to win the favorable impression of people barely by making presumptuous promises and withholding information to hide their incompetence, it would only lead to the catastrophe of the whole society and nation. In sum, withholding information appropriately by political leaders is necessary even desirble, but please think twice before doing it.