Argument45 =so what=小组第二次作业 by xoxlol

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45.The following appeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.
"Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea."
北极鹿生活在加拿大极地区域的岛屿上。它们全年都通过冰块在岛屿间移动来寻找食物。它们的栖居地局限在那些温暖得足以维持它们所需的植物生长，并且在一年的至少某些时候冷到足以让岛屿间的海面结冰以使它们能够在岛屿间旅行的地方。然而，根据当地猎人的报告，鹿的数量正在下降。由于这一报告正好与最近导致海洋冰面融化的全球变暖趋势同时发生，我们可以得出结论：北极鹿数量的下降是它们无法按它们原有的迁移习惯穿越结冰海面的结果。
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提纲：
1. reliability of the report of local hunters
2. other factors may be responsible for the decreasing number of deer rather than ice melting caused by recent global warming trend.
3. global warming trend does not necessarily change the migration pattern.

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The arguer has drew a hasty conclusion that the number of deer in Canada's arctic area is decreasing based on a report of local hunters. Also, according to arguer’s assertion, the decreasing should be correlated with changes in deer's age-old migration pattern, which is caused by recent global warming. This argument seems reasonable at first glance, but a close examination reveals its logical flaws and invalidity in several aspects.
To begin with, no detailed information about how the report of local hunters was done, which leaves the reliability of the report in question. In another word, is the conclusion of declining deer population in the area solely based on local hunters' observation? If it is the case, then there is a good chance the number of deer has not decreased at all. Moreover, the reason of more deer disappearing in front of hunters may be a number of deer's migration to other areas due to several factors like lessened food in the local area or just simply to avoid hunters. Therefore, careful research of the deer population is in need to bolster the report of local hunters.
Assumingly, the number of deer in the arctic area does has decreased, however, simple equation of  the declining deer population and ice melting caused by recent global warming trend is unwarranted. Common sense and experience tells me certain alternative possibilities should be taken into account for the declining deer population such as unbalanced demand and supply between deer and plant they live on, increasing number of predators, over hunting by the locals, decreasing breed ability of deer itself and even the fact of natural election. So before factors above and many other unmentioned ones having been ruled out, melting ice could not solely responsible for the shrinking number of deer.
Additionally, the fact of global warming is insufficient to support arguer's asumption that the age-old migration pattern of deer has been changed. In the first place, no statistical or ground proof in the argument shows the level of global warming is serious enough to cause large scale ice melting that is able to jeopardize the migration pattern of deer. In the second place, ice melting and migration of deer does not necessarily happen at the same time of a year, or rather, ice melting has no impact on deer's annual migration due to different timings.
To sum up, the author's conclusion is invalid to some extent. Thus, further investigation is in need to provide more convincing proof and cogent reasoning about the population and living situation of deer in Canada's arctic areas.

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The arguer has drawn a hasty conclusion that the number of deer in Canada's arctic area is decreasing based on a report of local hunters. Also, according to arguer’s assertion, the decreasing should be correlated with changes in deer's age-old migration pattern, which is caused by recent global warming. This argument seems reasonable at first glance, but a close examination reveals its logical flaws and invalidity in several aspects （首段good!).


To begin with, no detailed information about how the report of local hunters was done, which leaves the reliability of the report in question. In another（other） word, is the conclusion of declining deer population in the area solely based on local hunters' observation? If it is the case, then there is a good chance the number of deer has not decreased at all. Moreover, the reason of more deer disappearing in front of hunters may be a number of deer's migration to other areas due to several factors like lessened food in the local area or just simply to avoid hunters. Therefore, careful research of the deer population is in need to bolster the report of local hunters.


Assumingly, the number of deer in the arctic area does has decreased, however, simple equation of  the declining deer population and ice melting caused by recent global warming trend is unwarranted. Common sense and experience tells me certain alternative possibilities should be taken into account for the declining deer population such as unbalanced demand and supply between deer and plant they lived on, increasing number of predators, over hunting by the locals, decreasing breed ability of deer itself and even the fact of natural election. So before factors above and many other unmentioned ones having been ruled out, melting ice could not solely responsible for the shrinking number of deer.


Additionally, the fact of global warming is insufficient to support arguer's assumption that the age-old migration pattern of deer has been changed. In the first place, no statistical or ground proof in the argument shows the level of global warming is serious enough to cause large scale ice melting that（，which can affect the migration pattern of deer） is able to jeopardize the migration pattern of deer. In the second place, ice melting and migration of deer does not necessarily happen at the same time of a year, or rather, ice melting has no impact on deer's annual migration due to different timings.


To sum up, the author's conclusion is invalid to some extent. Thus, further investigation is in need to provide more convincing proof and cogent reasoning about the population and living situation of deer in Canada's arctic area

ZhouPYFUID: 2633778

The arguer has drew a hasty conclusion that the number of deer in Canada's arctic area is decreasing based on a report of local hunters. Also, according to arguer’s assertion, the decreasing should be correlated with changes in deer's age-old migration pattern, which is caused by recent global warming. This argument seems reasonable at first glance（at first glance我有见过这个用法，但是很多人说这个说法太口语化了，不够书面）, but a close examination reveals its logical flaws and invalidity in several aspects. （很中规中矩开头 赞一个）
（每段之间要打一行空）
To begin with, no detailed information about how the report of local hunters was done, which leaves the reliability of the report in question. In another word, is the conclusion of declining deer population in the area solely based on local hunters' observation? If it is the case, then there is a good chance the number of deer has not decreased at all. Moreover, the reason of more deer disappearing in front of hunters may be a number of deer's migration to other areas due to several factors like lessened food in the local area or just simply to avoid hunters. Therefore, careful research of the deer population is in need to bolster the report of local hunters.
Assumingly, the number of deer in the arctic area does has decreased, however, simple equation of  the declining deer population and ice melting caused by recent global warming trend is unwarranted.（递进的写法思路赞，但是assumingly不是很常见，可能是我看的文章少，一般都用even if we concede that, 或者even granted that…） Common sense and experience tells me certain alternative possibilities should be taken into account for the declining deer population such as unbalanced demand and supply between deer and plant they live on, increasing number of predators, over hunting by the locals, decreasing breed ability of deer itself and even the fact of natural election. So before factors above and many other unmentioned ones having been ruled out, melting ice could not solely responsible for the shrinking number of deer.
Additionally, the fact of global warming is insufficient to support arguer's asumption that the age-old migration pattern of deer has been changed. In the first place, no statistical or ground proof in the argument shows the level of global warming is serious enough to cause large scale ice melting that is able to jeopardize the migration pattern of deer. In the second place, ice melting and migration of deer does not necessarily happen at the same time of a year, or rather, ice melting has no impact on deer's annual migration due to different timings.
To sum up, the author's conclusion is invalid to some extent. Thus, further investigation is in need to provide more convincing proof and cogent reasoning about the population and living situation of deer in Canada's arctic areas.
第一段写猎人的报告不靠谱
第二段写数目减少不一定是气候变暖造成的
第三段写气候变暖不一定影响鹿的数目
思路清晰，不过结尾看着真的很模版……呵呵