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143"Artists should pay little attention to their critics.* Criticism tends to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity."
*those who evaluate works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

The speaker suggests that the artists should pay little attention to their critics,because those critics tend to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity.Admittedly,criticism will wrongly evaluate works of art especially those which is against the established concept.Still,the critics could possess a kind of insight in some aspect which the artist do not.In addition,the critics could benefit the understanding of the public towards art.

Undeniable,a majority of critics are constrained by the conventional criterion of evaluation.The breakthrough of art is often  too innovative to be acceptable and suffers a lot negative feedback.Gao Vincent who is admired all over the world nowadays was ironically disapproval  when he was devoted to his fabulous works.What' s more,the critics are notorious for their nitpicking.They are so crazy to vilify others' works as if only by this way can they show their out-standing talent.The above two factors lead to the little if not harm the criticism do to the development of art.

Nevertheless,it is the ones who is far from perfect that contribute the main part of artists.Professional guidances and criticism could accelerate the upgrading of themselves and inspire them to explore new fields.For example,Guy de Maupassant who won the honor of "wold novelist"  was learning from Gustave Flaubert as student and owed his achievement partly to the teacher's strictness.Besides,critique also serves as the bridge between the works of art and the public.Various critiques would cover the most angels to evaluate the work from,which helps the public to appreciate it. And in the productive years,it is necessary to have someone ruled out the art of little value.That is why the elected booklist and painting exhibition according to their wide critique become more and more popular.In the end,a whole society with smart sense of art of course is the rich field that the prosperity of art needs exactly as the time of cultural renaissance.

All in all,we are supposed to be clear with the banes and boons of the criticism and select out the ones based on constructive opinions to learn from and the ones based on limited parameters to ignore.In order to make wise decisions artists have to improve their own capacity and that works for every non-professional as well.Under this circumstance,a healthy and active critical system is accessible which will play the role of catalyst for innovation of art.

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143"Artists should pay little attention to their critics.* Criticism tends to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity."
*those who evaluate works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
The speaker suggests that the artists should pay little attention to their critics, because those critics tend to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity. Admittedly, criticism will wrongly evaluate works of art especially those which is against the established concept.（让这话所显得得太绝对了吧，并不是所有的criticism 都wrongly evaluate works，题目也没这么说吧）
Still, the critics could possess a kind of insight in some aspect which the artists do not. In addition, the critics could benefit the understanding of the public towards art.（开头是不是再加个较为鲜明的观点会比较好啊）

Undeniable, a majority of critics are constrained by the conventional criterion of evaluation. The breakthrough of art is often too innovative to be acceptable and suffers a lot negative feedback. Gao Vincent who is admired all over the world nowadays was ironically disapproval  when he was devoted to his fabulous works. What's more, the critics are notorious for their nitpicking. They are so crazy to vilify others' works as if only by this way can they show their out-standing talent. The above two factors lead to the little if not harm the criticism do to the development of art.
Nevertheless, it is the one who is far from perfect that contribute the main part of artists. Professional guidance and criticism could accelerate the upgrading of themselves and inspire them to explore new fields. For example, Guy de Maupassant who won the honor of "wold novelist" was learning from Gustave Flaubert as student and owed his achievement partly to the teacher's strictness. Besides, critique also serves as the bridge between the works of art and the public. Various critiques would cover the most angels to evaluate the work from, which helps the public to appreciate it. And in the productive years, it is necessary to have someone ruled out the art of little value. That is why the elected booklist and painting exhibition according to their wide critique become more and more popular. In the end, a whole society with smart sense of art of course is the rich field that the prosperity of art needs exactly as the time of cultural renaissance.（这个总结的方向貌似有点偏，我感觉扣住主题artist和critics会更好, 而不是扣全社会的smart sense of art）另外，这段好像有点散吧？观点虽然多了，但都是论证略单薄，可以进一步在分段，进一步讨论。
All in all, we are supposed to be clear with the banes and boons of the criticism and select out the ones based on constructive opinions to learn from and the ones based on limited parameters to ignore. In order to make wise decisions artists have to improve their own capacity and
that works for every non-professional as well. Under this circumstance, a healthy and active critical system is accessible which will play the role of catalyst for innovation of art.（结尾也最好呼应下主题吧？）

文章整体还是蛮好，观点也提的相对较全。
但段落间和段落中显得有点不连贯，逻辑关系不强。
确实是水平有限，又改得不对的地方，也告诉我下，谢谢啦！

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The speaker suggests that the artists should pay little attention to their critics,because those critics tend to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity.Admittedly,criticism will probably wrongly evaluate works of art which is against the established concept.Still,the critics could possess a kind of insight in some aspect which the artist do not.In addition,the critics could benefit the understanding of the public towards art which is indispensable for the development of art.In this case,I don't concur with the speaker's assertion.

Undeniable,a majority of critics are constrained by the conventional criterion of evaluation.The breakthrough of art is often  too innovative to be acceptable and suffers a lot negative feedback.Gao Vincent who is admired all over the world nowadays was ironically disapproval  when he was devoted to his fabulous works.What' s more,the critics are notorious for their nitpicking.They are so crazy to vilify others' works as if only by this way can they show their out-standing talent.The above two factors lead to the little if not harm the criticism do to the development of art.

Nevertheless,it is the ones who are far from perfect that contribute the main part of artists.Professional guidances and criticism could accelerate the upgrading of themselves and inspire them to explore new fields.For example,Guy de Maupassant who won the honor of "wold novelist"  was learning from Gustave Flaubert as student and owed his achievement partly to the teacher's strictness.

Besides,critique also serves as the bridge between the works of art and the public.Various critiques would cover the most angels to evaluate the work from,which helps the public to appreciate it. And in the productive years,it is necessary to have someone ruled out the art of little value.That is why the elected booklist and painting exhibition according to their wide critique become more and more popular.In the end,a whole society with smart sense of art of course is the rich field that the prosperity of art needs exactly as the time of Renaissance.

All in all,we are supposed to be clear with the banes and boons of the criticism and select out the ones based on constructive opinions to learn from and the ones based on limited parameters to ignore.In order to make wise decisions artists have to improve their own capacity and that works for every non-professional as well.Under this circumstance,a healthy and active critical system is accessible which will play the role of catalyst for innovation of art instead of restriction.

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143"Artists should pay little attention to their critics.* Criticism tends to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity."

*those who evaluate works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.



The speaker suggests that the artists should pay little attention to their critics, because those critics tend to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity. Admittedly, criticism will probably wrongly evaluate works of art which is against the established concept. Still, the critics could possess a kind of insight in some aspect which the artist does not. In addition, the critics could benefit the understanding of the public towards art which is indispensable for the development of art. In this case, I don't concur with the speaker's assertion.
（这段虽然给出了thesis statement，但是并没有直接表明对这个argument的立场。我觉得哦~观点要直击argument的痛处，你这段讲的这些个可以作为supportstatement旁敲侧击应该没什么问题的。
See~你都是在讲critic还存在的价值，即使你说的都很convincing，so what~~ critic存在一定得价值并不意味着Criticism doesn’t tend to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity.呀~）


Undeniable, a majority of critics are constrained by the conventional criterion of evaluation. The breakthrough of art is often too innovative to be acceptable and suffers a lot negative feedback. Gao Vincent who is admired all over the world nowadays was ironically disapproval when he was devoted to his fabulous works. What' s more, the critics are notorious for their nitpicking. They are so crazy to vilify others' works as if only by this way can they show their out-standing talent. The above two factors lead to the little if not harms the criticism do to the development of art.（段末有paraphrase你首段admittedly***的内容，虽然很八股，但我觉得会更好~）

Nevertheless, it is the ones who are far from perfect that contribute the main part of artists. Professional guidances（UC.） and criticism could accelerate the upgrading of themselves and inspire them to explore new fields. For example, Guy de Maupassant who won the honor of "world novelist" was learning from Gustavo Flaubert as student and owed his achievement partly to the teacher's strictness. (看完这个例子，没觉得它support黑体的观点不够powerful，可以细讲一下啊~~比如Guy的身份，Gustavo的身份，点出来会好很多)

Besides, critique also serves as the bridge between the works of art and the public. Various critiques would cover the most angels to evaluate the work from, which helps the public to appreciate it. And in the productive years, it is necessary to have someone ruled out the art of little value. That is why the elected booklist and painting exhibition according to their wide critique become more and more popular. In the end, a whole society with smart sense of art of course is the rich field that the prosperity of art needs exactly as the time of Renaissance.

All in all, we are supposed to be clear with the banes and boons of the criticism and select out the ones based on constructive opinions to learn from and the ones based on limited parameters to ignore. In order to make wise decisions artists have to improve their own capacity and that works for every non-professional as well. Under this circumstance, a healthy and active critical system is accessible which will play the role of catalyst for innovation of art instead of restriction.（结尾挺好的了，还有一些提升，呵呵~但还是那个问题~最好我oppose的立场还是要点出来的。）

要改进的地方：
1.标点后一个space，除了前引号
2.为虾米关于artist的creativity通篇都没有看到捏…咦~看到innovation了…*^^*
3.个人的感觉啊，不要总是旁敲侧击，外国人不能领悟含蓄的文字…要直接点出立场。
4.有选择地接受我的建议吧~~个人意见而已~